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First Sentence Contest
This is an idea I came up with in an attempt to help revive BaB!
I will provide a summary of an invented book (it doesn't have to be actually written, just a book idea -- and it cannot be an already published book). Then you will post a sentence that you think would make a good first sentence for the book.
Remember, first sentences are very important. It's what pulls you in and keeps you reading. Books with good first sentences are usually very good.
Deadline is October 16. I will judge on the 17. Whoever wins first place will be the next judge. If you win first place and would rather not judge please tell me and the role of judge will go to the second place winner.
Let me know if you have any questions or suggestions! I look forward to reading your first sentences.
Story Summary:
Humans have finally landed on Mars. The human habitat is encased in domes of transparent material. Drones big enough to transport people fly around, hovering above the surface of Mars. Contact with Earth is strong and extremely important. Everything is going well, until contact with Earth ceases. No one knows why and things are tense. When one of the transparent domes start leaking the precious air into the Mars atmosphere the tenseness escalates at an alarming pace. There isn't enough oxygen and supplies to share with others for long. Groups of humans turn against other groups. Everyone is blaming another and nothing towards fixing the problems is being done. Sevianna -- a young girl born on Mars who has never seen or set foot on Earth -- realizes that something must be done. The adults aren't doing anything, so she gathers the other Martian children. Together they must save the human habitat and reconnect with Earth. It is a daunting task and many children give up. Soon only Sevianna and three other children are left trying to fix the problems. Can so few do it? Or are they doomed with the rest of the humans on Mars?
submitted by Peregrine, age Many moons, The Eyrie
(October 6, 2020 - 10:25 am)
(October 6, 2020 - 10:25 am)
My threadbare boots clattered on the rough stone stairs as I ran down, looking for an escape. The cook's harsh words rang in my ears as I twisted through the maze of dark tunnels that made up the dungeon, not looking or caring where I was going. Finally I sank to the floor, then started as a raspy, creaky voice floated out of the darkness. "Hello, child," it said.
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Sorry this is a little long. When's the judging date?
(March 10, 2021 - 11:29 am)
I remember when the tale of the Hidden Princess was nothing more than just that, a bedtime story like those of Sleeping Beauty, Snow White and Rose Red, or Benjamin and the Lightning Rod. Everything was so much easier then... but almost anything would be easier than being the rebel Rightful Queen and hiding in a tavern's back room with her uncle, who is either an escaped prisoner or a royal prince.
(March 17, 2021 - 5:51 pm)
"I'm sorry, you think I'm your what?" Ariella squinted through the darkness of the dungeon, hoping the old man was delusional, and at the same time hoping he was telling the truth.
(March 9, 2021 - 3:13 pm)
@MoonKitten, judging is on the 21.
(March 10, 2021 - 10:27 pm)
You look at a marble room with cold floors and a ceiling so heigh that even the giants can't touch it. A wax shandiler hangs over head, dripping wax on the people below it. You smile. The world is still spinning round an you don't have anything to worry about. Nothing you know of at least. Though by the end of this meetting you probably will. That is the point after all.
(March 11, 2021 - 10:13 am)
Guess I am a little late!
The controls look more complicated than I thought, but I push all doubt out of my mind. All the other children are staring at me, I can feel there trust, almost as much as I feel my own axiousness.
(March 11, 2021 - 1:48 pm)
(March 15, 2021 - 12:43 pm)
The castle was a cold place, but the council made it colder. They prowled the long hallways, silken robes swishing around corners, beaked noses looking out for trouble.
Two sentences are allowed right? Also am I too late?
(March 23, 2021 - 12:04 pm)
(April 6, 2021 - 12:31 pm)
I'm SO SORRY I fogot about this!! Here is the judging, I'm sorry it's a little rushed!
3rd Place ~ Lupine! I liked how you used a different tactic than everyone else- using the council instead of her encounter with her uncle :)
2nd Place ~ Luminescence! You did such a great job setting the scene, and I think that it intriuges the reader and leaves them wanting more!
1st Place ~ Morning! I think that your scentences did an amazing job of showing the reader perspective by using familiar fairy tales and then shoving us right into the thick of the action <3
(April 7, 2021 - 10:17 am)
Thanks so much for giving me first! I'm on vacation with bad internet right now, so this post is just a placeholder saying not to replace me as a judge, and I'll post the summary tomorrow or the next day.
(April 10, 2021 - 11:29 pm)
This is a beginning reader book that mayor may not have rhyming. It is about a cat named Little Miss Kitty who goes to the store to buy goat cheese from a cow, then sees a bunch of people who are friends with eachother. She becomes desperately lonely, until she befriends a magical unicorn/elephant who forgot how to use a lights with and thinks he is blind.. It is about the power of friendship and how it can change lives.
(April 13, 2021 - 9:14 am)