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I am sososososososososoSO

I am sososososososososoSO sorry I've been gone, so many things I said I would do I haven't, and I'm sorry, and @Fleet, I SWEAR I WILL GET YOUR POETIC PICUTRING DONE SOON IM SSSSSSSSSOOOOOOOOORRRRRRRRRYYYYYYYYYYY!!!!! Anyways I'm writing this really long story (cricket wise, not like chapter long or anything) and I'm gonna post it in chunks and please tell me if you like it!!* runs really fast out or room* *pops head back in* P.S. @Admins sorry if this is really long and annoying to you...

Part 1:

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“Mom?” I called as I walked down the stairs. There was no answer, and I hadn’t expected there to be one. Mom had been dead for three years now, I just want it to not be true. I want her to still be out there, waiting.

Lauren came down with her phone in her hand. She walked into the kitchen where I was. I was sitting at the table eating a breakfast bar. I sat silently, I knew she hated me. I had tried talking to her when I was younger, and it failed miserably. She was a brat. My stepmom and dad loved her, and were kinda disgusted by me. They hate how I am different, in many, many ways. I have two different colored eyes, and a birth mark on my face, and I’m a tom boy. But my parents, if I can call them that, they want a beautiful, perfect daughter who gives the pride. Not a daughter who is different, not a daughter who is weak and lonely, not me. Never me.

I was lying in my bed that night when a thought hit me. I should run away, to somewhere better, somewhere kinder. I should run away, straight into my mother’s arms. If only I could. My world had been turned upside down, from that moment on a cold November day 3 years ago, if only I could change everything, if only I could turn back time and change my dad’s mind. If only the world wasn’t the worst place to be every moment in my life. If only every up time I wanted to curl up and cry I wasn’t punched in the gut by whatever life throws at me. If only I was normal.

 

 

submitted by Sunshine Wings, age 10, nowhere to be found
(October 6, 2019 - 12:28 pm)

oops, i didn't mean to put @Fleet for my name XD

submitted by Sunshine Wings, age 10, nowhere to be found
(October 12, 2019 - 10:41 am)

It's so good!!!!! The ending is so brilliant. 

submitted by cerinthe
(October 12, 2019 - 11:03 am)

THIS WAS AWESOME THANK YOU SO MUCH FOR SHARING THE STORY WITH US!!!!!!!!!

submitted by Aqua, (marine)
(October 18, 2019 - 4:22 pm)

Wow, this is great, Sunshine Wings! I like your writing style; it's very direct. Also, this story is just beautiful.

submitted by Summer, age pi, Nowhere at all
(October 12, 2019 - 11:41 am)

I wish that I could write like that. But just a suggestion, from a fellow 10-year-old... Work on show-not-tell. For example, at the part where you wrote, '...red-faced mad'... You didn't have to put the word mad. You could simply put, '...face was turning red', or, as I like to write, purple!

I hope that I'm not offending you with my advice. Honestly, I tend to be nit-picky even with published books(I'm always spotting the mistakes!), and I'm just a fellow writer like you... Please take this well! I don't want to hurt your feelings!

 

submitted by Clovertoe, age 24 Moons, WindClan
(October 14, 2019 - 10:36 am)

Oh no problem! thanks for the advice, it is very much appreciated! 

submitted by Sunshine Wings, @clovertoe
(October 14, 2019 - 2:39 pm)

SAME!!!! about seeing mistakes in published books. It happens to me SO OFTEN, and sometimes I literally feel like i could write better than that!

submitted by cerinthe@Clovertoe
(October 14, 2019 - 9:23 pm)

You can be a perfect writer Sunshine Wings !

It was a superb great story !

 

submitted by Bibi P
(October 16, 2019 - 7:20 pm)

thank you so much!

submitted by Sunshine Wings@bibi, age 10, nowhere to be found
(October 17, 2019 - 6:12 pm)

Thank you all so much!!! I'm glad you all like it!

submitted by Sunshine Wings, @everyone
(October 18, 2019 - 7:12 pm)

Beautiful!

submitted by Cat, age reading, the universe
(October 22, 2019 - 6:42 pm)

TOP please!

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submitted by .
(October 28, 2019 - 10:03 am)

TOP please!

submitted by sTOPit!, age top years, Topopolis
(October 30, 2019 - 12:41 pm)