Say My NameH

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Say My NameH

Say My Name

Hi everyone! So for my English final my class had to write a short story about anything we wanted and I thought that I could share it with you guys! If you have any feedback please feel free to let me know! 

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It is interesting to look back on the past and realize how you were deceived, isn’t it? How everyone around you was aware of something, and you weren’t. How easily they could keep the truth from you, and you didn’t question it. Now, let me tell you a story.
There was once a girl who was fighting in a war. She was pretty talented and was the best in combat. Now, this war was between the many sectors of her planet. Each sector had separated into two sides: The first side was fighting to stay under their current form of government. They called their leader a Supreme Leader, and they called themselves the Supreme. The other side was the Rebellion.
The girl in this story was on the first side. She was assigned to a team called Team Alpha. They were active throughout the entirety of the war, with many members cycling through the ranks. This team was elite. There was no mission that they couldn’t complete.
One day, the team was called in to face their opposing team. This opposing team was on the Rebellion side, as it was becoming to be known as. Both sides were equally matched, but this time, the Rebellion came out victorious. The leader of Team Alpha was severely wounded, leaving the girl in our story to lead the team. Then one of the Rebellion members did something that the girl would never forget; they said her name.
Now, an essential part of this story is that the girl didn’t have a name. Or a past that she bothered to remember. She was broken and damaged. She had been told about an accident, one where her parents were at fault, and the Supreme Leader saved a girl. She never had a name. She was addressed as “soldier” or “agent.” Another thing was that she was a child. But back to our story:
The Rebellion member said the girl’s name, and the girl remembered it. She knew this person, maybe from her past. Who were they? They held out their hand, “Come with us,” they said, “you’re on the wrong side of the war.”
Her team members shouted at her. They had to leave because their leader could only hold on for so long.
Did they have names? Her team? She expected the Rebellion to be the same as the Supreme, but they knew each other as something else. Not just soldiers. How old was she anyway? How old were the Rebellion members? They looked really young.
She shook her head and rushed back to her team. They managed to escape, but a seed of doubt had planted in the girl’s head. She wanted to address this with the Supreme Leader.
I’m sure you understand where this story is going, right? The girl will realize who she is, and she will switch sides because the Rebellion is in the right. The Supreme Leader is evil, and the girl is brainwashed. I’m pretty sure you were thinking that. Well, I hate to disappoint, but that is not the case. This is not some cliche story with a right and wrong side. Real-life doesn’t work like that.
The girl couldn’t get an opportunity to speak with the Supreme Leader for quite some time. She kept herself busy fighting, there was a war going on, but the thoughts crossed her mind. Did the Supreme Leader know what happened to her? Was she from the Rebellion? She kept noticing that the Rebellion sent out young soldiers. She kept trying to figure out what was happening in the Rebellion.
One day, Team Alpha was out on a mission, and the girl came face to face with the Rebellion leader. He repeated her name, “Come with me.”
The girl refused and demanded to know how he knew her name.
“It’s simple really, you belong with us. This war is twisted, and we need you back.”
The girl, again, refused. She asked about the soldiers she had seen; they looked so young.
“We’re desperate. The children are our only hope.”
The Rebellion was using children as their soldiers. The girl couldn’t believe it. Why didn’t they just accept defeat?
“Accept defeat? You don’t understand. You’re just a child. If we accept defeat, they will kill us all!”
The girl was offended. The Supreme Leader was merciful! And she was not just a child; she understood this world and its insanity.
“No, you don’t. You’re so naive. Listen, I don’t have any more time. You need to come with me now.”
The girl was frightened. The Rebellion Leader was commanding her, and she didn’t even know this person. She wouldn’t go with him.
“Come with me now.” He grabbed her arm.
She pulled away, and they were locked in combat. Punch after punch, kick after kick, it was clear that the Rebellion Leader was stronger. Dylan noticed and immediately came over to help the girl. Together they overtook the leader, and he retreated with his team.
The girl was frightened and demanded to meet with the Supreme Leader. She got the meeting, and it started off quite tense. She expressed her concerns about how the Rebellion knew something or thought they knew something. The Supreme Leader realized that she thought the Rebellion was her true family. That was most certainly not the case.
The Supreme Leader sat the girl down and told her the story of what really happened. They avoided this topic because it may have been too much for the girl, but there was no more hiding.
The Supreme Leader told her the story of how her parents were members of the Rebellion. They had allowed their own child to be experimented on by the Rebellion to form a perfect weapon. The Supreme had attacked the specific base where she was, and there was an accident. She forgot her entire past up until that moment. The Supreme took her back with them because the Rebellion was becoming inhumane; the Supreme wanted to protect her. She was perfectly designed to fight in battle, so they let her. If she wanted out, all she had to do was ask.
The girl couldn’t believe what she had heard; this was the truth. Her own parents had let her be an experiment. The Rebellion was becoming reckless and desperate, and they needed to be stopped. And that was precisely what the girl was going to do. Well, that’s what she thought she would do.
Most stories end right there, the main character has hope and a passion, and we hope she succeeds in her goal. Well, there’s a little bit more to this story. I happen to have a close connection to this story; I am that girl. And we did defeat the Rebellion but at a cost. I sacrificed my life for the Supreme. I figured out who I was, and I guess that was my purpose.

 

submitted by Skip
(May 23, 2021 - 8:11 pm)

Wow, Skip! I love the way you made this story so... what's the word... unconventional! The characters are beautiful, and I especially lke the way you showed that the story wasn't normal: "I’m sure you understand where this story is going, right? The girl will realize who she is, and she will switch sides because the Rebellion is in the right. The Supreme Leader is evil, and the girl is brainwashed. I’m pretty sure you were thinking that. Well, I hate to disappoint, but that is not the case. This is not some cliche story with a right and wrong side. Real-life doesn’t work like that."

submitted by Wreeboo, age Immortal, Castle Araluen
(May 24, 2021 - 8:17 am)

Thank you! I have never really liked cliche stories (with a few exceptions). Normal is overrated.

submitted by Skip
(May 24, 2021 - 1:51 pm)

Skip - this is SO AMAZING! I mean, your style of writing is stunning, and the story is just, well, so good. Your wordings, characters, descriptions, and plot are just great and I think your English teacher will Love this unique and creative story. You such a clever writier Skip! Amazing Job! 

submitted by Neverseen
(May 25, 2021 - 1:21 pm)

Eek! thank you! I turned it in and unfortunatly my English teacher takes wayyyy too long to grade so I won't know how I did on it for a while. Thank you again!!

submitted by Skip
(May 25, 2021 - 9:00 pm)

That was amazing Skip! I loved it and it was really interesting to read! Great job!

submitted by Barnswallow
(May 26, 2021 - 7:04 am)

Interesting, intteresting~

This is absolutely intriguing, and I like your style!

submitted by Jaybells, age Obscure, Lost in thought
(May 28, 2021 - 12:15 am)