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Regular poetry thread (because I'm tired of not editing my poems)
This is exactly what it sounds like! A thread to post poetry. I'm excited to read all of your work!
submitted by Bluebird
(April 30, 2017 - 8:51 pm)
(April 30, 2017 - 8:51 pm)
Oh, oops, that's because I pasted and copied it from my writing website, and it kept the title linked (they're linked on there so that you can click on them individually). XD
I just deleted the link. Thanks for telling us.
Admin
(August 27, 2017 - 5:07 pm)
I was inspired by Lucy's poem about stars, so I wrote one too. I hope it doesn't seem like I stole her idea.
i love the stars
how they
shine down
Every night
no matter what
unconditionally
and even when
i can't see them
i know they're always there
i love gazing up at their
unfiltered light
and i hate it when
they are taken over
by street lamps
and smoke clouds
i love it when the
big broad sky is
clear and black
and i can see
thousands of tiny lights
glimmering
just for me
i love the stars
too much to
fear the dark
sometimes i just want to
touch the stars
i don't care if it kills me
once upon a time
there was a place
where every star could shine
without being
hidden
behind
city lights
and
blinking cars
so come with me
let's find a place
where we can see
every star
__________
I would love critique and title suggestions!
(August 27, 2017 - 2:44 pm)
Ooh! I love this one! Especially the lasts 13 lines. I don't have any critique because I think this is really good! What about "unfiltered light" for the title? Or something to do with the stars always being up there?
(August 28, 2017 - 9:16 am)
Thank you! I think the last thirteen lines are my favorite, too. I like unfiltered light for the title! I'm thinking about using either that, or maybe Starlight...
(August 29, 2017 - 8:49 am)
Oh, I think that title could also work!
Also, TOP! Poke this to the TOP!
(August 31, 2017 - 9:35 am)
hey guys! here's my first poem that I ever posted on cricket! Hope you like it!
{School}
All the personalities and colors
Blending together
Into one
Big
Place
Of magic
Beyond all you ever imagined.
But then in walks
The teacher
Brown and dull
Or so you think
And then you realize
She is really
Much different than you thought.
Thoughts and opinions
All hidden inside
One average person.
(August 31, 2017 - 8:36 pm)
I love your poem, Leeli! How about Everlasting Light for the title? Unfiltered Light is cool too! Awesome poem!
(August 31, 2017 - 9:58 pm)
Thank you! Ooh, I like that title as well! I like your poem, too! It makes some interesting points.
(September 1, 2017 - 9:26 am)
@September, thanks!
XD now that I'm reading through it again, I'm noticing more typos. Oh well.
(September 1, 2017 - 10:12 am)
Top! POKE this to the TOP for poets!
(September 3, 2017 - 4:16 pm)
(September 4, 2017 - 3:51 pm)
I'm going to try something I like to call a "typewriter poem". What I mean by that is I put down lines as I think of them, and I can't go back and change them later. Like something typed on a typewriter
MOONSHINE
Moonshine
shining down
cool earth
reaching up
up up up
to the moonshine
up up up
to the star sparkle
up up up
to the galaxy glimmer
and the moonshine
shining down
down down down
to the cool earth
down down down
to the quiet earth
down down down
to the sleeping earth
but i
look up
look up up up
to the moonshine.
That was pretty cool! I'm going to try another, but not a typewriter poem this time.
REFUSE TO LET GO
seek
the stars
reach
for the moon
grab
the sun
and refuse to let go
find
your place
a
treasure trove
hold
on tight
and refuse to let go
say
you're stong
say
you're bold
say
you can
and refuse to back down
That's all I got for now. Maybe more later?
~Starseeker
(September 6, 2017 - 8:34 pm)
This is cool! I like your style. I think you should post more!
(September 7, 2017 - 9:17 am)
@Leafpool:
Thanks! I can't think of anything besides a few lines that have been churning around in my head for a while now...
I am the dreamer of dreams
I am the maker of mischief
(insert line here)
I know not everything's quite as it seems.
Could somebody help me out? I want it to be longer, plus there's the problem of the missing line.
~Starseeker
(September 7, 2017 - 11:45 am)
The first thing that popped into my head when I saw the missing line was:
"I am the seamstress of stars and the spinner of stories"
I'm working on a poem; I'll post it soon.
(September 9, 2017 - 1:33 pm)