Regular poetry thread

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Regular poetry thread

Regular poetry thread (because I'm tired of not editing my poems)

This is exactly what it sounds like! A thread to post poetry. I'm excited to read all of your work!

submitted by Bluebird
(April 30, 2017 - 8:51 pm)

Gorgeous, I love the descriptions and deep thinking! 

submitted by Jaybells, age Classified, Lost in the Universe
(June 8, 2019 - 9:33 am)

Again, would love critique and/or a title suggestion?? Thanks so much!!!

untitled~ 

if you could re-write

fairy tales, you ask me 

in english class, what 

 

would you do?

 

we are reading romeo

 

and juliet— i already 

 

know what happens

 

don’t we all? sleeping 

 

beauty wouldn’t need

 

a prince to wake her 

 

up, i say, cinderella 

 

wouldn’t have to get 

 

married to escape her 

 

evil step-sisters, snow 

 

white doesn’t need a prince

 

charming and never will. 

 

neither will any of us

 

because we’re all 

 

princesses in disguise. 

 

chin up, or the crown slips,

 

darling, we’re all feminists

 

and princesses need their 

 

crowns but not their princes

 

i tell you; we can’t re-write

 

history, but we can pre-write

 

the future. 

submitted by September
(May 12, 2017 - 10:27 pm)

WHOA, that last line is great! Princess need their/ crowns but not their princes/ i tell you: we can't re-write/ history, but we can pre-write/ the future/ Can that just be the motto for femenism everywhere? I also love the line /chin up, or the crown slips/ This whole poem is so empowering! For titles... princess in disguise? I don't know.

submitted by Bluebird
(May 13, 2017 - 9:22 pm)

Thank you so much, Bluebird!!! 

submitted by September
(May 14, 2017 - 12:59 pm)

I don't even have words for this, it's so good! I love the end especially. Princesses need their/ crowns but not their princes/ I tell you; we can't rewrite/ history, but we can pre-write/ the future. This is is so amazing!

submitted by Crookshanks, age 2nd year, Hogsmeade
(June 6, 2017 - 10:22 am)

I was inspired to write this after a song. Part of the lyrics go, "You make beautiful things/ you make beautiful things out the dust/ you make beautiful things/ you make beautiful things out of us...". I also included partof another song, called "Be Still".

Dust

Ashes to ashes

Dust to dust

Day to night

Night to day

 

We'll all return

To who we are

Back to dust

In time

 

All is well

Just be still

Ashes to ashes

Dust to dust

 

But after all

You make beautiful things

You make beautiful things out of the dust

You make beautiful things

You make beautiful things out of us...

~~~

submitted by Starseeker, age 154 moons, Nightwing Kingdom
(May 13, 2017 - 11:19 am)

Ooh, nice! It has a really song-y feel to it too!

submitted by September
(May 13, 2017 - 2:50 pm)

I posted this poem on InkWell, and the responses I got from other CBers made me feel less self-conscious about my bullying issues, so I thought I could be more open about sharing how I felt when I found out that people were talking about me behind my back.

I'm drowning
In the abyss that is my feelings.
My stomach is tied in knots
As I think.
My heart will grow cold
As my soul is soon sold,
And I'll be a different person forever.

But if I refuse,
I'm sure that I'll lose,
Their voice like a noose,
Holding me down,
Making me drown,
And then I'll be back to the start.

Again, if I refuse,
They'll untie my shoes,
And watch as I trip,
Watch the tears drip,
Into a whirlpool of feelings,
That'll drown me, now seething,

And then I'll be back at the start.  

submitted by Lucy B., age 12, California
(May 14, 2017 - 12:52 am)

Oh, Lucy, I know the feeling. You can always talk to us! People talking behind my back is something I used to spend a lot of time worrying about, too. *hugs* It's going to get so much better, trust me. I was in the same boat last year, you'd be amazed at how much has changed and how much more I feel like I know. You're going get that confidence soon! Awesome poem, Lucy!

submitted by Bluebird, age 13
(May 14, 2017 - 11:10 am)

September. Oh. My. Gosh. How? That. Was.... Amazing? Wow. 

because we’re all/princesses in disguise./chin up, or the crown slips,/darling, we’re all feminists/and princesses need their/ crowns but not their princes 

And I'm just dying in the background here....

 

Here's something I wrote a while ago.

~~

When you

smiled at me

i tried to pretend

i was merely being nice

when i smiled back

 

when you

said hi

i tried to pretend

i wasn't blushing

when i waved

 

when you

stopped to talk

in the hallway

i tried to pretend

it was normal

when i stuttered

 

when you

asked me out

i didn't even try to

hide the fact

that a hundred thousand lights were

exploding in my heart. 

submitted by Leafpool
(May 14, 2017 - 11:09 am)

Awwwww!! Leafpool, this made me smile. I especially love that last part: I didn't even try to/ hide the fact/ that a hundred thousand lights were/ exploding in my heart.

submitted by Bluebird
(May 14, 2017 - 2:19 pm)

Oooh! So relatable, right!

submitted by Jaybells, age Classified, Lost in the Universe
(June 8, 2019 - 9:34 am)

Everything I Would Say to the Choir

By me

"You freak!"
"Go away!"
Gee, that isn't nice to say!
Now you laugh
Behind my back,
How do you think I feel?

You pull my backpack,
Watch me turn,
See me angry,
You'll never learn
When I ask you
"Why'd you do that?"

Then you say,
"It's just fate!"

Nope, sorry,
It's too late. 

submitted by Lucy B., age 12, California
(May 14, 2017 - 3:09 pm)

I do not know what this is. I was feeling really happy when I wrote this poem (if you can call it a poem...?). I'm posting it as a screenshot because I don't think it will look the same as it did on the ducument I wrote it on, so...

Poem1.png
submitted by Bluebird
(May 14, 2017 - 4:59 pm)

Oh wow. This is beautiful, Bluebird! I love this, especially the lines: even more, i/ love crying because it feels like winter (death and resurrection)/i love wind so much, it's like freedom in a gaseous state

submitted by September
(May 14, 2017 - 11:11 pm)