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Regular poetry thread

Regular poetry thread (because I'm tired of not editing my poems)

This is exactly what it sounds like! A thread to post poetry. I'm excited to read all of your work!

submitted by Bluebird
(April 30, 2017 - 8:51 pm)

@Jaybells, thank you for the compliments, it means so much to me!! I do agree that my poems have been getting angsty, though.

submitted by LS@Jaybells
(January 9, 2020 - 9:57 pm)
So, this poem is from 2 peoples' point of view, the first part is one person the second is the other.
Free
behind those crysral blue eyes,
tinged with grey
behind the fierce look
that makes my shiver
behind the mocking and laughing
that your wicked tounge spews
behind that painted smile
you plaster on each day, 
i see it
i see it rising, bubbling to the surface
each day, growing, wanting to be free
you push down, away
out of sight
only, i can see it
i can see the fear
wanting to escape 
you can't always hide away
you can't always cover everything up 
let it be free
let go
i will catch you, hold you upright
though you are cruel, and spiteful
i see it, i know
i know that feeling
so i will catch you
i will let you fall into my arms
if only you let it free
let go 
i feel it rising, growing
wanting to escape
but, no, no, it can't
stay strong
don't let the fear show
push it down
don't let anyone see
i am not weak
i do not have fear
i am strong
but the more i hold it in
the more i want to burst
if only there was a way
to let go
to be free
to be loved
i know i'm a bad person
i know i am rotten
but if i let go
if i am free
maybe the hellish part of me
will be free to
will walk away
will stop haunting me
......
i let go 
submitted by Spellbound, age 10, nowhere to be found
(January 11, 2020 - 9:51 am)

oops, after 

"if only you let it free

let go"

i meant to separate it, the rest of the poem after is person 2 

submitted by Spellbound, age 10, nowhere to be found
(January 11, 2020 - 6:51 pm)

I actually like it without the break - it creates a smooth transition between the two views, and I was able to find the switch anyway. Although, if you entered it into a contest where you couldn't provide a description telling the reader it was two views, then you might want to separate it. Either way is still good.

submitted by CignusMoon, age 165 moons, The Story World
(February 9, 2020 - 10:11 pm)

Ooh, if this was submitted in a contest I think it would win! I like all the imagery and strong vocabulary, and the fact that there are two points of view makes it all the more interesting!

submitted by Jaybells, age Classified, Lost in the Universe
(January 11, 2020 - 9:04 pm)

OMG, thank you SO MUCH!!! That really means a lot to me, because you are honestly, SO GOOD and active and fhrkdfgwdkfhjskd THANK YOU!!! I also thought it became too story-ish and not poem-ish at the end. So, yeah :)!

submitted by Spellbound, age 10, nowhere to be found
(January 12, 2020 - 8:13 pm)

Eek, I'm glad someone thinks so highly of me! I get rather intimidated by trying to manage to stay on here so often, and it's always surprising to get praised like that, thank you!

submitted by Jaybells, age Classified, Lost in the Universe
(January 13, 2020 - 8:11 pm)

Dark stages lit

by blinding yellow lights,

tape marks positions for 

the aspiring stars,

Ready to join 

the universe beyond

their old wings.

submitted by Jaybells, age Classified, Lost in the Universe
(January 11, 2020 - 9:31 pm)

i want to write some words

tumbleweed in a desert and the sand plasters inside your

lungs cuase this place is 

neverending and the news anchor is raving about some

tweet that's already gone into an

abbyss of words and thoughts and people who can never realize that

this will all be gone someday and i always wonder

how people can still ask questions whose

answers rest with god and are never to

dance on the unholy tongues of humankind because

we reamin ignorant to our ignorance in our

inflated problems and

chipped nails and honking horns and bad days that will

never add up in a world where 

first world problems dominate the plain when

staration and poverty lie on the horizon burning as an 

icarus by the setting sun while halley's comet burns a trail through the

memory of an unbroken sky, we are made of the

tears of the heavens and to the sky we shall return 

submitted by Luna-Starr, age 27 eons, Existential Ponderment
(January 24, 2020 - 10:12 pm)

Beautiful. Normally I'm not a big fan of poems that split all the lines in the middle of the sentence, but here I think it creates a sort of momentum when you read it that adds to the effect of the poem.

submitted by CignusMoon, age 165 moons, The Story World
(February 9, 2020 - 10:14 pm)

And so the lolcat-child doth said;

"If it fits- Alas!- I sits." And so it sat,

On the tiny chair upon the mat,

As the rain came pouring down. 

 

The dripping sky did quaver in its head,

And thought "This rain! oh, it shan't be my best" 

The clouds did try to power through the rest,

Although the child began to frown. 

 

Quoth he, "Why can't the rain just e'er leave me alone?"

"When eves't I try to sit, it falls,"

"The roof a-sending water down the walls,"

"Until the drywall breaks into decay!"

 

The rain replied with pitious bemoan,

"I must continue till the wind a-comes-"

"Fiercely with its tower-topping hums,"

"And blows my sorry form of danger-flood away."

 

The child- in a tit-for-tat, spoke,

"Catch me outside, how 'bout that" 

And left the flooding shed to see the rain-

 

Who facepalmed in its ever-shrinking pride,

and cried,

"You foolish child, just go back inside!" 

 

The child didn't listen then, and fell into a puddle, miles deep.

He didn't want to try to go to sleep,

For he had turned into a giant squid.

 

The rains, although no less annoyed

Did try to calm themself henceforth,

For the irritating child of questionable demeanor managed to not drown. 

The end 

 

submitted by Alizarine
(January 25, 2020 - 8:57 am)

Ha! This reminds me of the Jabberwocky a little bit- a nce rhythm and fancy mannerisms that's just nonsensical but still has a clear story. I like this!

submitted by LS@Alizarine
(January 25, 2020 - 3:31 pm)

This is really funny! I like how the language is sort of archaic, but the termology is all very modern, it's rather jarring.

submitted by Jaybells, age Classified, Lost in the Universe
(January 26, 2020 - 8:37 am)

Thank you both XD

submitted by Alizarine
(January 27, 2020 - 1:37 pm)

A strain of starlight pulled from the moon

Fending the sun away,

An echo of song lost to the faeries'

Warning keen,

Figure disorted by purple mist,

Haze seeming all-encapsuling,

But yet does Ra show his face

Casting toils and hardships

Upon the enormous writhing snake. 

submitted by Jaybells, age Classified, Lost in the Universe
(February 7, 2020 - 1:23 pm)