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Regular poetry thread

Regular poetry thread (because I'm tired of not editing my poems)

This is exactly what it sounds like! A thread to post poetry. I'm excited to read all of your work!

submitted by Bluebird
(April 30, 2017 - 8:51 pm)

Imma do one on change!

US

When we first met
We were both in ballet
I was seven
You were eight

You hated your glasses
But I always tried them on
You had an American Girl Doll
When I only wanted one

And then
We were on swim team
You had green goggles
I had pink

You refused to read
Your sister's manga
I watched her read it
And I loved it

And then we were
In tap together
I was still silly
You seemed to change

You always came early
When I always came late
I tried to mess with you
But you never laughed

Then I switched teams
Then your tap class switched
Then I started drawing
And you quit ballet

Then I quit ballet
Your sister lent me a book
About the Hunger Games
That I'd never be there to return

It's been years
Since we met
That day
In ballet

Now I'm 13
And you're 14
And I see you
Nearly every day

But you're
A different person
I can't blame you
I am too

I now have glasses
Like I always wanted
I have an American Girl Doll
And I can only imagine where yours is

I was playing you in P.E.
And I was on second
You were the catcher there
We exchanged words

I guess you never quit ballet
You quit tap
And you levelled up
In ballet -- to competitive

I didn't quit swimming
I did it year-round
And I just
Left your team

Amy.

submitted by Lucy B., age 13, California
(June 6, 2017 - 2:52 am)

I loved the passing of time in this!

submitted by September
(June 7, 2017 - 1:41 pm)

Also oooh! Color similies! I have to try those!

submitted by September
(May 30, 2017 - 10:21 pm)

this one's really short, again, I'd love title suggestions or critique!

untitled~

summer nights i find myself 

wandering because sleeplessness

is a blessing and a curse when 

you can’t turn your brain off

and all you do is think 

because darkness is the best time for

revelations and lightbulb moments— 

in the darkest of times, one must

always remember to turn on the 

light, it’s dumbledore’s quote but i’ve 

repurposed it.  

submitted by September
(May 28, 2017 - 4:53 pm)

I think it should be: summer nights i find myself/wandering/because sleeplessness..... But that's just my opinion. And for a title how about Insomnia

submitted by Epic Fangirl
(May 29, 2017 - 8:35 pm)

I really love the line /wandering because sleeplessness/ is a blessing and a curse when/. Also, /revelations and lightbulb moments/. That line sounds like it could be a title of another poem. This poem is short and still really good!

submitted by Bluebird
(May 29, 2017 - 9:17 pm)

Thanks so much guys!!!

submitted by September
(June 1, 2017 - 5:56 pm)

Wonder

Sometimes I wonder

If I'm true

Sometimes I wonder

If I'm well

Sometimes I wonder

If I'm real

Sometimes I wonder

If I wasn't made...

Sometimes I wonder

Element

The elements

Are like me

I like the elements 

They are powerful

They are strong

They are dangerous!

They are good. 

~

I know what you're going to say: extremely bad poetry!! Sorry it's so bad. 

submitted by Foxy (Lola C.), age 11, The Forest (New York)
(May 28, 2017 - 5:31 pm)

The first one was very good, I enjoyed the repetition. I don't see that very much and it's refreshing.

submitted by Epic Fangirl
(May 29, 2017 - 8:33 pm)

Thanks, both of you, for the advice! And September, I'm printing out those poetry prompts to work on later. My mom won't let me use the internet for anything except CB, oh well. But I'll use those! 

submitted by Leafpool
(May 30, 2017 - 1:34 pm)

First things first 

Let me get you

To understand the thing

That makes you so

Mean

Cruel

Snobby

 

Except for everything

 

Second thing second

I'd like to tell you

What you're doing is

Wrong

Selfish

Insulting

 

And everything else

 

Third things third

I want to tell you

To stop being like that:

Unjustful

Accusing

A bully

 

Even though I know you won't 

 

submitted by Lucy B., age 13, California
(June 1, 2017 - 4:56 pm)

I wrote a song! I've never done this before so I wanted to try it. (I reused the title from another one of my poems) Tell me what you think!

Nightfall

(Verse 1) 

You and me were waitin',

Waitin' for a meteor shower

That wasn't gonna happen

You and me, and a billion fireflies

You and me were talkin',

Talkin' about star signs and

Mystic horoscopes and cookie fortunes 

Fading glowsticks lighting up the night

 

(Verse 2)

I've got the soul of a poet

And I see things through artistic eyes

My wings are metaphorical but

I have always loved the sky

Oh, darling you're a blazing crimson

Late-night sunset in July

Oh, the galaxies above us

Can't compare with your smile

 

(Chorus)

Find me where the sky meets the ground

I'll be wanderin' around

Trying to make sense of it all

I'm not sure I trust you enough

Won't let my guard down

Will you still be here when night falls? 

 

(Verse 3)

I remember sayin',

Sayin' that a lot of things fall,

Like rain and stars and flower petals

Tides and shadows, and waterfalls, too

And while teardrops fall and

Every single day ends with the red sun setting

I won't admit that I am falling for you 

 

(Chorus)

 

(Bridge) 

If you are the day then I am the night

I am a haze while you are clear skies

Together we are darkness and together we are light

We are stars and we'll never die

 

(Chorus x2) 

 

 

submitted by Bluebird
(June 4, 2017 - 8:05 am)

Very good Bluebird. I can actually picture the tune in my head. Thank you for having that be one of the first things in my day.

submitted by Epic Fangirl
(June 4, 2017 - 11:55 am)

Love it, Bluebird! My favorite part is the chorus! 

submitted by September
(June 4, 2017 - 6:50 pm)

I LOVE it! I actually just tried singing it to myself, and the rhythm is really good. 

submitted by Leafpool
(June 5, 2017 - 2:50 pm)