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LeeliParticipantOk! This is mine! It's really sad, and my inspiration came from the last time I said goodbye to my friend.
River of Tears
A tear dribbles down my cheek,
rolling along the same path the last one took.
I think about my best friend,
the look on her face as she drove away.
And it sends a waterfall of tears
dripping
from my chin.
When we said our goodbyes, and she got in the car,
the sadness showing through her eyes,
And my eyes, full with the tears that are now spilling.
Memories of our last embrace, the one which was the tightest, the longest, and the most bittersweet,
Still hang in the air around me.
Me, so broken-hearted, so despairing
Shedding some of the saddest tears of my life.
And my only wish is that
My closest friend
Could be here
To dry them.
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AelinParticipantMistwardSONG OF THE SEA
Ebbing, flowing
That is my song
Swirling, whirling
Come dancing along
The song of the sea
Is the call of the gull
The whalesong you hear
In stories long ago
It's the crash and thrash
Of water in storm
The soft pitter patter
Of water meeting water
The song of the sea
Is the song we all hear
The song in our hearts
The one we remember
The song of the mermaids and sirens and swimmers
Who show off our love of the sea with deep shivers
If you live by the sea, you grow up hearing it
If you live far, you grow up longing it
But always, yes always
The song continues
Through war and bloodshed and negative things
The sea is still singing
Giving its gift
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LeeliParticipantWow. This is way better than mine.
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AelinParticipantTravelling to AdarlanNo! Do not think like that! Be proud of your work and know that it is unique and special and no one can tell you that theirs is better. It's your decision whether or not you decide to post your poem, but please don't compare yourself to others. That's how failures think (and these words are coming from a failure, so…yeah). Anyways, you should never talk yourself down like that.
"My name is Celaena Sardothien. But it makes no difference if my name's Celaena or Lillian or BEEP, because I'd still beat you, no matter what you call me."
A quote from my favourite book series of all time, stated by the best character of all time.
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RESULTSParticipantOkay, people! Judging is today!
In first place: Aelin
I have a soft spot for rhyming poems, and yours was beautiful. I like how it flowed, especially. Congratulations! You get to pick the next category.
In second place: Leeli
I also have a soft spot for sad poems- yours almost made me cry! It was a creative twist on the water theme, I applaud you for that.
In third place: Rose bud
I love the way you formatted it, and I like how it told a story. The imagery in it was beautiful as well.
Honorable mention: Cho
Yours was creative, and I always enjoy reading your reverso poems. Keep up the good work!
These were so hard to judge! Congrats, everyone, I can't wait for the next round.
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LeeliParticipantThanks, Aelin. I realized I shouldn't have downed my work like that after I posted it. Your poem was amazing, and it did win over mine, but I am still proud of my work, and getting second place. What is your favorite book series called? I'd have to disagree about that person being the best character of all time, but that's just my opinion.
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AelinParticipantDoranelleIt's called Throne of Glass. It doesn't particularly matter if you agree or not, because everyone has a right to have their own favourites and not favourites. Although, out of curiosity, who would you consider the best character of all time? 🙂
Also, the next theme will be an interesting one, I think, to read about. Your task in writing the poem is to take the words "To whatever end" and write about them. You could include the words, or not. You could write what they mean to you. Or maybe make a mini story with a character saying those words. Whatever floats your boat, as long as it has something to do with that phrase.
To whatever end.
Hopefully, this isn't too confusing! Judging will be on Friday, December 9th.
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LeeliParticipantOh wow! How interesting! Yes, it doesn't matter. Throne of Glass… Hmm, never heard of it, but it sounds interesting. I don't know who my fav charrie would be!
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Rose budParticipantI usually don't step out of my own life to tell a story in my poetry, but the image that popped into my head when I heard the words "to whatevery end" prompted a story of two sisters (who look alike, aparently) separated by life and death and glass.
To Whatever End
Every time I look in the mirror
my sister stares back at me.
I can see her in my eyestrying to claw her way back out
into the land of the living.
just the glass separates us nowthe glass and one tiny crack
that’s been growing larger and
larger ever since I bought the mirror.One day it will be wide enough
for me to crawl through;
what profound abyss waits for meon the other side?
will my wold of glass keep cracking
even after I’m gone?
Will it remember the long hoursI spent staring
watching the fracture
between our worldswaiting for the day
I would fall in
and disappear.My world is made of glass;
all it takes is one tiny crack
and everythingis splintered.
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BluebirdParticipantThis was a very strange poem inspired by The Fault In Our Stars. Oh well, I have no other ideas…
we talk about death like it's nothing
painting our faces white
skeletons, dancing through the numbered days
planning our futures out, ending at age 25
to whatever end we come to
will you be there?
when we're drowned by the fluid in our own lungs
betrayed by the body we call our own
will you mourn?
when our hearts finally decide to give up
will you be there?
will you stay with us
the few, the cursed
to whatever end?
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Abigail S.Participant12
Nose in a BookWow, I love that! You're such a good poet, it's hauntingly pretty but not overdone. I never know when to stop with these things… 😛
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LeeliParticipantBeyond the Horizon, or To Whatever EndA tiny boat, made of wood, just big enough to floatSat on the shore, white sand beneath, forever more, so one had thought.With tiny mast, and tiny sail, a little deck, and littler pail,It was only large enough for one captain, and in the calmest storm it would be flattened.A little mouse hopped into the boat, pushed it into the waves, and I quote,"This little ship I will sail, beyond the place where men have failed."And into the waters, the churning waters, the tossing, and the turning waters,The little boat was thrown.But the gusts of wind would blow it to no storm and to no harm.Across the peaceful waters it sailed, and met no stormy wind, nor gail.It came to the place over 'yonder. The place that we can only ponder.Beyond the water, beyond the beach, a place no human could ever reach.Beyond the horizon, clear and blue, the boat would float, so pure, so true.To whatever end the horizon held.A fate not met by men, To Whatever End.Ya, so I have absolutely no idea how this came to me, but this was what I thought of when I thought of the words, 'To Whatever End.' -
GaredParticipantConcrete Poem anyone? Well, here it is!
Eh, maybe less of a poem and more art, but here it is!
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BluebirdParticipantOh, this is cool, Gared! I never thought about incorporating art into this.
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Cho ChangParticipantWow.
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Abigail S.Participant12
Nose in a BookTo Whatever End
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The war is over
and there is a silence.
A quiet,
a resting-peace,
an exhale
of long-held breath.
The sky still smells
(slightly)
of smoke
but it's clearing
and the scents of the forest
are beginning to return.
They're standing on the porch.
Side-by-side,
not touching,
not talking
side-by-side, but very alone.
"We won," he says
and his voice cracks.
"I didn't think we would," she replies
turning to look at him,
at the arching curve of his jaw,
shilouetted
in the setting sunlight.
He still stands, gaze fixated
at the sky,
unmoving
but for his fingers tapping
one – two – three,
one – two – three,
on the splintery porch-railing:
"Was it worth it?"
He finally glances at her,
searching her face—
the cupid's-bow arch of her lips,
the smooth upturn of her nose,
her eyes like pools of liquid chocolate—
for reaction.
She stares back up at him,
mouth slightly open,
because he looks so different
than she's ever seen him,
vulnerable, unsure.
And her eyes drop
to their hands,
dangling
by their respective sides
inches apart,
miles away.
"I don't know."
She isn't looking at him
but she can hear the slow
long sigh
as he exhales.
He's tired.
He's so tired, so broken.
How hasn't she seen, before?
Before, before?
Before the war, when his left cheek was smooth,
absent of that hairline-thin, jagged scar
that he hides under hoodies?
Before, when he grinned lopsided at her,
so brave, so handsome, so freaking beautiful and stupid?
Before, when she was afraid they would lose,
he'd grab her shoulders,
pull her close,
so she could hear the quiet,
mingling thumps
of their hearts
and he would whisper,
"We will not lose.
We will go
to whatever end."
And he did— they did —and because, because,
the war is over.
And there is a silence.
And he is tired,
and she is scared.
They have won,
but she fears
she may
have
lost
him.
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LeeliParticipantThis is so good, Abigail!! Oh my goodness! So sad too!
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Abigail S.Participant12
Nose in a BookThank you ^^
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Clouded LeopardParticipantMine's not as good as any of these others, and maybe a little darker too, but I still wanted to enter it. I can write a new one if it's no okay, Admins.
To Whatever End, Whatever Cost
With nary a sight but the black wing of a crow
Sweeping over a battlefield, speckled with snow
I trudge onwards, hearing my breath rasp out with claws
That tear at me, sharp as steel
I force them to fall away.
Not today. Not today.
There–there! There!
Rage fuels my body, burning embers of pure hate
My limbs, stiffened by an icy cold, find power,
the will to go on.
With each footstep I sink into the snow
And with each step another tear gathers in the corner of my eye
Slipping down my frozen skin to softly indent the field below me
I ache,
I am weary,
Exhaustion drags at me like dark, lapping waves
Yet I find the strength to go on
But for what, I don’t know…
Somewhere, he is here.
I stare out across the war-ravaged field,
eyes tired and dripping with exhaustion
A choked scream escapes my throat
A pent-up cry of fear at what I will find
But I must search…
I must…
I…
To whatever end, I must go on…
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Booksy OwlyParticipantWell, okay then. This poem is a little… odd, but… We'll see where it goes.
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Living in an hourglass
Feeling the everlasting, unstoppable rush of the sand as
Time
Ticks by.
We are in a world where every human face
Morphs and bends daily into a
Clock.
Where every second word we let slip from our lips is
Late
Early
In a hurry.
Time.
We think we rule our lives, that we are kings
But somewhere in the background a
Puppeteer stands, laughing at our
Naivete. Because he knows we are
Powerless.
He lets us play a game, pretending, like toddlers, that
We are the masters of our future
We can do anything.
But he knows he controls us in every move
Because we are the prisoners of
Time’s
Grasp. The prisoners of
Our own invention.
We fly helplessly onward, looking forward to
Things that we may never reach, looking back to
Things we can never come back to.
Our jail cell is invisible, yet invincible.
He ties us don with hour as ropes
Gaggs us with minutes
Blindfolds us with seconds
And the watches our daily struggle with the
Triumphant smile of a
Malicious overlord.
Once in awhile, he gifts us free
Time
And the laughs in his sleeve at the irony
As we choke greedily on the poisonous delicacy.
Free, he calls it, yet at what a price it comes!
Mixed in and bittered up with guilt and longing
And, as everything in our life,
Timed.
Because as much as we like to pretend we live in
Blissful ignorance
We know, deep in our hearts that every made us
Second
Every imaginary
Hour
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Poetic PandaParticipantWow, Booksy Owly! I love your writing style and your topic is so creative!
~Poetic Panda
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Cho ChangParticipantRampion and Jacob (Otherwise known as Rapunzel and Jacob)
Falling, You're falling.
I see you. As do I.
Watch as we are torn apart.
Wordless scream.
Pain,
Heart shattered.
That I will endure,
for you.
No, don't!
Never to see that light you showed me again.
I love you.
Don't leave me.
Silence answers.
Mother killed you.
I'm here.
But I don't see you.
I'll find you.
You'd better.
No matter
Whatever Whatever
Happens.
I will find you.
As will I.
I love you. I know.
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Cho ChangParticipantArgh! It got all messed up! Here, I'll retry. This poem is supposed to be spoken by two people.
(Jacob) (Rampion)
Falling,
You're falling.
I see you.
As do I.
Watch as we are torn apart.
Wordless scream.
Pain,
Heart shattered.
That I will endure,
for you.
No, don't!
Never to see that light you showed me again.
I love you.
Don't leave me.
Silence answers.
Mother killed you.
I'm here.
But I don't see you.
I'll find you.
You'd better.
No matter
Whatever Whatever
Happens.
I will find you.
As will I.
I love you.
I know.
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Cho ChangParticipantArgh! I can't fix it! I'll try later.
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BluebirdParticipantWhoa, these are all amazing, guys! Top!
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KestrelParticipantTOP!!Wow. Can I ust say that you all are amazing, and that Aelin is going to have an extremely hard time judging this? I mean, honestly! These poems are all so spectacular and moving. And I'm not just saying that to be nice. 🙂
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Poetic PandaParticipantAw, thanks, Kestrel! I know my poem hadn't been submitted yet but I love and admire your kindness! 🙂 Anyway, here's my poem! Enjoy!
They ride their bikes
The cool air rushing in their faces
The forested mountain path
Reviving their crushed spirits
She grins
She looks at him
She takes her hand
Off the handles
Cheering
He gasps
No!
But he is too late
She crashes
Her limbs
Splayed out
He cries her name
She does not answer
He looks down the mountain path
He can almost see the rose-laden gazebo
Where he would have proposed
Now it will never be
The wooded path seems to continue on
To whatever end
His tears seem to stream
To whatever end
In his heart
He knows
She will be with him
To whatever end.
~Poetic Panda
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LeeliParticipantoh no, I might cry. This is so terribly good and sad!
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Rose budParticipantOh my goodness, that was so sad! It reminds me of something I read in a Blue Marble issue titled Paralysis. You should look it up (google Blue Marble and then search Paralysis on their website). Your writing style and plot for that peice is really similar. That particular story is completely appropriate.
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Poetic PandaParticipant@Leeli, awww, thanks! Honestly, the poem was going to be a lot happier before its mood turned so sad. XD
@Rose bud, I'm so glad you liked the poem! Blue Marble looks cool! I've never heard of it before now but I'm checking out Paralysis!
~Poetic Panda
P.S. Firefox says ozar. Hmmm…Sounds like either Ozark or some brand name. XD
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