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Mice_reniceParticipantAlright, so here's my entry!
The vowel I eliminated was the letter A. I hope the formatting turns out A-okay (heh heh)!
PERDIDIT HEROS
by Mice_reniceThis is the story of me—the story of my life, of my purpose, of my heroism…
I’ve long since moved on, but my people still remember me. In the old times, I fought evil with fierce intensity. I brought down countless enemies. I rescued lost souls, holding my ground in the toughest of duels, restoring my country to its former prosperity.
My powers were driven by instinct. I know not how I received them, nor precisely their limits, but I did know of their intense desire for justice. I could not control them. They consumed me.
It must’ve been some prophecy from the olden times which lent me my powers. When the people first met me, they seemed to know me. They’d begged for me to relieve them of the oppression which they’d endured for so long. Something within would not let me deny their request, so I conceded to become their hero.
Evil withered under my reign, but no one in the present will ever know of the splendors I showered upon the home of my people. They loved me. I loved them. In those times, the kingdom grew much.
…Yet no hero is without wexkness. My Xchilles heel wxs x piece of me thxt wxs missing—x trxit I’d never possessed. My instincts spurned me onwxrds, but the more I obeyed them, the quieter my own hexrt becxme, until I wxs nothing more thxn the shell of x being trxpped inside x ‘hero’s’ body.
This hxd been foretold in the prophecy. The hero would lift the bonds of the kingdom—would rescue the dying Hexrt of the country by becoming x new one. But x hexrt lives for the body, not itself…
My powers grew exponentixlly xfter thxt. I wxs x burning flxme, sexring xwxy the shxdows xnd putting the wxr to its end.
I becxme xn xnimxl. The people hxd never seen xnything like me before.
But in blxzing to my highest potentixl, I burned xwxy whxt wxs left of my former self. In thxt finxl bxttle, in xll the hopelessness xnd despxir, the Grext Hero–me–gxve his life to forever destory the thrext thxt hxd for so long plxgued the lxnd.
Life blossomed. The stormclouds moved on.
Stories of my rise evolved into legends. From legends they grew into myths. But now, without their protector, my people once more teeter on the brink of destruction…
Xnd I cxn do nothing.
I xm stuck in something of x limbo. Perhxps this is x curse from my bxttles with evil long xgo—thxt I would be left to wxtch my beloved home crumble into nothingness. Indeed; without me, everything light hxs become dxrk.
They need x new hero—x new prophecy. Sxdly, until such is given to them from wherever these things come from, I cxn only look on in lxment.
Without me, they’re missing x piece. Without me, they fxce the sxme fxte thxt I did.
I do not wish for this new evil to txke their lives.
This is the story of me—the story of my life, of my purpose, of my heroism…of my return.
It is the story of the Lxst Drxgon.
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I used the absence of the letter A to emphasize the hero's dilemma in the second half of the story…I wanted to combine the contest's theme with the story. I hope this was acceptable!
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CorolineParticipantWow, Mice, that was amazing! The story really flowed in the first half and I hardly noticed the absence of the letter A. In the second half, I thought how you tied in the hero's struggles with the actual theme was really clever. Keep it up!
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MoonlightParticipantGood Will Prevail
No “U”
We divide the world in-between heroes and villains. But really, how do we classify people like that? Just because someone wants to have control of the land doesn’t make them bad.
Take me for example, I do want to have control for, if I don’t gain control the entire earth will die. I have the power to fix the world. I can make it normal. I can make it better. And I can make it clean.
Thanks to the pathetic heroes however, they don’t want me to. The typical definition of “villain” is “A cruelly malicious person who is involved in or devoted to wickedness or crime; scoundrel”
My version is “A person trying to do the right thing to help and is stopped by a person who does not want a good world” I mean I’m not wrong.
One day I tried my hardest to help. Yet again I was shot down. That so called hero is gone now. We villains are way more powerful than heroes. They are only right on one thing: Good will prevail.
“Come with me!” Blaze snapped at me “I’m not letting this go on any longer!”
“Why?” I asked “Too tired? Too weak?”
“Listen, Dragontooth, too many people are dying!”
“Not my problem” I said and flipped onto the roof and ran away. Seconds later I transformed into my secret identity.
Now I am Claire Reckon. The prettiest girl at school with blonde hair, light skin, and pale blue eyes. I’m also Blaze’s girlfriend. A perfect way to get information.
I run back to where Blaze is and pretend that I’m being chased. “Blaze!” I yell
He turns around and runs toward me. “Claire!” He yells “Watc-“ But his warning was shortened by one of my helpers tackling him from behind. He thrashed for a while. Then a helper and I get into a “fight” where he ends up grabbing me and holding a dagger to my throat.
“Either come with me” He says in a deep voice to Blaze “Or she gets it.”
Blaze trembles. Then comes the decision I’ve been waiting for.
“Have her.” He says strongly “I’m not coming.”
“Fine” The helper says. He throws me to the floor and retrieves a small camera from his helmet. “The world will want to know about this. The heroes are nothing”
I smile slowly. Then stand. “Well Blaze looks like I have to reveal myself.” He looks at me mistook. I smile even more “Looks like my boyfriend won’t hesitate to let himself live instead of being a villain.”
“A villain? They are the worst people ever!” He says in shock.
“Careful who hears that” I say and then transform. My blonde hair turns raven black and into a ponytail. My pale blue eyes turn fiery, and I am wearing a black body suit with random fiery stripes on it. “They might not like that”
Blaze steps back in shock “N-no it c-can’t b-be! Not Dragontooth!”
I take a step toward him. “Let’s finish this now” I thrust out my hand and a fire dragon spirit races toward him. It whirls around him and soon nothing is left of Blaze.
This was the beginning of an end that was coming sooner than I expected. That’s another story though.
Maybe it will be known. Maybe not. Who knows?
Anyway I can’t say anything else in case someone finds this.
~Dragontooth
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So yea! This is my short story excluding “u” and It probably isn’t good but ya know WHO CARES! Wow Minearce! That's awsome!
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CorolineParticipantI really loved the story, Moonlight! The story worked well and any struggles with word choice weren't visible even without the letter U. The story was interesting and unique. Kudos to you!
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MoonlightParticipantawwwww thanks!!
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SecretParticipantAck! Sorry, I was out of town when we started.
I have elimenated the letter U.
*checks notebook*
My draft isn't in here…Snap.
I think I might have to rewrite this. It'll be posted by Friday.
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CorolineParticipant@Secret, don't stress you have almost a month.
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CorolineParticipantOh, by the way, when I say almost a month I mean a few weeks. I'm really not that good at math am I. XD
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SecretParticipantNO! I FORGOT ABOUT THIS!! I'M SO SORRY!!!!!
This is more of a long paragraph that I separated. I hope it passes through!
Song is my whole, my heart. Without it, I am as good as dead. I love the rythem of each song, all different, as well as the same. When I put pen to paper, my mind flows with words to compose a song. I have never performed in front of people, it honestly scares me.
At school, a magical flyer appeared in the school newspaper. A talent show. The sign up sheet was in the drama director's office. I grab my lucky pencil, the one wrapped in streamers, a rainbow pattern. I bring it to the office and sign my name: Sterling Ross. I sing to earn a spot in the show next week.
Two Months Later
The lights shine on me for the first time. I am singing Sit Still, Look Pretty by Daya. The first verse is shaky, but everybody expects that. As I start the refrain, I nearly explode. Everybody is looking at me with large eyes. I belt out the rest, taking a bow at the end. Claps echo. I beam, excited. The show director says, "We have all decided who will win Woodland Heights Middle School Competition is….STERLING ROSS! I am now really exploding. A medal is placed on my neck, and I beam. Singing has opened myself to a new world-the stage.
That was better than I expected. Guess what vowel I didn't use!
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CorolineParticipantI loved the story, Secret! It could have been a bit longer, but you managed to tell a story in such a short time which in itself is a skill, so I don't think it matters. Again, I didn't notice struggle of word choice at all so well done! Also, I love the song Sit Still Look Pretty.
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SecretParticipantI intended for this to be a bit longer, but I lost my draft. I wrote the parts I remembered. I may have forgotten a scene or two.
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LeafpoolParticipantI have two more questions. One is a second question about round 2–for each sentence, do you start over again from the beginning of Pi? Or do you keep going from where you left off in the digits for your last sentence? Like, just say you made a sentence with 3.14. Would you then, for your second sentence, make it with 15926? And keep going through pi for your sentences? Or do you make them just all start off with 3.14?
And for round one, is it okay for me to write a short story that's fanfiction, or to make a story that's a short retelling of a classic fairy tale or maybe an elaboration on an Indian folk tale? I was just wondering if it had to be entirely original or not.
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CorolineParticipant@leafpool, in round two you start from where you left off on the next sentance. And for the short story, the story does not have to be entirely original.
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LeafpoolParticipantOkay, thank you! 🙂 Sorry for all the questions.
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Soren InfinityParticipant27 eons
BeaconTownokay I finished this earlier today but I just want to say I JUST FINISHED MY FIRST REAL NOVEL OMK I'M SO HAPPY anyways now for my entry! 🙂
Short story- The One I Needed
omitting the letter u
The small car Mrs. Deneese is driving me in kicks grey goop that was once snow into the air as we drive around a pretty small-town neighborhood. The tall evergreens are capped with snow, and they remind me of all the small things that made up the season as I used to know it; finding my favorite ornament after digging for so long; the scent of hot chocolate after playing in the snow; the feeling of giddy anticipation as Christmas came ever closer. It makes me ache all over with nostalgia.
“We’re here,” Mrs. Deneese informs me. My tiny, dark brown hands tighten on the handle of the backpack they gave me at foster care, my palms sweating.
The car slows to a stop outside of a little beige place. I swing open the door, careful to only step on the path that has been cleared of snow. The frost sparkling on my foster parent’s home makes it look like an ice palace, an the clear, crisp snow bordering it is so perfect that I half expect to see a choir of angels in the middle, singing a Christmas hymn. It might have come from a fairy tale.
I expect a happy, artificial couple with little toddlers shrieking with delight at all their tiny cares to live here. Instead, a short lady with greying, mouse-brown hair, hazel eyes, fair skin, and a big old lady smile plastered on her wrinkling face hops out of the front door.
“Hi there, Dawn! I’m Cara Mae Saller, but you can call me Cara!” she chirps. Cara reaches out to put a hand on my arm. I instinctively shrivel away- for the past year, my mother hit me whenever she’s made any contact with my skin.
“Miss Saller is very nice, Dawn,” Mrs. Deneese tells me softly. “Say hello.”
“Hi, Miss Cara,” I whisper. I stare at the soil. The soil is safe, with no eyes like searchlights. The soil can’t whisper behind backs, jabbing at people’s hearts. They’re almost a close friend to me by now. I can still feel Miss Cara’s eyes searching me, landing on the marks my skin bear of the mistreatment I’ve faced for a year. I know that this woman, this kindly little woman, will pity me. I’ve had lots of pity.
Mrs. Deneese whispers briefly into Miss Cara’s ear. She closes her eyes and nods sadly. Then Mrs. Deneese spins around and walks back to her little car, high heels clicking on the walkway.
“Bye,” I whisper. I close my eyes and remember how it was like to live with a real family, not my broken mother, my brother, my father, who are a million lives, memories, stories, eternities, hearts away.
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Miss Cara has gotten a pizza especially for me. She even got toppings, like pepperoni, olives, and bacon since ‘I didn’t know what ya liked, of if ya had a favorite’. I take a little bit of each so I didn’t disappoint her, despite the fact that I only like maybe half of them. She tries talking to me. My answers are far from satisfactory. She offers to play a movie, but I tell her I’m really tired and want to go to bed early. I feel bad that I’m barely talking to her, but I can’t deal with all the nostalgia that comes with living in a home that is a real home. She tells me my room is the first door on the right side of the door to the basement. I run a hand along the wallpaper as I walk to my room, feet heavy as stone. My heart seems to be fidgeting a bit in my chest, as though it’s hesitant or not comfortable yet (and neither am I).
I creak open the door. My new room might be friendly and welcoming if I bother to flip the light switch. I don’t- why pretend it’s all going to be fine if I know my demons hide in my dreams? They come after me every night. Its been over a year since that fateful day. I still wake at midnight drenched in cold sweat, filled with nostalgia and pain and sheer terror. I can feel two ghosts flying over my head, whispering to me as I peel the covers of this new bed back, no even bothering to change into the pajamas residing in my backpack.
I hold the folds of my sheets more tightly than necessary. I swear I won’t fall asleep, no matter how heavy my eyelids become. I don’t want to wake up Miss Cara when she hears my screams. I gaze at a path of moonlight shining on the wall, black in the night, via the window. I will not fall asleep. I will not fall asleep. I will not… fall asleep…
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The dark fades from the edges of my vision and a memory, the worst one, swims in front of me then becomes still. My mom walks away and leaves my brother and I to be driven to school. I can see that there is something wrong with my dad. Whatever it was, I will never know. I slide into the passenger seat with my brother Finn in the backseat. I see my dad’s hands clenching the steering wheel too tight, talking angrily to himself. I feel scared for him. And Finn, who I love, loved, will always love despite the fact that he can never say he loves me back… not anymore…
We drive normally for a few minutes, passing by the same things we did everyday, so normal we never look closer to see the stories, the pasts of those things I will most likely never see again. Now I wish I had said goodbye to some of them, like the local shop with the kind lady who worked there and gave us stickers, or the little playground where I first learned how to play on monkey bars. My cries of delight echo in my ears as the memory/dream proceeds to recall its horrible honesty. I want to close my eyes, hide from what I know will happen, except their already closed, and I know what will happen and so does the memory- the me I am living inside of, recalling, does not, is woefully ignorant to the fate awaiting me.
Dad veers onto a narrow road with only two lanes, more angrier than ever, head bent over the wheel. When he sees another car, he swears.
He screams, making me jump and gasp. He swings the wheel to the left. I can only see the shock and terror etched on every line of the other driver’s face as the hood of their car rams into the side of mine, the side where Dad and Finn are sitting.
I feel the nonexistent pang of my head against my window, and where I remember nothing my evil mind fills it with memories of Finn- Finn, roaming the place with a pair of underwear on his head and a black blanket tied to his neck, claiming he was Batman and we needed to report any crime to him, Finn hiding behind my door and screaming in my face when I opened it, Finn giving me the last Christmas cookie, Finn folding clean clothes as we make funny faces at each other, Finn…
And then I am sitting in a hospital bed and nurses with shiny hair and white smiles are telling me I am very blessed to have walked away from a car accident like that with only a few stitches on my ear and a great big red knob on the side of my head.
They lied. I had a broken heart and a crippled spirit from that too- Dad and perfect little Finn were dead.
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My eyes fly open. I’m gasping, trying to breathe, not remembering the last time sweet air filled my chest, choking on my own tears. My instinct tells me to calm down, don’t involve anyone else. No one cares- I have to deal with my own problems.
I can’t anymore. No longer can I live with replaying this nightmare that is reality over and over till I break and there will be nothing left of me. Part of me got left behind in that car. I have to keep the rest safe now. And to do that, I need someone else to help me.
“Miss Cara!” I whisper. Only a strange gasping noise escapes my lips. I try again and again, when at last, she opens the door, bright yellow light spilling in, her shadowy form splayed across the bedspread. She dashes to me so intensely she may as well have been chased by sharks.
“What? What’s wrong, Dawn?” she asks.
“I- I dreamed- I dreamed of the day-” i whisper, words blocked by lingering terror. She seems to grasp what I’m trying to say. She wraps her arms around me, rocking me gently, telling me it was a dream, that they’re safe now.
“How?” I choke, “How can they possibly be safe?”
She replies, “They’re in Heaven. Simple as that.”
“How can we be sure?” I ask. “And do we know if Dad deserves Heaven?” the terrible words leave a bitter taste in on my lips.
“Seeing is not believing,” She whispers, “Remember that. If we believe, have faith, it will be so.”
I like her words. I like her. Might love her. And I sit there, clinging to Miss Cara Saller like a lifeline, the one I’ve needed all along. I know she will help me with everything, from homework down to my ghosts.
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The End
Well, that was rather long and _nedited, b_t OKAY!
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CorolineParticipantThat was amazing, Soren! I admire how you were able to tell such a sad and somehow heartwarming story with a short word count. It was beautiful and I loved every second of it. Keep it up!
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SecretParticipantI have to comment on this.
I have tears in my eyes.
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Soren InfinityParticipant27 eons
BeaconTown@Admins, I found some mistakes in my comment. Could you change 'sludge' in the first line of the story to 'goop' and 'squeals' in the italicized part in the middle-ish end to 'cries'? Thank you!
@Coroline, ah, thank you!
@Secret, I am sorry for making you tear up. I have a strange and disturbing knack for bringing depressing things to life. : /
(Rxun)
Run? Rex on?
OK, changed.
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Sorry for not getting this in sooner!
mine will be excluding the letter U.
Ella glanced to her left, making sure here were noone there. Ella's Grandmere had always told her by the firelight that she, like her mother, had a third eye. Ella didn't know what that meant at the time, but she always knew when someone was following her. The back of her neck prickles. She turned and dashed into a alleyway. she had been escaping from the law for so long she hardly remembered what for. But shapeshifting was banned in the kingdom by act of parliament. Not that born shapeshifters could help it, the best Ella was able to do was learn to hide her powers. Not tonight, however, she had to escape. Ella could feel her arms tingelling as feathers began to form and she swooped into the night.
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CorolineParticipantI loved the story, Arrietty! I could see you struggled with word choice at times, but you made up for it with an intriguing and mysterious storyline especially with such a small word count. You did use the letter u at one point when you said "could", but it was a small mistake that can be easily changed. Thanks for the great entry!
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Sorry!ParticipantDarkkingI'm sorry but I have to drop out, it's not like I don't want to!!! But my life is very hectic with building a model of a spacecraft by Friday (with no class time to work on it and I get home at 6:00 and have to be asleep by 8:30 so that time's limited not including time to eat), making a movie (I have to film and edit a small movie about Sacagawea), writing an essay about new years resolutions/goals even though I don't do that, swing dancing (*shudders*), homework (my teachers are piling it up to my head), classwork (also piling it to my head), and the end of the quarter coming up I've been a bit busy.
I'll try to do the challenges independently of the contest but there's no way I can get it done soon enough to stay in.
Sorry T^T
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