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JaybellsParticipanttrite, isn't it?i don't think you see
The sway you have over me
Each look catches me off-guard
Every gesture has me spellbound, watching hard
Seriously, i don't think you will ever fully comprehend
The way your words draw me in
Like a moth to a candle
So i guess
Just watch me
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Moon WolfParticipantlunars
A Celestial SkyI really love how you capture deep admiration and longing in this poem, from being spellbound to the final unravel (I love how you spaced out the last line—and how the underscores get longer and longer) It's beautiful overall.
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Blackfooted BobcatParticipantvery relatable feeling though 😀 something about it has a slightly magical feel…
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AmethystParticipantI think this might be one of my favorites of your poems – it's simple, but artistic, and each word really finds its place in the whole. It's super gorgeous 🙂
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Moon WolfParticipantlunars
u n r a v e l i n gI decided to write a poem for my own prompt since I was inspired~
Until the storm, I was strong—
No one was let into my heart—
Reaching the storm, it was calm—
As if nothing was going wrong—
Veiled was my true suffering—
Evermore it would be hidden—
Lies piled meanwhile, like clouds—
Into rain, falling from the sky—
Never-ending, continuously—
Gathering until the storm broke—
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Blackfooted BobcatParticipantI like the metaphor of a storm building, and it's cool you did it as an acrostic 😀
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AmethystParticipantin aweYou're so incredibly gOoD at acrostics :0
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Moon@BB&AmethystParticipantlunars
A Celestial SkyThank you so much! It means a lot to me 🙂
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AmethystParticipantunraveling
i wove a tapestry when i was eleven
i put it away somewhere and didn't look at it for years
and it unraveled, threads losing their sheen and collapsing into a tattered nothing
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i wove friendship with her when i was twelve
we haven't seen each other in years and it's all
unraveled
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i wove sunlight on my way to the stars
and then i thought about the night and
the sunbeams unraveled
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i wove happiness when i was young
now i just listen to pop music and think about
unimportance and the skeins i used to use
are tumbled out of place
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i wove love with you when i was fifteen
why are we unraveled what happened to your smile
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i wove dreams when i was twenty-three
it got trapped in time and i forgot how to do it
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i wove forgetfulness sometime in the not-so-distant past
i held it to me and didn't look away for years
and now my chains unravel, and my wings grow, and
i am woven into the wind
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Moon WolfParticipantlunars
A Celestial SkyWow this is so beautiful…I love how you used unravel in different ways. And I especially like the ending "and now my chains unravel, and my wings grow, and /
i am woven into the wind". It's a really pretty poem <3
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WoodwindParticipantI really like "now i just listen to pop music and think about / unimportance and the skeins i used to use / are tumbled out of place", your imagery here feels so realistic and powerful. cool poem!
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@Woodwind&Moon WolfParticipantTysm! I'm glad you liked it 😀
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WoodwindParticipantravel. | ˈrav(ə)l |.
transitive verb: to unravel.
to separate the twisting threads of forgiveness and blame, to metamorphose tangled balls of yarn from cats toys into crochet.
to piece someone together one stitch at a time.
knit one, purl two, three four five six.
some day we will run out of time, though the clock keeps ticking.
every moment is precious.
stand still and hold me and never let go.
tonight you can see the stars shine through that macrame curtain we call the sky.
if life is irredundant dictionary definitions, let me chose the longer one
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hold still while i unravel you.
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AmethystParticipant*emerges from a state of awe* You're such a classically good poet – your poems always resonate, and they're so beautiful. I love "some day we will run out of time, though the clock keeps ticking." and "tonight you can see the stars shine through that macrame curtain we call the sky.", and really all the lines <3
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Moon WolfParticipantlunars
A Celestial Skywow your poem is really breathtaking. I love how you use the format of a dictionary definition at first, and how the rest of the poem is structured. Amazing poetry <3
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