Hey, you’re welcome! No stress on late replying, happens to all of us someday. I’m glad to have been of service to a fellow writer. I honestly wouldn’t say I have a very keen eye for prose; analyzing drafts from the varying elements of a story becomes second nature for writers once a certain amount of practice is behind you. And I’d certainly be interested in providing further feedback, but, adhering with social ettiqette, it is my duty to inform you that… [No Promises!] I’m a very, very seasonal/annual presence on the CB and will often vanish for months without a trace. Historically, my most active time periods are around July to August and February to March approx… anything further than that is pure speculation, and if I’m still on here, I’ll only be making very short posts, in all probability. I’ll try to be alive when I can, but that’s that.
And no sweat on revising, by the way. Writing is rewriting, of course, but first drafts are always notoriously messy, so don’t worry too much about everything in your head not adding up first time around. Take your time and don’t fret about all the issues at once. If I’ve ever learned anything from my own episodes of banging my head against the desk while I try to work around writer’s block, it’s that this stuff can’t be rushed. Artists can amaze with a couple of lines and shades, musicians can captivate with a dozen notes, but writers like us… we’re on the longest end of the spectrum. Magic takes time, so take your time.

hey admins, my reply to lonan didn’t go through, is it still pending or did it just not reach you?

Thanks :)))
And no sweat on your schedule, i don’t wanna make you feel pressured to stay around if you’re really busy irl. But there might be a couple drafts and stuff lying around this thread if you do ever pop off, and then come back.
But I also can’t promise a new draft will be around any time soon :/