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Can we start a new roleplay for Harry Poter and the order of the phonex.There are roleplays for older times and the other one had to many replays.Thank you
submitted by Rachel, age 11, GA
(July 18, 2009 - 9:04 am)
(July 18, 2009 - 9:04 am)
Hold on... Another Harry Potter RP? Don't you think that's too many? Oh well, I'll join anyway. I'll be Hermione, who will you be Rachel? (Hannah, this is the kind of RP you wanted).
(July 18, 2009 - 3:18 pm)
** Chapter:One **
Radishes and Rhubarbs
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Hannah Tyler walked out the door of the Hogwarts express, and onto Hogsmeade platform. She took a deep breath of fresh air, stretching her legs. She heard the deep growling voice of Hagrid, the Hogwarts Game Keeper calling "First years! Foller me!" But Hannah, of course, did not follow Hagrid, for she was not a first year, she was in fact a third year. So she did what she was told in her Hogwarts letter, to wait on the path leading up to Hogwarts. She, and the other third years and older walked toward the path. She passed a girl, with long, blonde, tangled hair, whom she had never talked to before, but knew she was a Ravenclaw. She stood next to a sixth year Ravenclaw, Cho Chang, waiting for the carriages. Cho Chang was talking to her friend, Marietta. Hannah didn't know Cho Chang very well, all she knew was that she was also a Ravenclaw, in her sixth year, and that the previous year, her boyfriend, Cedric Diggory, had died in the Twiwizard tournament, that Hogwarts had hosted. Cho hadn't been the same since. The carriages caught Hannah by surprise, she was looking into a forest nearby, when she heard a crunching of gravel, she turned around to see a carriage apparently pulling itself. Marietta shrieked when she saw the carriage coming forward and toppled backward onto Cho, who fell onto Hannah, who had nobody to fall onto, and instead fell onto the gravel. Next moment she was being helped up by the girl with tangled blonde hair. Marietta was being helped up by Dean Thomas, and Cho was being helped up by Harry Potter. Who hurried forward right as Cho hit the gravel.People were hurrying forward trying to get a good seat on the mysterious carriages. After alot of elbow nudging, Hannah finally got onto a carriage. Dean was there too, so was Lavender Brown, and the Patil twins. Hannah knew that one of the Patil twins was in Ravenclaw (but she couldn't tell which one at the moment) and the other was in Gryffindor. The carriages lurched forward and started pulling them all towards Hogwarts castle.
The sorting had ended, and the food had appeared. Hannah reached for a pitcher of pumpkin juice, and filled her golden goblet. She was parched. She drank heartily and set it down now reaching for mashed potatoes, gravy, then herb chicken, and corn, cheesy broccoli, and bread.
To be continued.
By: Hannah P.
Some characters, places, objects, and ideas, based on the works of J.K.Rowling.
(July 19, 2009 - 4:54 pm)
**Chapter:One con. **
Radishes and Rhubarbs
Hannah finished off the last of her herb chicken and potatoes. She leaned back, forgetting this was a bench, not a chair, and toppled right onto the stone floor. There was a sharp intake of breath from the people around her. Luckily, that was about the only people who noticed she had fallen over. Hannah sat up as quickly as she could, but as she settled herself down again on the bench, she heard some sniggering, among the people who had seen her fall. She blushed. second time today! she said feriously to herself. She stretched her back gingerly. Dumbledore stepped forward, to the podiem. "I hope you all had a delicious supper, and now for the dessert!" As he said those words, the dinner things magically disappeared, and were replaced by the dessert dishes, and food. Hannah reached for the banana pudding. she loved banana pudding, and always anticipated it at the feast. She finished the pudding and eyed a strange looking pie. It looked more like cobbler, thought Hannah. And the filling looked like strawberry jello. But Hannah had a feeling that it wasn't. I mind as well try it while I have the chance, she thought, as she reached for the ladle. "Good choice", said an airy voice beside her. "I do quite like rhubarb pie, but I like pudding more." It was the girl who Hannah had seen at Hogsmeade station. "Chocolate flavored to be precise". The girl occupied herself by looking at her pudding on her spoon she held up. "Umm" Hannah started, the girl stopped eyeing her pudding to now look at Hannah. "So you said this was rhubarb pie?" Hannah said motioning to the pie. The girl nodded her head vigerously, and went back to staring at her pudding, after a few seconds she spooned it into her mouth. Hannah sliced a chunk of the rhubarb pie onto her plate, and started to eat. It was delicous.
Hannah finished off the pie, and occupied her self by looking around the great hall. Her eyes fell upon the earrings of the odd girl beside her. They looked like little radishes (and Hannah had no doubt that they were) that had been made into earrings. "Cool earrings" Hannah said. "Oh, you like them?" "Yes" replied Hannah. "I've never seen any earrings like that". "Daddy, found a way to shrink them and grow on bushes instead of the ground. It makes them alot easier to pick." "My family has normal radishes. You know the ones that do grow in the ground." "Well I guess, It's a matter of oppinion, isn't it?" 'Yeah, i guess it is." agreed Hannah. "Oh and by the way, my name is Hannah, Hannah Tyler." "My name is Luna, Luna Lovegood." Said Luna.
To be continued.
By: Hannah P.
Some characters, places, objects, ideas, and story, based on the works of J.K.Rowling.
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(July 20, 2009 - 2:32 pm)
**Chapter:Two**
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Hannah was in the Ravenclaw common room. She had enjoyed the feast, but was thankful when Dumbledore had declared the feast over. Hannah was sitting on a large dark blue chair next to the fireplace. Her back was on one arm, and her legs on the other. She stretched her cramped toes, staring into the smoldering fire. "Hello there" said a voice right behind Hannah. She jumped, and turned around to see the owner of the voice. It was her best friend, Ella Byrd. "Well hello yourself!" Hannah said in surprise. Ella sat down on the floor beside her friend. Hannah hopped down abandoning her seat, to sit next to her friend. another person replaced the chair. "You didn't have to leave that seat for me" Ella said. "But then it wouldn't really be fair, and i would feel wierd about it." replied Hannah. Ella smiled at her, Hannah grinned back. "So" Ella started. "So" she repeated. "Not to sound picky, unthankful, or anything like that, but, I sent you like fifteen letters over the summer, and you sent me like, three." "Sorry!" Hannah said urgently. "But my family has a buisiness owl, that my parents are only allowed to use, and one family owl, that my brother has been using almost all summer." "Why did heuse it so much?" Ella inquired. "Isn't it obvious?" Hannah said. Ella squinted her eyes. Hannah rolled her eyes. "He's probably got a girlfriend!" Ella giggled. "Peter? you can't be serious." "Well it's the most logical answer I can come up with!" Hannah said annoyed. Ella shrugged. "Guess it is." "Oh! Ella." Hannah exclaimed pulling back her sleeve. "Mom and dad got me a wrist watch for my birthday!" "Oh!" Ella exclaimed. "It's beautiful!" It had a blue dragon hide band, with silver buckles (to match the Ravenclaw house colors) and on the face of the watch, didn't only show the time, and date, but also what the moon was to be that night (in case a werewolf bought it). "It's beautiful!" Ella repeated in awe.
Hannah and Ella walked up to their dormitory. When they got to the top, they quickly slipped into their pajamas, and plopped into bed without another word. A few minutes later, there was a rattling coming from Hannah's bedside table. She groped for her wand, and whispered "Lumos" and light appeared from the tip of her wand. Her eyes fell upon what was making so much noise: her pygmy puff named Juniper was rattling against the bars of it's little cage, begging for food. "Merlin's Beard!" Hannah exclaimed. "I forgot to feed you! didn't I?" She reached in her bag, feeling around for the cloth filled with food she had stowed away from the feast. She pushed some food in through the bars, and drifted back into sleep.
To be continued.
By:Hannah P.
Some characters, places, objects, ideas, and story, based on the works of J.K.Rowling.
~How's my writing? Because I want to know. Any typos? Anything that you thought could have been more desriptive? Or any other nit-picks? If yes, please post it on this area of this site~
(July 21, 2009 - 4:26 pm)
Well, you've got a great story going! :) But could you make the dialogue its' own paragraph? Each line should be its' own paragraph. Then it'll be easier to read and it'll flow together more. Thanks, and it's great. :)
(July 21, 2009 - 5:05 pm)
Thank you very much for your feedback.
Not to sound pushy or anything, but are you going to be writing a story here too?
(July 22, 2009 - 9:47 am)
You're welcome! :)
I'm really sorry, and it's honestly nothing personal, but whenever I get involved in roleplays and continued stories and stuff, it always gets confusing, and I have to drop out. Please don't take this personally. You can ask Mary W. and TNO; I dropped out of the other Harry Potter roleplay too.
(July 23, 2009 - 7:04 am)
I understand. I haven't been writing on this thread for a while now.
(August 7, 2009 - 6:17 pm)
You really like my story? I have tried to write a different story. Not here. but just on paper, and it was AWFUL. When I went back and read what I had written I was amazed how bad my writing was. I've tried writing fairy stories too* but they weren't as interesting as I wanted it to be. I had also started on writing another fantasy book. I haven't written anything in it for a while now, so this Harry Potter roleplay thing has been my first writing in a while.
(July 22, 2009 - 9:52 am)
Well, I guess... Harry Potter is great and all, but I do feel like it's getting like Warriors used to be.
(July 18, 2009 - 5:15 pm)
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(July 19, 2009 - 7:11 am)
Thanks you guys.I am Rachel Kloves i am in second year since my birthday is really close to the sorting Dumbledore let me in.I have two older brothers and one younger sister my mother is pure blood and on my dads side my great granfather was a muggle wizared.So i went to the train station nothing to intresting only the boy we were siting with was a first year had so much candy on the train and the moving made him throw up all over his bags so i had to go to sit some where else. So I am at the big feast umbridge just gave her speach . we are going to Griffendore commened room. Rachel Rachel are you listening to me.O, what.Rachel said.I was wondering if you were going to try out for Quddicth.It was my best friend Zoe.Same year same house.Sure i have a Quick Sweep 500,are you.No no no no i am not what if i fall off my broom.Your not sounding like a Griffendore.Yea i know I think the only reason why I was put in Griffendore was becusae of my loylty.You dont sound happy about---OUCH.Blimey are you ok Zoe said.Yea I enk I an fine Rachel said pinching her nose becusae blood was coming out, fast.Are you lot ok?Yea is gust tha I banged into the door.O my gosh o my gosh your o my gosh your Harry Potter said Zoe.Umm yea Harry said who sounded inbarsed.Rachel said the password and ran in going straght for the girls room.I see you uround Harry said zoe who was twiring her hair and had a girlish smile on her face and then walk in to the girls room with turnining back a lot and waveing a couple of times.Zoe what were you thinking.I was thinking of geting to know Harry Potter.and what happened to your nose.I look up a spell and i think i am going to bed Rachel said yawning.Down in the Great hall the next day Zoe and Rachel were having breakfast with eachother well im full said Zoe what our first class.Umm let me see charms and then care of magcial creatures then lunch then dada then we get a break then thats it for the day i guss.We better get to charms then ok lets go.In the commend room that night it was filled up mostly fith years who were studing for there owls.Zoe and Rachel got sits next to the fire.after a couple of minutes Zie and Rachel started geting tiredso they went to bed.BY RACHEL to be contieued
(July 19, 2009 - 9:46 am)
When Rachel and Zoe woke up something was weird,all the beds were empty.Zoe we should get to breakfast.Yeah, everyone must be down in the Great hall said Zoe.When they got down to the Great hall nobody was there.This isnt good said Rachel.Yes it isnt good at all said a voice behind them.They turned around slowly.It was Snape the potions teacher.You two missed potion my I ask why.We got up late said Rachel.But we didnt mean to said a very scared Zoe.My office Sunday night Snape said and walked off then Rachel step on his cloak.Dont step on my cloak said Snape and then walk off.Sunday night came quick.so they went to Snapes office it was dark and creepy.You will both take off the tails from all the rats.Where are the gloves sad Rachel.You wont have any Snape said.Are they clean?No and that reminds me you will clean the tails and the rats after you take the tails off.Fine. by Rachel
(July 21, 2009 - 9:26 am)
''My hands feel like they are going to fall off''said Zoe.Me too said Rachel.''And Im starving''said Rachel.''Ya Im hungrey''said Zoe.''Look theres the food''said Rachel.As they were about to sit down a girl with brown bushy hair came over and said''do you belive that the prophet is telling the truth about Harry Potter''she said.''No''said Rachel and Zoe.''Good the girl said and gave them a pice of partchment ''dont read it till you get to your house commened room got it''.''Got it''said Rachel and Zoe.''O and my name is Hermoine.
(August 11, 2009 - 9:32 am)
Rachel, first you were typing as if you were the narrator, then you started writing like your character was telling the story. Keep it to one way and it will be much more professional.
(July 21, 2009 - 4:30 pm)