First or third?

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First or third?

First or third?

I've been thinking about this idea for a book, but I can't figure out if it would be better in first person or third person.

Synopsis:

There are two schools for demons and dragons. One is for the half-bloods, while the other is for full-bloods. Only half-bloods that show extraordinary skill are moved up to the full-blood academy, where they are often harrassed and beaten. But one day, a half cat demon named Usuki shows up at the full-blood school, two months after the suspected murder of the last half-demon that came to the school. Koto (still working on that name), a full-blood shadow demon, makes efforts to befriend Usuki, but she seems shut off, even emotionless. Students start to get suspicious; what is the half-blood school really doing to their students?

 

First person:

Red. Bloodred eyes, staring straight into my soul. No trace of emotion, no sign of humanity. Humanity. That's a word I haven't thought about in a while. Are the human feelings really so different from ours? I can't imagine how. Even though this girl is half-human, nothing about her seems that way. She is cold, dark. Different.

I haven't really thought of a third person intro yet, but I might post one later

submitted by blue moon
(May 6, 2012 - 12:05 pm)

I really like that intro!

submitted by Melody, age 13, Just being awesome
(May 7, 2012 - 5:41 pm)

Wow, I agree. Love the intro.

submitted by Rose bud
(July 2, 2015 - 7:46 pm)