Poems and Feedback

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Poems and Feedback

Poems and Feedback

 

 

Hey, everybody! I was on here a lot a few years ago. And then I got busy with highschool and stuff. So, hello again! Missed this site!

So, I recently acquired a love of poetry. So, this would obviously be a good place to post it. Let's all post some cool poems here. Postive feedback or helpful critique is always nice and good! I'd love to get some help on my poems, and I'd love to read all of your great ideas, and maybe give you some feedback! I'll post some of mine soon.

 

 

 

Spammy says yimx, which couls possibly mean why I'm ex. Did spammy get dumped?  

submitted by Alex Infinity, age 15, Kansas, newly
(February 18, 2014 - 10:41 pm)

Sorry, the format is weird. I don't know why it is like that.

 

But I suppose it happens to everyone... 

submitted by M
(February 21, 2014 - 8:11 pm)

I likes it. It was a little confusing, espically the 2 stanza. Nice job, the wording was very nice too!

submitted by ~Blue Fairy~, age 13, Neverland
(February 22, 2014 - 10:46 am)

Thanks :)

submitted by M
(February 22, 2014 - 11:41 am)

enslaved
she is a slave
to fashion, 
to her appearance,
to society.

she starves herself
to be gorgeous.
they beg her to stop,
they say she'll kill herself
if she carries on like this.
her response?
"well, at least I'll die in style."

(I actually really like this poem and now I have an idea for a poem thanks to Panic! At The Disco.)

submitted by Maggie
(February 22, 2014 - 3:59 pm)

Hi! I'm rather new here (to the Chatterbox, that is.) I love writing poems!

Here is a poem I wrote several months ago...

Fine.

Have your own way

If I can’t tell you

when the grass could grow

or

where the moon might go

Seems as if

I could at least say

that I love you.

Love is dangerous.

Too much in one direction can

take it from others.

I know that now.

You -

having eyes only for one, the one

- ignore the love lying on

your doorstep

and begging to come in.

Life is hard

but too hard

that only the noonday sun

and from then on

matters to you?

I am the sun in the east

new, but the dawn is

vital.

For one who wakes up

with it

I am surprised that you

do not care for it.

Do not try to keep me

in the dark

for the dawn will come

whether you like it or not.

Do not misjudge me

for I can see the forbidden flames

and I wonder

why not me?

submitted by Dutchie
(February 22, 2014 - 5:56 pm)

Wow. This is really good. 

submitted by Maggie, age 12, nowhere pleasant
(February 22, 2014 - 7:12 pm)

This actually happened to me, and I think I was feeling rather Christopher-Robin-like when I wrote this poem because the rhythm reminds of those poems in When We Were Very Young and Now We Are Six.

Candles 

Beeswax candles

smell like

summer,

whether they're

burning

or not, but once,

when I lit a candle bear,

and brought his brother,

another bear, out into his

new-found light,

the not-flaming one,

in the flickering shadows,

looked so terribly sad,

that I wondered if I

had done something wrong 

and whether candles really

want

to have that beautiful light 

melting away their wax.

submitted by CaptainRead, age undecided
(March 1, 2014 - 10:02 pm)

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submitted by TOP
(March 2, 2014 - 9:59 am)