What if the

Chatterbox: Inkwell

What if the

What if the moon was starlight?

A cold, pale haunting light,

And what if the stars were sunlight? 

Gleaming through the night.

 

And what if the lies were truths?

Creating a web of decievment,

And what if the faliures were successes?

Giving us false achievement.

 

The what-ifs are growing steadily,

As uncertainly grows,

And coming with uncertainty,

Unfaithfulness shows.

 

So all you people reading this,

Spend a minute of your time,

On what can change the world inside,

This one and simple rhyme.

 

Don't listen to the world outside you,

They'll defeat you every day,

But trust in the Lord Almighty,

And he'll show you the way. 

 

 

 

 

submitted by S.E.
(June 2, 2014 - 8:09 pm)

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Beautiful. Perfect. And absolute truth. You just summed up what I tell people in lengthy discussions in one, short, perfectly written poem. Beautiful job!

submitted by Blonde Heroines Rule
(June 2, 2014 - 9:23 pm)

Thank you!

submitted by S.E.
(June 6, 2014 - 8:15 pm)

Wow, that's really beautiful. I really like the imagery, especially in the first two stanzas. And I like that you used the four-lined, 2nd-and-4th-line-rhyming style. I am so up to here *think the ceiling* with free verse "poetry".

submitted by Everinne, age 15, Floating around
(June 7, 2014 - 6:34 pm)

I love writing freeverse, and I'm thinkinng of sending some to stone soup.

submitted by S.E.
(June 8, 2014 - 5:47 am)

Your poem is wonderful, S.E.!

submitted by The Chocabookaholic, age 11
(June 8, 2014 - 8:49 am)

This is amazing! Great job, S.E! :D

submitted by Nina, age 12, Florida
(June 8, 2014 - 3:45 pm)

Wonderful poem! I love it! 

submitted by Katie M, age Immortal , Does it matter?
(June 9, 2014 - 7:47 am)

That was really good! :D *high fives epically* I loved the what if opposites! 

One thing: this is just me, since I am not religious at all in any aspect, (except I believe in God and Jesus, nothing else really, maybe some things from other religions) I'm imagining "But trust in yourself almightly/ and you'll be shown the way". That's just me, sorry to be controversal or anything.

submitted by Moss, age 13
(June 11, 2014 - 4:48 pm)

It's fine. I understand that not everyone believes what I do.

submitted by S.E.
(June 14, 2014 - 7:08 am)