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So I had an idea for a story. It's where there's a big computer that records the births of every person. If you're not in the computer, you can't do anyting. It's like an ID or license or credit card. So, it's sort of a distopia. One person was born in the desert and isn't in the computer. She's an orphan and has lived in this desert by meeting a gang of rebels who are also orphans and want to ruin this system because it isn't fair. She joins the group and becomes sort of like a beta in the group.
Name: Marcy Kinowell
Age: 12 (gets older by end of story)
Appearance: beautiful, redhead-leads to many jokes through story, violet eyes, high cheekbones, tanned skin, muscles from tough training in gang, has own submachine gun which she uses on missions
Personality (hey Air, if ur reading this, sorry for using your format of characterization): tough, feels no mercy until end of book, yet is kind to her friends, ruthless to enemies
Btw, I wanted her not to be the perfect person but to be able to learn something by the end of the story. She needs to learn that just because her childhood wasn't perfect, she doesn't need to be mean to everyone else. I want there to be a moral in the story too, so if you have any ideas, I'm all ears.
submitted by LN
(January 4, 2015 - 4:48 pm)
(January 4, 2015 - 4:48 pm)
Firstly, everyone usually uses that verson of the form, so no problemo. Secondly, are you Ellen L.? Thirdly, can we join? Is it an RP? Or are you just writing it? Fourthly, you should read The Last Question and The Bar Code Tattoo. Both have ideas really similar to yours so that you can get ideas.
(January 4, 2015 - 6:05 pm)
(January 4, 2015 - 6:05 pm)
Name: Aquila Eller (ah-KEE-lah)
Age: 13
Rebel or insider (inside the computer system): insider
Appearance: Black hair, Asian eyes, tan skin. Wears jeans, lime green hoodie, boots. Carries a leather messenger bag for her books and laptop.
Personality: Studies history, esp. origin of The Computer, wonders if some people are not in the system, but thinks the system is good, fair. Smart, calm.
(January 4, 2015 - 9:41 pm)
What about if she was envious of all people who had parents, and who's names were entered in the computer. At first she tries to find her way into the system, but as her envy grows, she only wants to get back at the people who made her an " outlaw."
The moral could come to "you don't have to fit in." Or like the be your own person stuff...
There could also be like ranks somehow. Making some people more important than others. That would open up A lot of ideas...
Okay I feel like I'm not getting anywhere but I hope my ideas helped! I'm also pretty good at characters. I will keep thinking about moral ideas!
(January 5, 2015 - 9:56 am)
Name Hemla
Age 11
Appearance: brown hair, hazel eyes, light brown tunic and leggings, tan skin. She has a small gun hidden in her boot and another in her belt.
Personality: smart, agile, good sense of direction (comes in handy when in a desert), she often speaks first and thinks after, often tags along at the end of group and never fights except when she has to.
(January 5, 2015 - 5:28 pm)
My name was an accident.
(January 5, 2015 - 5:31 pm)
Awesome Idea!!!
Name~ No one knows her real name, but everyone calls her Mist.
Age~ 17
Appearance~ Messy, straight, long, black, hair, Bluish gray eyes, medium height.
Insider or Rebel~ REBEL. Can she be like the first or second rebel in the "club"?
Personalitly~ Natrual Leader and fighter. Really tough. REALLY tough. Rebelish. Baaaaad.
What the heck does beta mean????? If it means leader...... I'll make a new charie.
(January 5, 2015 - 7:00 pm)
Beta just means that she's like the second-in-command. So you can be first.
(January 5, 2015 - 11:57 pm)
OK, good, Even though Bubbles says worg. I think that means wrong.........
(January 6, 2015 - 5:43 pm)
So I like all of the ideas, so you guys can start writing. Tho' I think that this "gang of misfits" is big enough, maybe add a couple mroe people. Tho', we need more insiders, so I'll add one now.
Name: Toyomara Kelane
Age: 19
Appearance: beautiful, green eyes, pale skin, brownish blueish yellowish (don't ask) hair
Personality: haughty, flirts with every man in power she meets, rude to children and seniors
Position: daughter of Secretary of Secret Affairs of the government. SUPER RICH!!!
And here is a gang member:
Name: Leana Moroelle (l-EE-ana mo-RO-elle)
Age: 8
Appearance: white-blonde hair, cropped, always wears trousers, missing her right pinkie finger from accident a few years back.
Personality: hates when ppl pity her for her disability, loves fighting, tougher than she looks.
Position: Omega of gang- needs to prove her strength, newest addition when found in desert alone
Leana hated Marcy because Omega is the lowest of power in a group, and Marcy in the beginning had fought her for that positon and to not be an outlier. Now, when Marcy is beta, they're friends becasue Marcy is nice to Leana.
Also, if you don't know what omega, beta and alpha means, u have never read Warriors or anything by Erin Hunter, right? And if so, READ IT!!!
(January 6, 2015 - 11:11 pm)
(January 6, 2015 - 11:13 pm)
I'm gonna read Warriors! And LN, I was gonna make a person EXACTLY like Leana, but with slight changes. Since you have three ppl can I be her?
If so:
Name: Wyakin Moroelle(Why-AH-kin mo-RO-elle)
Age: ten (will grow older)
Appearance: Raven hair, neon green hoodie, jeans, combat boots, missing her right pinkie finger from fight a few years back.
Personality: hates when people pity her for her disability, ADORES fighting, a lot tougher than she looks.
Position: Omega of gang- needs to prove her strength, one of the oldest members.
Wyakin and March are sisters, that is why Wyakin is Omega, her sister and she have a rocky relationship, you could say. You'll see...
Is this okay LN? I hope you don't mind.
(January 7, 2015 - 2:34 pm)
Ya it's fine but it would be really cool if they're friends, tho, you can't have multiple omegas, so I don't know how we'll make that work. But sure.
(January 8, 2015 - 10:25 pm)
And did you mean Marcy, or someone else?
(January 8, 2015 - 10:26 pm)
Oh, and Alpha is leader, Beta, is second in command. And my girl is sisters with the Alpha. I thought Marcy was... maybe Savvy's cherrie is Alpha? I'm confuzzeled.
(January 7, 2015 - 2:38 pm)