Fire Eyes

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Fire Eyes

Fire Eyes

Introduction:

A small babe bearly three weeks old, with flaming orange eyes and a pale complexion, lay wrapped in a cloth unlike any on this earthly demision, on a small wooden porch. Unlike most babies her age, who would be tearing and screaming, she was completely silent, as her eyes observed the lady who gasped as she saw her, and bent down to pick her up. "Oh, Laurence....." the ladies voice was quaking, but calm, as she talked to her companion. "We'll take her to the police station and report this...if they say we can, we'll keep the child." His voice was also calm, but it went up and down like a fast roller coaster. Even then, as the lady took the child into the house, grabbed her keys and had to force herself to not run to her car, the babe was silent. Watching, observing...and perhaps, in her tiny mind, she was also understanding.

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Should I continue?

submitted by GloWorm
(March 14, 2009 - 8:57 pm)

Yeah! :)

submitted by BellaTrix♡♥♡
(March 14, 2009 - 11:15 pm)

Beautifulness! Loved it, but it kind of gave me shivers in a good way. :D

submitted by Koffee
(March 15, 2009 - 9:40 pm)

Yes, please continue! :)

submitted by Allison P.
(March 16, 2009 - 4:36 pm)

Continue! :)

submitted by Lena G, age 11
(March 17, 2009 - 7:36 am)

Continue! Now! I demand of you! I've been thinking about this for the past couple days and I'm dying to know what happens! Continue! Pronto! Undelay! Rapido! Mach Schnell! (I know I butchered all those spellings, but I got the point across)

submitted by Koffee
(March 17, 2009 - 9:36 pm)

Chapter One

[12 years later]

The world seemed like a mixture of green and red as the small girl walked down the street, her eyes a soothing yellow.

She looked across the street at the Christmas lights, decorating people's houses. She looked down at the snow at her feet.

She glanced behind her at the kids who where bundled up in snow coats and boots, and then at her own short-sleeved shirt, shorts, and flip-flops.

I wonder, she thought, what it would be like to feel the coldness of the air?

The girl had never felt the feeling of a bitter wind blowing harshly at your face, or the cold icy water of a snowball melting in your hand. All she felt, summer, spring, winter, and fall was a warm temperature of 85 degrees. Like there was a barrier around her, preventing her from ever feeling the seasons. Sometimes though, when she blinked, she imagined that just for a second, she had felt coldness, or heat, as her eyes shut. When she tried to close her eyes, and not open them, she still felt the normal temperature she usually felt. So she had waved it off as a illusion. Or trying to make it seem like her wish had come true.

submitted by GloWorm
(March 18, 2009 - 12:49 pm)

gloWorm this is awesome! You have to write more

*Gets on knees and begs*

submitted by Leah G.
(March 18, 2009 - 3:46 pm)

Ahhhhh! I can feel a dip in self esteem coming on! How come everyone else can write so great and I can't? Anyway: MORE! I demand of  you in a completely non-bossy way that you post more promptly!

submitted by Koffee
(March 18, 2009 - 7:16 pm)

Chapter Two

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The girl walked into her front door. She slumped against the wall. Her eyes where now an angry red. Though the anger seemed to be turned inward at herself. "Ember, is that you?" a voice called from somewhere down the hall.

"Yes." the girl whispered "It's me, Ember, the freak." Ember ran down the hall, up the stairs, and into a plain white-walled bedroom. Only when she reached her bed did she start crying. Though not a single tear rolled down her cheek. It was always that way. Her cries where always dry and empty. Leaving an unsatisfied feeling in her stomach.

A few hours later Ember walked slowly down the stairs. She sat down emotionless at the table as her mother served her some dinner. It almost seemed like she hadn't cried at all just three hours before. Even when I cry, she thought bitterly, I'm a freak. Will I ever just be normal?

She ate her dinner listelessly. As she was just finishing up, the doorbell rang. She walked slowly to the door. "Hello?" she asked blankly.

"Hello Ember," the voice said. Ember looked up, and gasped in astonishment.

submitted by GloWorm
(March 18, 2009 - 11:19 pm)

PLEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEASE CONTINUE?!?!?!?!?!?! Pleasepleasepleasepleasepleaseplease????? Pretty please? With a cherry on top??

submitted by Julia, age 12, Oregon
(March 19, 2009 - 9:18 am)

Chapter Three

[How to pronounce things in this chapter...

Ifadlie- IF-ah-delly

Kapiter- Cap-i-tar

Nakick- Nac-Kick

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The teenager at the door stared intently into Ember's eyes with her own. The eyes where what confused Ember the most. They where the exact same colour as Ember's when she was excited, a pinkish-orange. "W-who are you?" Ember asked, a cold feeling in her heart. "I'm Ifadlie." the girl replied matter-of-fact.

"Yes..but how do you know me?" Ember bit her lip. Her eyes where a confused mix of red, yellow, orange, pink, and the softest shade of green. "Everyone on Kapitar know's about you." the girl smirked. Ember started to get angry, "Tell me who you are, how you know me, and what Kapitar is this instance!" her eyes where turning bright red.

"You don't know about Kapitar?" the girls smile faded. "Surely you remember? You where just a babe...but surely......a Nakick never forgets anything." A sudden realisation hit Ember. She did remember a place called Kapitar. Her memory seemed so blurry...but in a distance space in the back of her mind, she remembered. "Maybe I do remember....but I still am confused...." Ember replied her voice quivering.

"Ember? Dear, who is it?" Ember's mom walked out to the door. Ember glanced back at Ifadlie, but just as her mom reached the door, Ifadlie dissapeared. Ember stared at her mom, "Uhm...oh, uhm, no-nobody. It must of been...oh, ding-dong-ditch." As her mom pulled her away from the door, Ember's mind was racing. Where had Ifadlie gone, and who was she?

 

submitted by GloWorm
(March 19, 2009 - 11:52 am)

PLEASE KEEP POSTING!!

@ Koffee: First of all, post more! The more constructive criticism you get the better you'll become! From what I've read of your posts, though, you seem really good! Don't get discouraged!

P.S. Seriously, you have room in your brain to contemplate the ending of an Inkwell story? *widens eyes* *whistles in admiration* Wow.

Maybe my teacher is right... she says I need to take time to be a child and stop thinking such serious thoughts. *shakes head* *rolls eyes*

What she doesn't know is that my main thought during school hours is very possible, Lord, please deliver me, and give the clock hands a little nudge to three-o'clock. :)

Hmm, she also says I'm too negative. *contemplates that* *decides it's hogwash*

You think you have bad self-esteem- imagine 180 days in my classroom! Torture!

I have to stop this incessant rambling. I can see the Administrator yawning as he/she screens this post.

 

No, I'm not yawning, Mary. I'm envisioning the little clock hands being nudged toward three o'clock!

Admin

submitted by Mary W., age 11, Blown Away
(March 19, 2009 - 5:44 pm)

Administrator! That's the full name...if you ever wonder why I call them the Admin, it's because I didn't know how to spell that... hehee...

submitted by Lena G, age 11
(March 20, 2009 - 8:42 am)

Oh my golly jeepers! This is scrummy-yumbos! MOREMOREMOREMOREMOREMORE!

submitted by Koffee
(March 19, 2009 - 8:30 pm)

Oh. *perks up* This Administrator isn't yawning. That gives me some encouragement.

submitted by Mary W., age 11
(March 21, 2009 - 12:39 pm)