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We got away
We got away with it. We got away. "Kill the filthy Jews" is our moto. As a Nazi that is my job. Kill them, don't feel it, that's how we are trained. Even if we can't find a reason, kill them. Shoot them, gas them, whatever it takes. Hatred for them flows through my vains and it burns. I watch from my post here at Aushwitz as skeletons walk by. A little ways off the Jews dig their own grave - a huge-empty-soon-to-be-filled pit. I walk over to watch. "Faster!" I scream in German. One falls. "Get up or I'll shoot you!" He doesn't get up. I pull the cold metal trigger. He's dead. "At least he's already down in his grave," laugh the other Nazis. I laugh, too. Anger and hatred flow through me stronger then ever. I climb back up to my watch post. One Jew stops to reast and I shoot. He falls. It's a game. Who ever kills the most Jews wins.
No one can stop us. They try and we kill. We rule. We dominate. I'm called to the gas chambers. "Watch the pump and make sure all are dead," laughs General Kingston. "I'm going to get the little ones." I wait. He brings them. He tells them to go in once the showers are cleared out. Happy as can be, they skip through the door. We shut it and turn the lock. The gas is turned on. Screams fill the air. They are dead. Another batch gone.
Next day we get a call. Some Jews were hidden in someone's home in Amsterdam. We drive there in our black, shiny cars. "Are there any Jews here?" I ask in German. "No" a terrified voice on the other side of the door replies, also in German. We break down the door. We search and destroy, searching for the filthy Jews. Soon we find five of them. Gun shots resonate through the house. We leave in good spirits. Hitler would be proud of us. We march on down the street toward the house and people who called us to the Jews. We thank the family and pay them their reward. We march back to our cars. Our flag, the Nazi flag, waves in the breeze. "Heil Hitler," I think it in my head. We win again.
*Just so all of you know this is not me. I tried to right from a Nazi's point of view. I try not to cry when I think of this stuff so.....yeah leave me some comments!!!*
submitted by Snickers, age 13, somewhere thats
(May 3, 2009 - 6:43 pm)
(May 3, 2009 - 6:43 pm)
I think it's great. I admire anyone who can do Historical Fiction. There are a few very minor inconsistencies, but hey, it's hard getting every little fact straight. For example, I think people at that time would say "The Fuhrer ((spelling?!)) would be proud" instead of "Hitler would be proud". (Though I'm not sure.) Oh, and Snickers, are you Kit Kat being another chocolate bar, or are you someone else?
(May 4, 2009 - 10:03 am)
No...Snickers is a unique individual! and hey, so am I!!!!! I think...unless Snickers is possesing me. Snickers, are you possessing me?
(May 8, 2009 - 7:02 pm)
YOU CAME BACK!!!!! Yay! Yay! And yes, that is good compared to what all the evil judges think. (ok, ps I met Snickers here at the writing comp., and the judges totally trashed this story, saying it was too predictable! I mean, what are the Jews supposed to do, fly away on a unicorn?) SNICK is BACK!!!!!!
(May 8, 2009 - 7:00 pm)
Must bring this to first page.
(May 8, 2009 - 7:06 pm)
C'mon, silly thread, jump to first page!;D And,
by the way, that was good, but just so sad...:(
*sniffle, sniffle*
(May 10, 2009 - 1:21 pm)
Well-written, but... *sniff* so sad. :(
(May 10, 2009 - 5:35 pm)
That's really good. I was practically crying when I read it, only, the spelling sort of takes away from the overall perfection of it. *winces* I'm sorry, I didn't mean it, it's really very good! I think I'd better keep my mouth shut.
(May 11, 2009 - 2:20 pm)
I, too, admire anyone who can write HF. I usually don't. Too much research involved. ;)
It's great, though- you did an exemplary job of writing from a Nazi point of view (ha, I admire good villain-players too. Having received such a "compliment" from Lena myself. :) )
I'm guessing that's not the whole story? (Or is it?) If so, was that an excerpt, or the beginning?
P.S. Yeah, Snicker's back- I remember a Snickers posting a few months ago or something, but only once. Welcome back, Snickers!
(May 11, 2009 - 3:54 pm)
This is really good and it made me cry. I'm learning abou the Holocaust in school, but everything we learn dosen't bring home the feeling and determination that the Nazis felt to kill all the Jews. The only thing I would say was that you used the word "dead' too much. And.. ok, I'm going to shut my mouth *ducks to avoid flying iron skillet* *hides under couch*
(May 13, 2009 - 6:38 pm)
Well, it is about the Holocaust, but yes, try and find a synonym for "dead" that might work.
(May 15, 2009 - 3:25 pm)
Actually, "dead"'s pretty okay, it's mostly "kill" that's overused. (Are we really having this discussion? :) )
(May 15, 2009 - 3:26 pm)
I love your point of view. I enjoy learning about the Holocaust and was actually thinking of writing a story myself.(: I have read many books about this subject, but none from the Nazi's point of view. I actually did a piece for speech from Cricket about the Holocaust, it was called "The Color of Hope."
(May 16, 2009 - 1:59 pm)
That was really good! It really made you feel. I mean, that part about "going to get the little ones" and the screams and everything. It made me feel so.....horrified, I guess! I would never be able to write something like that!!! That was so amazing!
p.s. Is there more? It was really good, but I'm wondering if that was the whole thing, or not?
p.p.s. That was soooooo good!!!!!!!
(May 17, 2009 - 5:19 pm)
Yesterday on my last day of Hebrew School I read a poem about the Holocaust. I don't know why I brought it up, I just thought it fit in here.
(May 18, 2009 - 7:25 am)