It is so good!!  The only thing that I don't like is the huge amount of spelling errors.  If you do not know how to spell words, you can always ask us, one of us at least will know the answer, even the admins.  The way you write the people's dialogue is not too good, but I can teach you.

 Ex:

"You cannot raise that child.  She is human," said Tigred.  "What do you not understand?"

"I don't understand why.  She is just a child," said Nira.  "What is so wrong about raising a human child?"

Hello Lia, I think you know me as shadow.

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Ok, so I Edited my Prologue. Here it is; I hope you like it.

THE MOON'S CHILD

PROLOGUE

Five summer old Luna was curled up with two wolf pups now this
looked odd because she was human and they were wolfs, mean while
there was a argument going on between the she wolf known as Nira and
the Alva Tigred, 

"You cannot raise that child; she is human!" said
Tigred. "What do you not understand?"

"I don’t under stand  why, she is just a child."said
Nira. "what is so wrong about raising a human child?"

"There is much you do not under stand Nira." 

"May be so, but I do no one thing, that she needs me."

"She would grow up fine in the human village."

"No you don’t under stand!"

" Nira please, when she grows up she will be just like every
human, a killer, she will bring nothing but misery to are pack,
please listen, Nira please"

"No she is not a threat I have raised her for five summers
and she not a threat."

" I will never put my pack in danger, not even for you,
Nira."

"You don’t under stand,she will die out side the pack" 

"Nira you now that is not true."

"Please just listen to me, you have to believe, Tigred
please."

"Sigh, tell me what is so important about her."

"She is a child of are great queen, the Moon."

"If what you tell me is true,then let the moon claim the
child, if she does, then you may keep her, if not I will take her to
the human village."

"Yes" Nira carried Luna out of the cave placing her on
the long soft grass and said "If Luna is your child,then claim
her" and her and Tigred waited for some thing to happen, and it
did, the moon sent down a ray of light it should have woken up the
child, but some how it did not, it encircled her lifting her gently
of the ground and placed her back down,

Tigred sighed"you may raise the child, but when she turns 12
summers you must tell her the truth."

"I under stand, Tigred" said Nira.

Thanks for reading,

Lia M.

Do you want me to edit this for you? Or at least give you suggestions? Here, I'll do it as Viola does for my story I'm writing in Kyngdom. Here you go! (again, you dont have to take any of these sujestions. They're just sugestions) I'll write all the edits and sugestions in bold. Like this.

Five summers old, Luna was curled up with two wolf pups.

Maybe add something here? Like, something about her apperance, wavy hair, short teeth, give the readers a surprise when you tell them she is human.

Now this looked odd because she was human; and they were wolfs. 

Also maybe add something here? Like, show the reader around the cave, the camp, the sky, ect. Give more depth to what youre telling them. 

Meanwhile there was a argument going on between the she-wolf known as Nira and the Alva Tigred:

"You cannot raise that child; she is human!" (maybe something instead of said? Like, barked, growled, hissed, demanded, ect.) 
Tigred. "What do you not understand?"

"I don’t understand why, she is just a child."

I'm confused. Why is there a why in there? Maybe do, I dont understand why you're so upset, she is just a child. Or something like that. Or, I do understand, but she is a child. 

said Nira. "what is so wrong about raising a human child?"

"There is much you do not understand Nira." 

"May be so, but I do know one thing, and that is she needs me."

"She would grow up fine in the human village."

"No you don’t understand!"

"Nira please, when she grows up she will be just like every
human, a killer, she will bring nothing but misery to are pack,
please listen, Nira please"

"No she is not a threat I have raised her for five summers
and she not a threat."

" I will never put my pack in danger, not even for you,
Nira."

"You don’t under stand,she will die out side the pack" 

"Nira you now that is not true."

"Please just listen to me, you have to believe, Tigred
please."

"Sigh, tell me what is so important about her."

"She is a child of are great queen, the Moon."

"If what you tell me is true,then let the moon claim the
child, if she does, then you may keep her, if not I will take her to
the human village."

"Yes" Nira carried Luna out of the cave placing her on
the long soft grass and said "If Luna is your child,then claim
her" and her and Tigred waited for some thing to happen, and it
did, the moon sent down a ray of light it should have woken up the
child, but some how it did not, it encircled her lifting her gently
of the ground and placed her back down,

Tigred sighed"you may raise the child, but when she turns 12
summers you must tell her the truth."

"I under stand, Tigred" said Nira. 

Alright, so those sugestions I made pretty much go for all of it. Make sure to include more detal! And another thing, When there is a period there is always a capital letter after. Proper nouns are alwyas capitilized. And if you think your sentance sounds long, its a run on sentance. Also, the diolog is fine. Just remember detale! And can I ask how old you are?  

All positive feedback, written in italics--

Five summers old Luna was curled up with two wolf pups now this looked odd because she was human and they were wolves, meanwhile there was an argument going on between the she-wolf known as Nira and the Alpha Tigred, 

I love this part. Using the word summer makes it more of...well...summer. More wolflike. However, there is many spelling mistakes. But that's fine, it's just spelling, I can correct it at any time. :) 

"You cannot raise that child, she is human," said Tigred "what do you not understand!?"

I love seeing the differences between humans and wolves, it's, well, a strange and upsetting relationship that you've portrayed beautifully. However, give a few reasons why a human child would be awful. I do believe that you do so towards the end, and if so I wrote that for no reason. :) 

"I don't understand why she is just a child. " Said Nira. "What is so wrong about raising a human child?!"

What is wrong!? This reminds me of how Icicle/Icy was raised by animals as well, and speaks beautifully to me in such a sad way. Humans and animals must learn to coexist.

"There is much you do not understand, Nira!"

Making Nira lower than him, since he is the Alpha. Barking at her. I do believe that Tigred is also reflecting this onto himself, unbeknownst to himself. 

"Maybe so but I do know one thing, that she needs me."

"She would grow up fine in the human village."

"No, you don't understand!"

An outcry, a plead as well as a yell. 

"Nira, please, when she grows up she will be just like every human, a killer, she will bring nothing but misery to our pack, please listen, Nira please!"

A killer. The only humans that animals have the option to experience are ones that hunt them. I love how this is shown.

"No, she is not a threat, I have raised her for five summers and she has been nothing but kind."

Summers instead of years. A strange yet so fitting way. And I've noticed that you make the wolves speak in their own ways, such as using "I have" instead of I've, and I think that that's very good to show that wolves speak differently than humans, distinctly.

" I will never put my pack in danger, not even for you, Nira."

Not even for you. Is there love there? 

"You don't understand, she will die outside the pack!" 

A mother's love is a very special thing. Is Nira placing herself as a mother to this child? 

"Nira, you know that is not true."

That is instead of that's. Another wolflike tendency. I love it. 

"Please just listen to me, you have to believe, Tigred, please!"

More outcries. Such a beautiful language of a mother's love. 

"sigh, tell me what is so important about her."

Don't include the word 'sigh', make it be 'Tigred sighed', etc. I love this, however. He's caving into the she-wolf's pleads. 

"She is a child of our great queen, the Moon."

A bold claim. I think you intended this. It's interesting and I love hearing how a wolf acts differently than a human in that way--they love the moon. Perfect and fitting. 

"If what you tell me is true, then let the moon claim the child, if she does then you may keep her. If not, I will take her to the human village" 

He's challenging her authority, challenging her mind. The claim is wild, and they both know it. However, Nira is too confident in the fact that this is true. I love that.

"Yes." Nira carried Luna out of the cave, placing her on the long, soft grass and said--"if Luna is your child, then claim her." And her and Tigred waited for some thing to happen, and it did. The moon sent down a ray of light. A ray of light. So beautiful, showing that the wolves are smarter than humans about these things, and also showing that there is light in the night. I use the word beautiful too much. it should have woken up the child, but some how it did not. It encircled her lifting her gently of the ground and placed her back down,

Tigred sighed. "You may raise the child, but when she turns twelve summers you must tell her the truth."

The important part of a short story, a backstory, is giving, well, an outline for the future as well as an explanation for the past. I see this outline here, and you've also included a conflict and a way to resolve it--temporarily. He has caved in to her pleads, and agreed with her, giving us a feeling of happiness/the thought that the deed is resolved, and triumph, happiness for Nira. 

"I understand, Tigred." said Nira 

This does not mean that Tigred isn't wise. He, in fact, is actually nearly wiser than her, except on one subject, from what you've shown so far. He's the alpha for a reason. 

This is the next part. I hope you like it.

Chapter one (part one)

Luna’s long dark hair flew like a
flag behind her, as she ran through the woods. She was so exited,
today she was turning twelve summers old. This was even more
important then my naming ceremony. Luna thought. She would get to go
on her quest, she would find out who she was, who she was meant

to be, what job she would have in the
pack. This was the best day of her whole live. “Mother Nira, wake
up.” Luna said “I am turning twelve summers today. I get to go on
my quest today.” OK Luna” Nira yawned. “Wait up.” But Luna
did not hear her because She was already there. Tigred stood waiting
for her. “Luna,” Tigred said. “were is your mother, Nira?”

“She is back at the cave, getting
Rose ready.” said Luna.

“I see.” said Tigred. “Sit next
to me.”

Luna sat next to him. Nira rived with
Rose.

Nira, you need to tell her.” said
Tigred

“Tell me what?” asked Luna.

“Nothing, Luna.” said Nira.

“Nira, you have to tell her.”

“OK.” Nira sighed. “ Luna, I need
to tell you something.”

“What is it Mother Nira?” asked
Luna.

“I, I, I am not your real mother.
Nira stammered. “You are a human, a daughter of our great Queen the
Moon.”

Thanks for Reading,

Lia M.

Are you the same person as Lia from Kyngdom?

Anyways, the story is very good. 

I need a ilustrator for The Moons Child. Every body who wants to be my ilustrator please post your cover art for the moons child here. Then I will choose who I want to ilistrate the moons child.

have fun 

Lia