Emotional writing contest

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Emotional writing contest

Emotional writing contest! 

Okay, so I haven't seen one of these in awhile, and I was like what the heck I need some inspiration from my fellow writers so why not make a writing contest? 

Alright, so we need judges. I am unreliable so that's why people are becoming judges. We can have 1-3. You guys can figure out a way to discuss the story lines properly and such together, if you want to do more then one judge. If not, that's fine too, easier for the judge. 

Any who, this ain't no ordinary contest. That's right, this is going to be a hard one. And on going. So, let me explain. 

The themes will be emotions. So whoever portrays the selected emotion the best wins. Ah, but, you have to make the reader feeeel this emotion. Joy, sadness and fear are easy ones. We can start off with one of those if you like. As we go along, I'll have people pick the trickier ones. As in surprised, disgusted, angry, etc. The winner of the previous round will be the judge or one of the judges if they like, and will pick the next emotion. 

Okay, of that was confusing, lemme try again. I'll pick an emotion. The one who best portrays that emotion, and makes whoever reads it feal that emotion the best, wins. You guys can pick the first judge/judges. Whoever wins picks the next emotion, and can either pick the next judges or become a judge him/herself and has the option to pick some others.

I might join in this first one, but maybe not, life Is unpredictable. Oh, the due date for this writing is a week from Wednesday.

Let me or the judges know if that's not enough time! 

First theme is....

Sadness! 

Ready set write! Whosoever makes me cry wins a gold star!  

submitted by Claaws, age Class 2020
(February 26, 2018 - 11:24 pm)

I assume we should switch judges...?

submitted by @Claaws,@Writers, Inky
(March 24, 2018 - 1:29 pm)

Yes, but the judge/judges of this round can still be the judges for the next one, too. If you want.

submitted by Claaws
(March 26, 2018 - 10:20 pm)

I'll join in

submitted by Book Worm, age 15, Florida
(March 28, 2018 - 11:29 am)

I can be a judge for this round. I love scary stories. Horror is one of my favorite genre. 

submitted by Embers
(March 29, 2018 - 6:20 pm)

Hey guys,

I've had a lot of fun doing this, but I have a lot of other things going on, so I'm going to stop. Sorry if that's inconvenient for anyone. 

submitted by Alisa Quickshadow
(March 30, 2018 - 3:37 pm)

I just started reading through this thread and.... wow. Sou D...... that actually really struck a cord with me, because there are certain people who have died that I still feel sad about. That was..... terrifyingly realistic. And very, very sad. That was also very well written. Aaw Alisa! Oh well. 

Hhhm. Could I perhaps try to enter for fear? I do enjoy that.... I dunnow, what has always attracted me to the Watership Down-The books- stories is that the author manages to convey images that from a rabbit perspective are truly horrifying, and make us feel that horror or fear. The original movie adaptation of it is.... weird. It had really disturbing images in it and had bits where it was..... erm..... really creepy. Then Disney (OH JOY WHATEVER I DON'T LIKE DISNEY BLEH BLEH BLEH) made a newer adaptation of it and it was.... actually kind of disapointing to me. Still fun to watch though. Somehow I really enjoy being freaked out-to a certain level. When you get to freakyfreakyfreaky Nightvale style I close the book. Anyways, may I enter?

submitted by Chinchilla
(April 1, 2018 - 1:46 pm)

Anyone can enter if they want to. The story dealine is somewhere around this Saterday from what I can tell. So far, it hasn't been changed. Good luck! I'm pretty sure I'm judging this round so, scare me! 

submitted by Embers
(April 2, 2018 - 1:16 pm)

Yay! Okay... mm..... trying to think of ideas..... PHEW yes got one now. I think. Mmmm. I shall try my best, Ember! (Also if it comes off totally pretentious don't hate me! Also-anyone here in competitive swimming?)

submitted by Chinchilla
(April 2, 2018 - 5:59 pm)

UGH it's gonna be bad because I'm scared of dumb things.

Here's my entry. *Hands over unwillingly*

~~~

Imagine.

You're nothing.

You're nowhere

Everywhere

Anywhere 

All at the same time.

Time is passing.

Years

Decades

Centuries

You don't change for infinity

You stay the same

For ever

and ever

and ever

Nothing 

Ever

Changes. 

~~~

Elena says wpow.  I hope you think it will get blown out of the park too, Elena. 

submitted by Lucy B., age 13, Emmilvien
(April 4, 2018 - 3:16 am)

I like how you took a small idea and strethced it out to get others to see what you see. It deffinitly is a disterbing thought. 

submitted by Embers
(April 4, 2018 - 10:28 am)

It certainly is.

I liked that! Mmm. Okay... I got an OIDEA bert I dern't know how to start it.... mm.

 

Imagine you're alone.

Just in your house.

Nobody else is there.

You've got some time to yourself.

To maybe go onto the computer, play a game.

After a little while, you're on the couch reading. You pause for a moment, a lull in the storyline giving you time to think. It seems.... really silent. You don't know where the cats are. You let them out a few hours earlier. Just you in the house. It's very quiet, and you feel like just your breathing is uncomfortably loud. You rest your head onto the couch. Even that small, movement, just with the small accompianing creak, also is uncomfortably loud, relaying your position to anything else in the house.

You shrug it off, and turn back to reading your book, although that uncomfortable feeling in your stomach doesn't go away. You're really starting to get into the plot, you're totally absorbed in the book, when you hear a small creak. You pause reading, your eyes in the same place, but the rest of your senses scanning the area. You wait a few seconds, and then put it down to the house settling down. You swallow slightly, and have the creeping senation that you are not alone. Which is unfortunate considering you know you are alone. You try to get back into the book, but you can't. Finally you decide to go for a walk, the empty house is starting to creep you out. You get up, and quickly throw on your sweater-it's pretty cold outside.You hurriedly tie your shoes, a sense of urgency, and the usual flight signal going to your brain, making you want to get out of the house as fast as possible. You try to shove images of something coming into view behind you, stepping out from the corner where the entranceway ends and the inside of the house begins, from your mind. It's evening, so it's getting dark in the house.

You quickly rise up and open the door, a creeping sensation feeling the pit of your stomach. You walk outside, the air is cool, nipping at your exposed face, and the door shuts with a small click behind you. The fall trees shake slightly in the wind. You zip up your sweater up to your chin, and go for a walk. As the house recedes into the distance, tall poplar trees crowding around you as you venture into the woods, you get that same feeling, making you think of eyes watching you. You swallow slightly. The wind picks up more, and you start to regret leaving the warm house for your walk, and the wind blows your hair into your face. You brush it aside, and-you spot a movement in the corner of your eye.....

You turn quickly, and, of course, it's gone. You stop walking, and survey the forest around you, just moving your eyes. Nothing but dead stumps and trees. The poplars' leaves rustle in the wind. You trn back to the house-it's getting dark, and it's easy to mistake a log for a monster in the low light. You walk quickly, cupping your hands to the side of your head so you can only see directly ahead-anything in the corner of your eyes is likely to freak you out before you realise it's a dead log. A coyote's howl cuts through the air, but unlike when you usually hear them in the house, it seems more scary than beautiful. Also, it's only one, so that is a little strange. You walk a little faster, knowing that your brain is probably hardwired to recognise that sound and activate your fight-or-flight instincts. But your imagination prevails, painting images of some kind of mutant coyote-with ll eyes, glimmering sickly in the low light. You hear footsteps behind you-

You whirl around, leaves swirling around you. There is, predictably, nothing....

But you still feel like you're being watched.... You turn back to the house and break into a quick jog, taking your hands back from the dies of your head, leaving your imagination to do what it will with the corners of your eyes. You finally reach the house-there's a light on-maybe your parents came back sooner than expected. You stop-your parents said that they would be back at nine-at the earliest. Also, their car isn't in the gravel driveway. Your watch says it's still six-thirty. It's getting very dark, and you squint your eyes to see who' inside the house-maybe burglars?  But wouldn't they leave the light off then? You step back involuntarily.... you see a dark shadow stalk towards the indow. It stops, and all you see, with it suluhetted against the light, are shiny, shiny eyes. You feel a prickling sensation on the back of your neck. You feel like the the shadow is watching you. You turn around, and behind you you see the forest swarming with.... eyes. You feel a very horrible feeling as you realise that something is watching you.....

And it maye never stop-

BRING BRING BRING -

You wake up-it's nine o'clock. You lie  back into the couch, your book is still in your hand. Phew. You hear your parents' car going up into the driveway. You sigh in relief, and quickly run out to meet them through the door.

You don't notice the eyes shining underneath the couch....

~~~~~

MWHANHAHAHAHAH!!!!! REVEL IN MY BAD WRITING! As I said, I'm not especially good at writing frighteneing things.... That is my entry. Also, no, I do not usually have feelings of being watched. It's simply a very creepy feeling that i am scared of. Also, we people are not scared of the dark. We're scared of what's in it. 

submitted by Chinchilla
(April 5, 2018 - 4:20 pm)

I like this a lot. I enjoyed how you took a different aproach and wrote the entire thing in second person. It isn't done often, and I fell if it is writen well, you feel more like the thing is happening directly to you. You use allot of imagry in your writing, and more than just sight that helps paint a vivid picture. To be honest, until I read the last line, I felt a little cheated that the entire thing was a dream. I personally believe that that is the cheap way out, but then you added the twist with the las line. My critiqu would be that your story moves a bit fast, especially the ending (Don't worry, I do it too) so just try to slow it donw. Good job! I'll deside the results on Saterday. 

submitted by Embers
(April 5, 2018 - 8:28 pm)

Wow!  That is really good!  I can imagine all the times where I'm alone and this kind of weirdness happens.  Usually while I'm playing piano...Probably because it's a scary instrument.

submitted by Lucy B., age 13, Emmilvien
(April 5, 2018 - 9:46 pm)

Thank you Embers! yes, I ended that rather quickly, I needed to get off the computer soon. Thank you for your critiquing of my post! That's helped my writing. Thanks Lucy B!

submitted by Chinchilla
(April 6, 2018 - 12:46 pm)

AAAAAGGGGHHAAAAHHHHHHHHHHaaaaHHHHHHHHaaaaaaahhhhhhHHHHHHHHAAAAAaaaaaaaahhhhhhhhHHHHHHHH

EEEEEEEEEEEEgggggggggggAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH

*Quivers* 

Thanks a lot, that really made my day, Imma gonna be looking behind me for the rest of the afternoon. I haven't even read any of the other entries yet. 

*Walks off, muttering and shifting eyes around* 

submitted by Leafpool, age Shivering, Terrified out of her wits
(April 6, 2018 - 3:12 pm)