Hey, I need

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Hey, I need

Hey, I need some help with a novel I'm atempting to write. I've got a fair amount done, 32 pages of the 1st draft, but I'm kinda stuck. The story is about a boy named Mike who lives with his parents on Mars in the future. He has no friends except for his grandpa who lives on Venus and tragically dies in the begining of the book. Mike's parents are ex-U.S. government people and don't like Mike spending that much time with his grandpa who used to be against a ot of the government's policies back on Earth. After the Earth was laid waist and the oxygen was running out, the government evacuated to the colonies on Mars and Venus where they live when the story starts. The adults don't want to tell their childern that they left the people behind to die, so in the history books they make it seem like they stayed till the last possible moment, then barely escaped. Mike beleives this, until his teacher spilles the beans and he finds some of his grandpa's journals that are from the last years on Earth. They talk about some of the things that are wrong with the way Earth has become, and how his grandpa made up a pen name and wrote a story that was supposed to help people realize the error of their ways, but it was too late to do anything about it. I want to write a few more entries before I continue on, but I don't know what to write about. If anyone has some ideas about what would be wrong with the Earth, or what the future would be like or anything else, I'm open to sugestion. Thanks a million! Oh, and yes all this is COPYRIGHTED so no stealing!!!!!!!!!!!! Thanks again! Smile

 

Maybe on Earth, people didn't take care of the environment and were selfish?

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submitted by Emma L., age 13, Chicago
(September 4, 2009 - 6:41 pm)

@Admin: Aw, but that's rather... shall we say... cliche? Especially with the big Global Warming scare nowadays. 

Personally, I'd go with a more natural disaster path, you know, massive seismic activities, volcanic eruption, maybe an ice age or something. For a bit of a twist (because I think GW in general is a load of tosh) I'd say that humans were trying to prevent global warming, and succeeded to the point that they inadvertently caused a massive ice age of a scale greater than anything that the earth had previously seen... That and overpopulation. "Earth That Was could no longer sustain our numbers..." /Firefly obsession. Overpopulation is good.

Or another thing, ethanol could have replaced natural gas as the main fuel source, and human society would have collapsed because the new fuels could only sustain (what is it?) 12% or so of the energy demand. And when the move to other planets was made, humans just mined the moon for helium-3 and the extraterrestrial colonies have been happily running ever since.

 

submitted by TNÖ, age 16, Deep Space
(September 5, 2009 - 12:48 am)

:O Weird! One of my best friends is an "Emma L" and she posted on here for a while, but you aren't the same person, I don't think... This doesn't sound like her at all...

submitted by Emma O
(June 20, 2010 - 11:20 am)

Haha! Nope, it's not her! She and I live in Oregon, so... ;) That's funny, though.

submitted by Emma
(June 20, 2010 - 11:21 am)