okay, here's an

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okay, here's an

okay, here's an excerpt from two stories I want to write. Which one should be first? or should I not do one at all?

The few things she remembered about the accident were Emmet's pale fingers reaching out to Chris as he fell in slow motion into the street, a high pitched scream, (maybe her own,) a traffic light blinkking green, and a yellow mustang stopping at the curb a little too late...

here's roughly a shortened version of the summary for the other. Please excuse the fact that there are no new paragraphs.

"Am I going to die, Cat?" she asked softly. "Everyone has to die, Jenna." her sister said tenderly. "No." insisted Jenna. "I mean, soon. What if the doctor's aren't able to save me?" Cat looked deep into her sister's eyes. "They will, Jen. They won't let anything happen to you. And neither will I." "Promise?" "I promise."  And it was that broken promise and little white lie that turned Catherine Rose Montgomery's world upside down.

submitted by Katie, age 11, Outside looking
(September 15, 2009 - 3:38 pm)

I like, but it's a bit morbid. Is the first one Twilight fanfic? No offense meant!

submitted by Reuben
(September 15, 2009 - 5:04 pm)

just cuz I used the Emmet does not mean it's a Twilight fanfic! sorry. did not mean to get angry.

submitted by Katie, age 11, Outside looking
(September 16, 2009 - 4:07 pm)

I like morbid. 'Tis good. :)

The twi-Emmett has two t's, also. Should memory serve.

submitted by Mary W., age 11.71, NJ
(September 16, 2009 - 7:27 pm)

Aw. :( They're both sad, but I still like them! :)

Tragic things (like death *coughcough*) always draw me into stories... o.O *shrug* Anyway, good work. ;D

submitted by Megan M., age 14, Ohio
(September 16, 2009 - 6:07 pm)

I love both beginnings! They've very good hooks.

submitted by Allison
(September 17, 2009 - 3:33 pm)

Wow! Really good!

submitted by Emma O.
(September 18, 2009 - 7:26 pm)