Poem by GloWorm

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Poem by GloWorm

Poem by GloWorm

 

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In the Garden

Flowers surrounding me with smiles of sweet scents

Laying down on a bed of violets

Feeling like I'm floating

Falling asleep

In the Garden

submitted by GloWorm, age 12, USA
(September 17, 2009 - 12:17 pm)

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Good, but have you thought about lengthening it?

submitted by Katie, age 11, Outside looking
(September 19, 2009 - 8:27 pm)

You mean making it longer?

Right now I mostly write short poems.

submitted by Gloworm, age 12, USA
(September 26, 2009 - 10:31 am)

It's very good!

submitted by Ima
(October 12, 2009 - 7:56 pm)

Love it! The second line is soooo good. You could add more adjectives to the other lines... but it's great just as is. It really captures the feeling.

submitted by Olivecube
(April 4, 2013 - 6:27 pm)