Fall Poem/and Haikus by

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Fall Poem/and Haikus by

Fall Poem/and Haikus by Gloworm. (The middle one is actually spring, oh well.)

 

Big curious eyes

Brown in color peer from trees

hidden from your sight.

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Drip drop cold rain falls

onto your bedroom window

and slides out of sight

-----

Autumn trees show-off

their autumn leaves as they

dance in the cold wind

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Walking through the woods

lit by the gold hue of the

changing leaves

Crunching the sticks and

scaring a deer as she

walks with her triplets

Twiling with the icy wind

as she wraps her frigid

arms around me

Admiring the beauty of Autumn.

submitted by Gloworm, age 12, USA
(October 26, 2009 - 1:14 pm)

back to the Inkwell

Wow, Gloworm! Those were great! I liked the last one the best, though. I liked the line

"lit by the golden hue" and "as she wraps her frigid arms around me." It's more my style. Keep up the good work!

submitted by Katie, age 11, Outside looking
(October 26, 2009 - 5:14 pm)

Thanks, those are my favorite lines too. :)

submitted by GloWorm, age 12, USA
(October 27, 2009 - 9:35 am)

Ooh, I like these poems! The first one is kind of like me.  I have brown eyes.  And I climb  in  trees.  Heh.  I just wrote a Haiku without even trying.  And it rhymes.  And, so you know what I'm talking about, I'll make it slant.  *makes it slant*  It has seventeen syllables.  The second poem makes me think of a book I really like.  And in the middle line of the third poem, there are six syllables, not seven, if I am correct.  But I may be wrong.  It is a great poem, without being a haiku.  The last one was very pretty.  I like the line 'lit by the gold hue of the changing leaves'.  :D  

submitted by Meadow, age IL, 11
(October 27, 2009 - 4:43 pm)

Yeah; I noticed that, but I decided just to keep it in hakiu form, without making it hakiu. Lol; you didn't write a hakiu. You had 8, 4, 5. Silly =P (I mean silly in the friendly way, not like STUPID!)

Thanks!

submitted by GloWorm, age 12, USA
(October 27, 2009 - 5:14 pm)

Yeah, sometimes I don't notice things, and then I notice it afterwards.  I could put it like this, if it isn't against the rules:

The first one is kind

of like me.  I have brown eyes.

And I climb in trees.

Can I do that to make a haiku?  Or do you have to have three sentices 5, 7, 5?  (X^D)    

submitted by Meadow
(October 28, 2009 - 9:28 am)

:P Nope, has to be 5,7,5.

submitted by GloWorm, age 12, USA
(October 29, 2009 - 9:26 am)

Okay...  Then I did not make a haiku.  I made a rhyming poem, though!  :D

submitted by Meadow
(October 29, 2009 - 12:49 pm)

Hi, Gloworm, you must be like, the ultimite fan of  Inkwell!!!!!!!!!!

I have nothing against you or your poem, but....

I HATE AUTUMN!!!!!

 

(sorry)

submitted by Ham is good, age old enough, Bucking'HAM' pa
(October 29, 2009 - 5:11 pm)

LOL Meadow! :D

Hi Ham Is Good - Thanks for the comment. And yes, I do love inkwell. =D

submitted by GloWorm, age 12, USA
(October 30, 2009 - 11:52 am)

Here's my "Ode to Coffee." It's really weird. (what a suprise!)

Remember Coffee?

I do. Ah, the joy!

Seeing that hot wet liquid

in

a 

cup!

But it is cold.

And I must die.

submitted by Mary Jo, age 13, Georgia
(October 30, 2009 - 3:24 pm)

*gaspeth* Me loves....*big eyes* Here's mine:

I love coffee.

Because I am koffee.

And I am also sugar high right now. :D

submitted by Koffee
(November 1, 2009 - 7:56 pm)

Oh my gosh!!!! Mary, that's amazing!!!! :D Here's mine

Deep, rich, dark, and exotic
The smell of coffee beans
Darkest brown, lightest white
The sight of coffee mxing with milk
Sweetness billows all around
The smell of sugar surrounds me
Diving in with a plink
The sound of ice cubes jumping in
Cool, creamy, liqiud silk
The feeling of icey coffee pouring down my throat.
Mmmmmm.

TADA!! I know, it's amazing! :D Just kidding. 

submitted by Emma
(November 6, 2009 - 7:27 pm)