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TNÖ's NaNoWriMo '09... OF DOOM!!!! [evil laughter goes here]

The prologue!

Prologue

 

The king stood at the top of a staircase, feeling proud. His two lovely daughters were growing up nicely, his cooks were at the top of their game, the musicians he had just hired were undeniably excellent, and his birthday was in two days. Yes, it was a very good time to be king, he thought.

His musings were interrupted by an almost inaudible creak. The king started to turn around, only to feel a hard shove in the small of his back. He pitched forward, tumbling down the stairs, and landed sprawled on his back. He blinked, trying to clear his vision.

A tall, dark-haired man swam into view. He had a dagger in his hand and a thin smile on his face.

"Ah," managed the king, trying to get his breath back. "Du Slomen. Got the better of me at last, I see."

Du Slomen nodded. "Yes, your majesty. It took some doing, though."

The king tried and failed to smile. "Er... If you don't mind, du Slomen, make it quick. And leave the beard."

"Of course, your majesty," du Slomen replied smoothly. "It is my firm belief that kings must be assassinated with as much elegance as possible. It is only fitting."

"Good man," said the king. "And, about my daughters- at least give them a head start, will you?"

"That is traditional, I believe, your majesty." Du Slomen sighed, and turned the knife slowly in his fingers. "And now, I'm afraid I must say goodbye."

"Right. Good luck, then." The king closed his eyes. A moment later there was a stinging pain in his stomach and he grunted loudly.

 

The Count- now King- du Slomen stared down at the twitching body of the former king. He had been a good king, disinclined to burning down villages and fair with the taxes, but ambition was ambition and when one wanted to be king there was nothing for it but to stamp out the existing royal family. He knelt and delicately tugged the crown off of the dying king's head.

"Sorry, your majesty," he whispered. "But all's fair in the courts of Nok, eh?"

The former king gasped a little, and died.

Du Slomen stood up, shrugging, and dropped the crown onto his own head. It shrunk obligingly to fit, buzzing softly and growing warm. He gently wiped the blood from his dagger and tucked it into his belt.

"Guard!" he called.

"Majest- oh! Count du Slomen." A burly man dressed in chain mail and carrying a long spear leaned into the throne room.

"King du Slomen now."

"Of course, your majesty," said the guard. "What is it that you require?"

Du Slomen smiled a little. "If you would be so kind as to wake his daughters? It was his dying wish that they get a head start."

"Right away, majesty. I'll alert the other guards on the way, majesty, if you wish."

"Yes, do," du Slomen said with a brief nod. "And once the princesses have gotten away, send someone in to collect the body. He'll have a fine funeral tomorrow."

The guard bowed hastily and left.

Du Slomen smiled to himself. After years of quiet assassination, two cleverly orchestrated marriages, and a long, hard journey to the center city of Nok, he was finally, finally the king.

"Told you I could do it, eh, father?" he said, unable to entirely banish the smugness from his voice.

A whispery sigh sounded behind him. "I suppose you were right, Vincent. I was wrong about you."

Du Slomen turned to smile at the yellowed, papery ghost of his father. "I'm glad to have proved you wrong, then."

"As am I," whispered the ghost.

"Can you rest in peace now?"

His father considered for a while. "Yes," he said at length. "I think so."

"Good. Rest in peace, then, and enjoy the afterlife."

"Good boy," murmured the ghost as it started to dissolve. "Good lad."

Du Slomen smiled as his father vanished from the world. A very good day indeed, disregarding the inevitable stiffness tomorrow from his frantic cross-country ride. A very good day.

submitted by TNÖ, age 16, Deep Space
(November 1, 2009 - 9:50 pm)

Excellent! (more evil laughter) But why do the servants oblige so quickly? is there no loyalty, no fidelity? And what's with the bad guy being, like, good?

anyway, good start! keep working!

submitted by Katie, age 11, outside looking
(November 2, 2009 - 4:08 pm)

As to the servants, Vysk has a very... dynamic... political system.

As for the "bad guy is good", well, I'm not actually sure he *is* the bad guy to be honest. He was supposed to be but then he sort of wasn't... And anyway I like to be nontraditional. X_X 

submitted by TNÖ, age 16, Deep Space
(November 2, 2009 - 6:17 pm)

@ Katie: I think TNO's (umlaut) bad guys are often her protagonists...

@ TNO (umlaut): It's good. I like it. How many words've you got?

And yes, I hate you all for having access to MSWord while I'm in Missouri for my grandmother's funeral. Internet, thankfully, yes. MSWord with all my files--- no. *whines*

Don't you live in Missouri, Katie? Maybe you knew my grandmother... *is suffering mentally from long plane ride and therefore makes nil sense* 

submitted by Mary W., age 11.86, Missouri, actua
(November 2, 2009 - 9:06 pm)

...And there is that, of course, yes. But then, if my novel really has a "Big Bad" I think it's shaping up to be Fate. Again.

6,688, darling. You?

No MSWord for me. It's so slow. I use Pages '08 (WANT to upgrade to '09, but monies must be saved for the new computer...), it's so much easier. Also Write Or Die, because it makes me write fast. Like, 1,000 words per 30 minutes fast. Oh yes. Lifesaver today after getting my wisdom teeth out and then procrastinating for 12 hours.

*beams* *winces because it hurts to smile* 

submitted by TNÖ, age 16, Deep Space
(November 3, 2009 - 12:00 am)

I use SCRIVENER!!!!!!!! I have Pages '09 but I only use it for stuff like school reports. It's so much easier to ORGANIZE one's writing with Scrivener. google it. 

submitted by Timothy C., age 12, classified
(November 3, 2009 - 10:55 am)

What more do I need to organize that I can't just do with the built-in features of Pages (i.e., page thumbnails, the Inspector...?)

I find the flashy features in Scrivener (and most other "professional" writing programs) to be distracting and to detract from my actual time spent writing, which obviously is detrimental in an event like NaNo. Even, for example, Scrivener's script-writing formats can be found under the Misc. section in Pages templates, so what do I need to spend forty bucks on a program for if I can do exactly the same thing with the word processor that came with my computer?

Sorry if this comes off as rude, I just don't like flashy word processors that add some nice graphics and an outline feature and then expect me to think it'll work any better than a simpler but efficient program like Pages. Take, for example, the cork board feature. What would I even need that for? If I really wanted a cork board and index cards to tell me my plot I'd steal some index cards from mom and use the cork board in my friend's room (she's at boarding school in CA, I doubt she'd mind). Or the outline- that's what paper and pencil's for. I hate reading outlines onscreen. 

Ditto the "refer to research" thing. It's called paper, pencil, and note-taking skills. Or if that fails, an actual book and a lot of sticky notes. It's easier to read from physical paper anyway.

And this "snapshot" thing? *whispers* That's what the automatic backup feature on Pages is for. You don't have to do anything, it just makes a backup of the old version for you whenever you save.  

I do wish Pages '08 had the fullscreen mode. That's my only issue, and once I upgrade/get a new computer with iWork '09 that won't be a problem.

...This turned into a rant. I'm sorry, all I meant to say is "I don't much care for "professional writing" word processors. The simpler the better, IMHO." 

submitted by TNÖ, age 16, Deep Space
(November 3, 2009 - 7:07 pm)

*coughs*

@ TNÖ: 

 

What more do I need to organize that I can't just do with the built-in features of Pages (i.e., page thumbnails, the Inspector...?)

Oh well, some people like to be cynical about technology. When you have used Scrivener and Pages to write the same thing with exactly the same words, it is so much easier in Scrivener. In Pages you have to make multiple documents, one per chapter, which becomes hard to refer between, or make one REALLY big document.

I find the flashy features in Scrivener (and most other "professional" writing programs) to be distracting and to detract from my actual time spent writing, which obviously is detrimental in an event like NaNo.

 In the writing part, maybe, but all you have to do is go to full screen mode and novel like a crazed wombat to block out those features. When you edit--ESPECIALLY when you edit and revise--some features can be VERY helpful. More on this below.

 Even, for example, Scrivener's script-writing formats can be found under the Misc. section in Pages templates, so what do I need to spend forty bucks on a program for if I can do exactly the same thing with the word processor that came with my computer?

You have a different situation than mine, then, but I would be willing to bet that iWork '08 only came because you paid extra for it before you bought the computer. Scrivener costs less in the long run.

Sorry if this comes off as rude, I just don't like flashy word processors that add some nice graphics and an outline feature and then expect me to think it'll work any better than a simpler but efficient program like Pages.

Not all it adds is graphics and an outline feature. Try organizing all your character sketches and chapters in a giant set of Pages documents or one big one that's too long. Scrivener gives you a nice organized sidebar. And once you delve deep into the mysteries of Pages, it's not much simpler. Scrivener just looks more complex.

Take, for example, the cork board feature. What would I even need that for? If I really wanted a cork board and index cards to tell me my plot I'd steal some index cards from mom and use the cork board in my friend's room (she's at boarding school in CA, I doubt she'd mind).

The cork board feature lets you change the color of the pins to show what level of revision and editing you've completed on a certain chapter, document, or whatever. It may not help while you're writing the first draft, but it becomes so helpful in the editing and revising, it's not even funny. And... Apple kind of went overboard with the aesthetics in Pages. It's too brushed metal kind of color scheme. :)

Or the outline- that's what paper and pencil's for. I hate reading outlines onscreen. 

I have never used the outline. Neither has my Dad. It is inferior to the corkboard. To tell the truth, I hate reading outlines onscreen too. 

Ditto the "refer to research" thing. It's called paper, pencil, and note-taking skills. Or if that fails, an actual book and a lot of sticky notes. It's easier to read from physical paper anyway.

Your eyes are different than mine, then. And referring stuff to research... character sketches are what I always put in the research section. It is so helpful to be able to put in Scrivener links on pieces of text, so if I don't remember what Elizabeth looks like, I can click on her name and up comes the whole character profile. 

And this "snapshot" thing? *whispers* That's what the automatic backup feature on Pages is for. You don't have to do anything, it just makes a backup of the old version for you whenever you save. 

What about the autosave in Scrivener? You missed that. Every two seconds of "keyboard inactivity", e.g. when you're not actually writing it, the document will automatically save. I don't like having to press Command-S every time I want to pause work on my document; I can just let Scrivener save it for me. And the snapshots are very helpful to see how your thoughts have progressed from the beginning of the writing to wherever you were now... 

I do wish Pages '08 had the fullscreen mode. That's my only issue, and once I upgrade/get a new computer with iWork '09 that won't be a problem.

Fullscreen mode in Pages '09 and Scrivener are basically the same. Scrivener just makes it easier to format it. 

...This turned into a rant. I'm sorry, all I meant to say is "I don't much care for "professional writing" word processors. The simpler the better, IMHO." 

Excuse me for defending my favorite professional writing word processor! And may I note that far more books have been written in Scrivener than Pages, whatever version you are using. I don't expect that'll change anytime soon.

 

submitted by Timothy C., age 12, classified
(November 4, 2009 - 4:08 pm)

1. Wait, you make a new document for every chapter? For goodness sakes *why*? i just make a new section for every chapter and navigate between them with, as I said, the page thumbnails.

2. I keep character sketches, outlines, maps, research notes etc. etc. in a notebook which sits next to me when I write. I keep the novel itself in one document on my computer. I figure it'd take more time to transfer the notebook onto the computer and organize it in Scrivener than it does to flip a few pages to find the information I want. Call me old-fashioned, but is true.

3a. I do all my revisions on a half-size printout with a pen, not on a computer. Then I type up the revision in a new document and print it up on the back of the first printout and repeat. The second document is the one that would optimally get turned into the final draft, but I've never actually gotten that far.

3b. I like the brushed-metal look. And anyway, that's basically a trademark Apple appearance, that's even what their stores and shipping material looks like.

4. I wonder if there are any people who like onscreen outlines?

5. See number two; my notebook is my best friend, and since I don't have a scanner it lets me have actual pencil sketches whereas on the computer I'd only have word descriptions, which would lead to redundancies in my descriptive passages.

6. Hitting command s every five minutes or so has become so ingrained into my muscle memory at this point that there's really no need for an autosave feature, and since I have a laptop with a decent battery life (five+ hours, depending on what I have running), I'm not too terribly concerned about abrupt power outages causing me to loose a ton of work. 

7. Write or Die has a fullscreen mode, though, so I'm pretty much ok on that front.

8a. By all means defend your preferred word processor. Be weird if I got offended for it.

8b. Just because a lot more people write novels on Scrivener doesn't mean I'm going to shell out 40 bucks for a program that I do not, in fact, need. If a lot of people went and jumped off a bridge, I wouldn't follow them, would you?

I'm sure Scrivener is a perfectly fine word processor. There's certainly nothing wrong with it, it's very nicely put together and well thought out. I just happen to think that, for the moment, a combination of Pages and a notebook are doing just fine for me, so I don't need to spend 40$ on a program I don't absolutely need. Yes?

submitted by TNÖ, age 16, Deep Space
(November 4, 2009 - 6:40 pm)

Myself, I use TextEdit, which is the default program on Macs. It has pretty much nil features (not even a word counter...grrr), but it works. There is an autosave feature, but it bugs me so I just hit command-S every so often.

I wrote practically a whole book, dividing the chapters into their own text-files, but then decided to copy-and-paste it all into one document for ease of editing (See, I kept changing names around, and it got annoying to have to go through fifteen different files to make sure I didn't accidentally leave the old name in one of them.)

submitted by Falmiriel
(November 5, 2009 - 1:17 am)

@ TNO:

 

1. No, because a Scrivener "document" is actually a project folder. One creates a document inside the project for each chapter.

2. Old fashioned... no, just kidding. I am entirely and utterly digitalized, so I'm different.

3a. Like I said in 2...

3b. We have different tastes in our program styles, then. I'm fine with the brushed metal look, but when I'm doing something as crazy as writing a novel, I like it more with a couple flashes of color.

4. LOL!

5. See number two as well. :P

6. No good way to answer this one.

7. ...

8a. :) You've made your case here.

8b. It depends on the bridge. 

submitted by Timothy C., age 12, classified
(November 6, 2009 - 6:03 pm)

Write or Die is a beautiful app that, given the proper settings, will

a) have an unminimizable full screen mode

b) disable your delete key

c) eat your words if you don't type anything for 10 seconds.

d) force you to write 1,000 words per 30 minutes.

It's basically the reason I'm still on schedule after being blocked since day one and had my wisdom teeth out on the second (but at least they don't hurt! *celebrates* I think I may be developing dry sockets though (the clot on the lower left is noticeably smaller according to my tongue nerves than it was on Tuesday, and I can feel/see the bone (see in a mirror), so...) but that doesn't hurt either so hopefully not. Dr. Stern said dry sockets would hurt, but then he said I'd need to max out on ibuprofen and *still* probably be in pain for days after and THAT certainly didn't happen, so... Also, stitches! coming out and poking my cheek! Augh!)

Hm. *glances up* sleep seems to be in order. 

submitted by TNÖ, age 16, Deep Space
(November 7, 2009 - 1:51 am)

what's your goal?

submitted by Timothy C., age 12, classified
(November 7, 2009 - 8:49 pm)

100k. You?

submitted by TNÖ, age 16, Deep Space
(November 8, 2009 - 5:20 pm)

I like it! The king's conversation with du Slomen before he dies is amusing, but in an indescreet way. Nice.

submitted by Allison
(November 3, 2009 - 8:35 am)

Very nice! Yeah, the way the king just accepts his death is funny. One thing, is De Slomen the king's son or was that just a ghost and not the king's ghost? You might want to clear that up a bit . . . Other than that, I really liked it!

submitted by Emma O.
(November 3, 2009 - 11:03 am)