Three poems I

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Three poems I

Three poems I wrote for school.  Sorry It's long, Admin. 

This one was working on sound devices:

 

Zebra

 

Zebra with your stripes of black,

or is it with your stripes of white?

Will we ever know or see,

which is wrong and which is right?

 

Zebra one and Zebra two,

you nor I can tell the difference!

With your stripes and hoofs so fast,

the lion great can't stand a chance!

 

Zebra with your hoofs so fast,

you run away into the night.

Will we ever know or see,

you running fast and free?

 

Zebra one and Zebra two,

you nor I can tell the difference!

With your your hoofs and ears so keen,

the lion great can't stand a chance!

 

Zebra with your ears so keen,

you can hear the lion crouching.

Will we ever know or see,

you thanking ears so keen and good.

 

Zebra one and Zebra two,

you nor I can tell the difference!

With your talents so surpreme,

the lion great can't stand a chance!

 

This poem was working on imagery:

Sunrise

 

The sky is dark,

the sun peeks out,

just barely visible,

to see how safe.

 

The artists splash,

paint upon the sky,

to make the clouds all orange, and red.

 

The sun is braver,

he looks out farther,

while artists keep making the colors,

spread and way out west they try dark blue.

 

The sun keeps coming,

the god of all light,

the artists are changing the hue,

to light blue.

 

The sun is not scared,

he jumps into the air,

the artist are finished for now,

but tonight they'll come back,

to paint all anew,

a sunset so beautifully done.

 

This poem was working on apostrophe, someone speaking to something:

 

Excited Little Puppy

 

Excited little puppy,

why do you run?

Are you gooing to a dog show?

Are you going to the park?

Are you getting a new treat soon?

Are you going on a walk?

Excited little puppy,

Why do you run?

 

Inquisitive young human,

why do I run?

It is all of the above.

Here I am in life,

so I'll be happy to be here.

Sometimes I dothose things,

but I don't know when,

so I hope each do in hapiness,

and run around so free,

that maybe I'll go somewhere to run around elsewhere!

Inqusitive little human,

that's why I run!

 

 

submitted by Charlotte, age 11, Colorado
(November 11, 2009 - 1:21 pm)

Good, but the rhythm is off. Keep trying.

srry, g2g!

submitted by Katie, age 11, outside lookin
(November 11, 2009 - 9:36 pm)

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submitted by Top, age Top, Top
(November 12, 2009 - 2:57 pm)

Katie's right, your rythm off but other than that It's pretty good!  By the way, I'm going to ault today to visit my grandmother!  If you see me there charlotte, I'll be wearing a re shirt that say "dady's girl" and jeans with bows at the bottom.  My hair is about the center of my back nd is dark brown!  Hope to see you, maybe even talk!

submitted by Bonnie, age 11, Eaton, Colorado
(November 12, 2009 - 3:00 pm)

Wow, I love your imagery for the zebra poem. You did a really good job painting a picture. I also liked that you repeated some things. The subject that you wrote on is original, too.

 

The sky poem was original with the ideas of artists painting the picture. Your style is really nice; I would like to hear more of your poems!

submitted by Lauren C., age 13, ca
(November 17, 2009 - 8:30 pm)

Thanks! Sorry, but the only other poem I have written was when I was three or something.  It was: Me see bee flee! Very ryhmish! :D

submitted by Charlotte, age 11, Colorado
(November 23, 2009 - 8:55 pm)

Me see bee flee sounds like a Dr. Seuss thingy! :) I love your poems!

submitted by Ema, age 12, NY
(November 24, 2009 - 12:11 pm)

Thanks, Ema!

submitted by Charlotte, age 11, Colorado
(November 25, 2009 - 10:42 am)

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submitted by Top, age Top, Top
(November 23, 2009 - 8:56 pm)

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submitted by Top, age Top, Top
(November 24, 2009 - 11:07 am)

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submitted by Top, age Top, Top
(November 28, 2009 - 12:56 pm)