Stylist writing contest!

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Stylist writing contest!

Stylist writing contest!

My little well of creativity is running low, so I thought I'd hold this little contest to hopefully inspire my dry mind, and everybody else's of course. For this contest, the judge will set a topic either about a location or a item (not something too abstract like hope, love, or wish, please, but I think that 'dream' would be ok), and everyone else will submit a descriptive scene written with this topic in mind and of reasonable length, i.e. 100-1000 words. 

Note the 'stylist'. What you submit does not have to be a story with a beginning and ending, it can be nothing but a simple scene without detailed background, intentional pacing, or too much character interaction. I'll be rating your works based on how vivid it is and the how captivating the scene is in general, and the next judge to set the topic will be the winner of the previous round, like in most other contests. 

Ahem. I hope I made that clear enough. The first topic is: Metro, judging August 4 (depending on how many people enter) 

Just some plausible scene settings if you guys need some, which I don't think you will since you're all so creative when coming up with unique ideas, but, meh, whatever: 

+Funny how we live lives on the ground, unaware that there's a network of tunnels beneath us, with metros rushing people here and there and everywhere, every day, nonstop, 24/7. Do you ride the metro? Have you ever been on it when the cars are empty and you are alone, late, speeding through the tunnels, or have you only been in the crowds of people flocking in, trying to find a seat, or simply trying to get in before the doors close, as the light of neon advertisments shines through the windows that don't face the platform...+

I got this idea from those CGI/Unreal Engine rendering competitions on the internet, because I was startled at the way that people can tell the whole story of a world in a few seconds of image, just like how good writing can pull you into the moment effortlessly. I would suggest checking some out because they're a incredibly good creativity stimulant, and plus, the music is really nice.

submitted by Zealatom
(July 26, 2023 - 8:47 am)

Oh dear, one thing I can't do is writing good descriptions of characters, but I'll try it with dialouge+description. I can't seem to manage to pile up descriptions like everyone else- my pen always deserts me halfway when it thinks I'm not writing stories.

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The forest clearing was quiet, save for the chirping of cicadas and crickets, stirred by the warm summer breeze wafting through the leafy canopy and slowly downwards, suffusing the ground with energy when it reached the grasses.

The youth was sitting in face of a large oak, legs crossed in meditation. Dappled patches of fading sunlight washed over his shoulders with every movement of the branches above. The breeze flowed around him in a relaxing gust, tossing up some strands of his long hair into his face. The white silken robe he was wearing spilled out into the ground beside him like a pool of white dye. He was silent and motionless, the breeze and sunset making him one with the clearing.

His closed eyelids twitched slightly as steps sounded behind him, and the crunching of fresh grass stopped not far from his back.

"A14." 

"Yes, doctor?" The youth asked, not moving from his posture, not turning his head. "Do you need me to do anything?"

A pause. "No...Tell me, A14, what are you doing here?"

A14 hesitated, his smooth forehead creasing slightly. "I'm confused, doctor. I came here to think things out."

"What things? I programmed you to ask me anything you don't understand." 

A14 shrugged. "Your last order was to leave you alone while you were working, so I did." 

He stopped to organize his thoughts, and continued. "When I was trying to act under Trinity's identity, I acted out of character. It was only for an instant, but Arul still noticed my problem and corrected it for me. Yet, my calculations insist my reaction was faultless. I find it curious that it often turns out to be a human being who understands other's characters better." He sighed and gathered his flowing white robe around him and sat up straighter. "I have been pondering the matter for this whole afternoon. What is character supposed to be?"

Ceres did not hurry to answer. He walked over to A14 and sat down behind the youth with a sigh. A14 kept his back straight as the doctor leaned his back against his. "Character, A14, is something we all have. It's the unique way we express our emotions and actions, our attitudes and interests. It's the thing that makes us us. Everyone is special in their own way, and that is not something that your algorithms can predict accurately."

"But, doctor, then-"

"Yet you also have your character, robot you are." Ceres continued, pushing his protective goggles higher up his forehead. "You are as unique as any one of us. I created you to be better than those emotionless machines, don't you worry about that. Understand?"

"...Yes, sir." A14 nodded, raising his eyes to the towering oak before him. "Sometimes, you are much better than me when it comes to locating the important parts." 

Ceres gave him a side-eyed glance. "Of course I am. You still have a lot to learn in the world, A14."

A14 nodded once more. The clearing fell back to silence, and the two figures sitting back-to-back contented themselves with watching the sun set, and moon rise.

submitted by Ultimatum
(August 16, 2023 - 2:56 am)

ACKK I LOVE THIS SO MUCH!! And I love your take on the prompt! Kinda reminds me of Isaac Asimov's three laws of robotics! Is it in anyway related? Also reminds me of AI... anyway, THIS IS AMAZING!!

submitted by CelineBurning Bright, age As Needed, The FireMist Sea
(August 16, 2023 - 12:24 pm)

I'm so glad you liked it Celine! You could say it is 'kind of' related with the three laws, or at least A14's design is... The scene is from one of my newer, less developed projects, which I accidentally created a week ago on the CB- You can actually see my original spark of inspiration on the 'Random nonsense writing...' thread you posted, where I was writing about an interview with a sentinent robot, 083, who was A14's 'prototype'. Overall, I find the philosophical AI/robot concept rather intresting to write about :D

submitted by Ultimatum
(August 16, 2023 - 11:45 pm)

yeah man this is super cool, id totally read it in a longer form, you should write a book or something

submitted by Lord Entropy
(August 18, 2023 - 9:23 pm)

Thanks so much for the compliment!!!! I can't tell you how much this means to me QAQ (I don't know what this face means for you guys but I'm trying to say I'm so happy I'm crying right now. Inside, of course.)

submitted by Ultimatum
(August 19, 2023 - 8:38 am)

Ohh, that's why it sounded so familiar! That interview was rly fun to read! :) Which, I keep forgetting to tell you, send off is so good also! So much meaning and emotion, in just a few lines, those last few I loved especially bc... idk, they give like a new depth to it Ig? Zealatom said it so much better than me :) anyways, you're a brilliant writer (and, as you said, "the philosophical AI/robot concept" is rly a fascinating thing to think about, and if you can put those thoughts into writing...), truly, and it's great that your original spark of inspiration was from the random nonsense writing (and when you say "A14's prototype", you sound so professional..)!

submitted by CelineBurning Bright, age As Needed, The FireMist Sea
(August 19, 2023 - 1:02 am)

Ahhhhhhhhhh thanks so much, Celine!!!!!! I'm actually dying from happiness right now... I'm honestly so, so glad you like my entry, not many of my classmates or friends are very intrested in worldbuilding or writing or poetry, so I nearly never get a chance to share my work to others, and I more than often tend to question myself when it comes to sharing my writing since no one can really tell me their opinion.

I wouldn't say I'm very good (I think I'm still a long way away from that, my pen is horrendously erratic in quality when it comes to working long-term, and I often act as my own critic so I have yet to finish any of my writing projects yet), but again, thanks for the praise, and thanks a lot for telling me your feedback on Send off!!!! I'm really glad that there are so many amazing people like you guys on the CB <3

Random thing: My captcha says [tyepo]. That's the closest time it's ever come to a word!

submitted by Ultimatum
(August 19, 2023 - 9:27 am)

all right, heres my belated entry

Bad luck in a moving truck

Alex Hawthorne looked like no other kid in the world.

He had a prominent nose, which was generally the first thing you’d notice about him. It jutted out from between two wide eyes with deep black bags. He blinked rarely, and this combined with his long nose, and tendency to turn his head to the side while thinking, gave him the impression of being a large bird. His skin was pale, almost anemic, except where splotches of freckles dotted his face. He had thin, ropy arms and legs, which looked even smaller than they were, due to his love of puffy oversized clothing. When he talked, he made lots of quiet clicking noises, and low hums. He had only recently been made aware of this fact, and had attempted to stop doing it. He had failed. He had a resting face that was generally read as “judgemental.” The fact that he was, in actuality, a very judgmental person, did very little to help soften this impression. He wore a faded orange beanie hat constantly. Oftentimes, he wore it while sleeping.

When he woke up, these were some of the first things he’d do.

He would try to fall back asleep.

Failing that, he would get up and go to the bathroom mirror.

He would practice making the facial expressions that he thought the day might require. He would work at making them until it was muscle memory. He wasn’t entirely sure as to whether anybody else did this, and he was too afraid to ask anyone.

He would the put his clothes on for the day.

The facial expressions he had practiced were often quite useful later.

There were several events that had happened early on in Alex’s life that greatly impacted the person he became. This is true of all people. However, the individual is often unable to pick out exactly which  events had molded them into who they are. 

When Alex was younger, he had briefly been split up from his friends in a haunted labyrinth that a local charity had put on for the halloween season. The “labyrinth” was incredibly cheap and sparsely staffed, but this only meant that he had been forced to wander completely alone for a longer time. 

Before then, he had met a silent man dressed as Santa Claus in a near deserted street. Alex was seven then. The man showed no sign of having seen Alex, he simply lurched slowly down the street.

When Alex was only a few months old, he watched his mother walk through a glass door. She recovered quickly, although she lost an eye. (she wore an eyepatch as a result.) 

Alex was reserved and quiet by nature. When he moved to Emerald Springs, he became even more reserved and quiet, in part due to the things he saw in the forests around his house.

He made friends easily, but anyone who wasn’t his friend likely was unaware that he existed. He just blended in. It was the way he was.

 

submitted by Lord Entropy
(August 18, 2023 - 9:15 pm)

Thank you so much for 2nd place! Here is my submission for Character.

 

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On the desk lay an album, wrinkly and yellow with age. The edges were upturned from ages of rotting away in the sooty black attic, yet now it had emerged, and it was not going to die again. They were not going to die again. 

If you sat quietly; say, in the plaster-framed windowsill overlooking the fields of dying grass and scraggly trees, you may even hear their voices whispering in the wind. Screaming to get out of the book. Pulling and pulling on the strings of time. Why am I stuck here? They cry. Why must you keep me? 

They beg for mercy, yanking on the neat white frames. Clutching for anything other than the trees they were born into, dreaming of color and light. Wishing for a childhood they can't remember, and fantasizing of growing old. Where did their memories go? Did they ever have a life other than this? Who is this man beside me, and why does he wear a ring on his left hand?

Life is at a stand still, caught in a freeze frame. All of them yearn for control of their minds again, yet there is nothing. Blankness, emptiness. Cold for eternity. All they know is that one moment, that one person, that one glimpse of sun. They know no warmth, spiraling away into a vortex of gray and black and white. Swimming through a scene in a story lost to time, lost to them.

As they are forgotten, so to do they forget

Though you can't see them. Their voices are nothing but the cracking of the birch's branches, the gusts circling through the hollows in the far out moor. Their stories are nothing but words, nothing but a fairytale of the past. Perhaps they are only a figment of your imagination in the first place! Perhaps you aren't even sitting in that decaying window at all!

Maybe none of it is real. Photos, faked and stages, forced to tell a story that never was at all. Lighting, darkness, obscuring the face, the truth. Studios, snapping lenses, paparazzi. People; flooding the streets and frightening the mind. Shot after shot, shot after shot. Actors, actresses, characters in someone else's play. Was one of them ever a main character? Were they ever truly seen by something other than the eye of the camera? Did they have someone to write their story, or were they just filling in the roles in others'? 

Who are they? Who are you? A face, a nose, eyes of black and white. Black and white…all you ever see is black and white. A monotone world, stuck in a frame…

Don't you hear them screaming? 

Do they hear you screaming, too?

No. Don't you see? There may be photos in the book, pieces of stories before you. But that doesn't mean you aren't in one of your own. Ah, now you see. You're under another's control. Mind and body, written and composed. Following a script, taking the form that a stranger intended for you. You have no will but theirs. No conscience but theirs'. You are nothing. Nothing but a character in their story. 


 


submitted by Neverseen , age Umpteen , Traveling the Triangulum
(August 19, 2023 - 3:22 pm)

This. Is. Absolutely. Amazingly. Terrifically. Fantastically. Beautiful!! I never thought about this before, but it's so true (except that I'd like to think that you can add your own character to the performance too, each actor plays a role differently, but tell me if I'm interpreting this wrong)!! And the way you show it and your different paragraph spacing and your observations and just your WRITING in general... woah. *wild applause everywhere!!!* great job!! 

submitted by CelineBurning Bright, age As Needed, The FireMist Sea
(August 20, 2023 - 11:32 am)

Thank you so much! And yes, you could probably add an actor to this scenario as well, this a specific character in a scene alone, at least from my point of view. I'm so glad you like it! :)

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(August 25, 2023 - 3:09 pm)
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