A Poem!!!!&n

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A Poem!!!!&n

A Poem!!!!

 

I Have

sewing up my fingers

With a needle and some thread

Saying that I am

When I'm not really dead

Falling down the stairs,

Hitting my head

Reading a book

That I've already read

Wishing for tears'

That are gone and shed

Not doing what you told me,

Not doing what you said

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And that seems to be the ending.  It is really rough right now, but that might change once I polish it.  I seem to have lost my talent for writing poems... The poem is about what I've done, in rhymes!   Yes, and now, critique!!!!

submitted by Meadow, age 11 , my dad will be
(February 23, 2010 - 1:01 pm)

I like the first and last set of lines. The middle part left me confused... But I liked it a lot, in a weird way. Keep writing! It was good!

submitted by Katie, age 12, outside looking
(February 25, 2010 - 6:57 pm)

nice

submitted by Greg, age 13
(January 22, 2011 - 1:31 pm)