Chatterbox: Inkwell

Hi, I'm in the middle of a story that I've been writing for a couple of years (on and off).  I hope to someday get it published, but right now, I am writing so slowly that I'm afraid I'll be an adult before it's done!  I'll post part of it sometime soon.  I've got about three and a half chapters done, and I need some critics besides my parents and cousin!  Please say what you feel, but not too harshly (if you don't like it).  I'm open to criticism, but not really strong criticism (I get WAY to much from my brother, who thinks everything I write is corny and dumb).  Thanks!