Ok.. I just

Chatterbox: Inkwell

Ok.. I just

Ok.. I just wrote this because it came into my head so yeah.. I'm kind of Shy about what I write so.. Well I'm just wondering if you guys can give me some tips!

 

I ran down the alley. Where was I? I must have taken a wrong turn. The cold rain fell onto my face as darkness engulfed me. How long had I been running? I shouldn't have followed Matthew then.. then.. My tears mixed with the rain on my face. I sat next to a fire escape near one of the buildings. I sat there with my head in my hands for 5 minutes. What was that?! A figure stood at the end of the alley. It was him. What should I do? There was only one way out of the alley. How long would it take me to get to the end? There was no time to figure this out. I got up with one intention. RUN

submitted by Elizabeth M, age 11, Germany
(December 29, 2010 - 1:37 pm)

back to the Inkwell

All I can say is.............. wow. That was so incredible!!!!! Wait, you're from Germany??? That's so cool! The foreign exchange at my school is from Germany!

submitted by Clair, age 13, Here
(December 30, 2010 - 5:14 pm)

Was it really that good??????? Not exactly from Germany.. I live here....

submitted by Elizabeth M, age 11, Germany
(January 2, 2011 - 4:46 am)

Um... HECK YEAH it REALLY was good!!!!!!!!!

 

That was AWESOME girly!!!!!!!!!!!!!

 

 

Was that a prologue??????????????????????????????? I think it was!!!!!!!!!

 

submitted by =] Vida =]
(January 6, 2011 - 12:10 pm)

@ Vida I just kind of wrote it.. I'm not sure if it's a prolougue so I didn't post it in the prolougue thingy. What is a prologue?

@ Charlotte Yeah, I know sometimes I put like 10 periods... It really depends. It's very seldom when I actually put 3! :) 

submitted by Elizabeth M , age 11, Germany
(January 7, 2011 - 3:52 am)

A prologue is "a separate introductory section of a literary or musical work". Basically, introducing the story. Go to the prologue thread to read some examples (coughminecough). 

Also, re: Periods: It is only ever correct to use one period. There is also something called an ellipses, which looks like three dots in a row and is intended to indicate either the omission of words, trailing off at the end of a sentence, or (occasionally) a pause. 

submitted by ZNZ, age Lucky 13, Thulcandra, the
(January 7, 2011 - 6:22 pm)

Ok, thanks... I use them a lot as you can see...

submitted by Elizabeth M , age 11, Germany
(January 8, 2011 - 3:44 am)

That was very good!  My only comment wouild be three periods instead of just two.

submitted by Charlotte, age 12, Lost in my mind
(January 6, 2011 - 1:52 pm)