Chatterbox: Inkwell

Again, I am in need of critics. I am writing a story and need some reviews. I am going to post the summary and, if I get reviews, will start posting the story, called "The Nightmare Injection".

They are alone, fighting crime in America's most important city. Unknown, never thanked, un-loved. The Alpha Squad, five warriors who will fight for their lives to destroy, and survive, crime.

But they are not the only secret power in D.C.

A crimelord had risen to power, a horde of thugs, gangsters, thieves and mercenaries at his beck-and-call. At his right hand, The Grin, an insane, power-hungry maniac whose madness is known and valued. His master, Overlord, will stop at nothing to create a Argammenon-inducing weapon to destroy civilization as we know it and create a new world order.

Lorenzo, the youngest member of Alpha Squad, must follow his leader to take down Overlord and the Grin before they even know who these mysterious villians are. But as they fight unholy monsters, evil scientists, armies of mobsters, and, inevitably, Overlord's monstrous Omega Project itself, Lorenzo will begin to discover who he really is, and who the mastermind behind the whole plan truly is.

This is a terror-filled journey like no other, seeping into your pores, slithering into your brain. This is the Nightmare Injection, and it is real.

Nick, what you describe here sounds unsuitable for our youngest Chatterboxers. You'll have to tone it down a bit if you want us to post more.

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