Lucky Stars~

The scissors

cut through the

origami paper

easily

cutting perfect strips

effortlessly

she

remembers the pattern

the one that Mom taught her

all those years ago 

With every fold,

she remembers

the yelling

the door-slamming

the arguments that shook

the apartment

With every crease, 

she remembers

the storm

the rain

the darkness

the steps

have become mindless

ingrained in her memory

after so much repetition

after so many wishes

and hopeful sunrises

there is still time

to keep promises,

she reminds herself

so she pinches the corners

of the star

watching it fill

with air

and the magic

of believing

in someone

else

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Ta-da! My entry, sorry for forgetting the deadline, Booksy! What do y'all think? I'm open for some critique! 

I’ll Be Your Star

Wish,

Dream,

Fight,

And die.

People long

To change the past.

People kill

To have the future.

Luck

Is dreaming

Fate

Is the call.

Wish on me,

I’ll take you home.

Wish on me,

I’ll be your star.

top! judging soon?

To the Topness!

Sorry guys! I'm really sick, so I can't really think clearly right now. I'll judge when I feel a little better. Please keep this topped for me?

Sure Booksy!  We will.....TOP!!

Wow, all of you guys are so GOOD! Makes it pretty darn hard for me to judge... *shakes head* Thanks for the Tops and get-well wishes :). I am feeling a little better today, thus I will judge. (But seriously, it is really hard to pick a winner...)

And now, without furter ado... May I call for a drumroll?

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Honorable mention goes to... Treble Clef! I love how your poem refferences Peter Pan. The language also pulls me along and makes me wonder what will happen next. I especially love the line "From which I walk on twisted weeds, and forever darkness whirling around like a cyclone." Well done!

In third place we have... Leafpool! Your poem perfectly describes the feeling of incredible confusion. I love how the partial sentences and short lines convey a sort of lost, chopp feeling that perfectly matches the feeling in the poem. Good job!

In second place we have... Pied Piper! Hey Piper, I haven't seen you around in a while! Your poem perfectly contains in it a comparison between the expanse of the night sky and the insignificance of human life. The language is beautiful, and takes me on a journey with every word. I love the second stanza especially, as well as the way that the first and last lines bring the reader full-circle.

And finally, in first place we have... September! Wow, good job! I've always had a weakness for story poems, and I love the way a story is ravelled up within yours. The symbolism of the origami star and the memories tied to it is beutiful. By the way, I love how you chose a different interpretation of "star." The poem is so sad and yet so hopefull at the same time, and most of allso beautiful. It's lovely, and fits perfectly in the small set of lines, making me want to reread it over and over again.

Congratulations to all of you! All of your poems, whether you ended up winning or not, were beautiful and well as wonderfully diverse. Thank you for letting me read and judge those!

September, you're the next judge! Let us know what your theme and deadline is. 

Congratulations Leafpool, Pied Piper, and September.  You guys had really good poems, so great job!  I'm awaiting the next theme with excitement!

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CONGRATULATIONS!!!

Congratulations Treble Clef, Leafpool, Pied Piper and September!!! 

Your poems were WONDERFUL!!! 

@Silverwaxwing

Thanks! I really liked the part when you said, "Wish on me, I'll be your star."