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Lavendershy and Emma's Story!

Okay, I made the thread. I prefer fantasy, but we can do whatever. 

submitted by Emma O, age 13, Oregon
(December 15, 2009 - 12:03 am)

Cheers!

1) All right, we need a concept - dragons? elves? fairies? assassins? knights? wizards? flying staplers?

2) Then we need characters. Male? female? old? young? tentative? bold? evil? sweeties? etc.

3) Then we need setting. Present? history? another world? city? country? mountains? plains? desert? rainy place?

4) I am currently enamored with medieval Europe, but take your pick of setting. Last TAPM story I did was set in Paris of the mid 1700s, and it was fairies, so I'd like to do something besides that. 

5) If we set it in another world, I think we should use a world from a book we've both read so we don't have to develop the world as well as the characters and story.

6) I have an unfortunate tendency to hog the story. If I write too much and you'd like me to tone down, put "TDL" (for "tone down, lav) at the end of any post, and I'll take the hint and back off a little. 

7) No need to call me lavendershy if you'd prefer lav - much shorter and all. 

8) I refuse to make all the decisions. I gave you the questions - give me some answers, and I'll tell you what I think of them. Some people are so nice they wander around constantly deferring to everyone else and nothing actually gets done. I don't know if you're like that, but I won't tolerate it. :D We're going places, Emma!

 

Cheers,

lavendershy

submitted by lavendershy :) / EH, age 14, Sparks, NV
(December 15, 2009 - 12:01 pm)

Lav is good! =)

1. Concept: No fairies sounds fine. Hmmm. I like flying staplers*! Laughing Just kidding. They all sound fine, but I like the idea of dragons quite a bit. Also, the kind of mental picture thing that popped into my head when I read "knights" was a medieval, suit of armor, male type knight, which I wouldn't really like. I would prefer the characters to just be able to fight well or something to that effect. So, I like the idea of dragons, magic, and assassins. 

2. Characters: I tend to do better with younger (as in teens) female characters, but I haven't tried much with others. *gets an idea* Just got a pretty good idea, which would involve both male and female characters, so if we end up going with that, both genders would be fine, but if we don't I really would like to do primarily girls.

3. Setting: I really like the idea of medieval Europe, plus, it goes perfectly with my idea I got while typing #2. Even without my idea, medieval Europe is great! How about a fairly large town in medieval Europe? 

Okay, this is my idea. A group of assassins plotting to kill the king. They could have dragons and magic or we could keep it a bit more realistic and forget the magic ideas. I was thinking they would be towards 16 or 18, but ages are adjustable. The idea isn't very developed yet, but we could fix that if we go with it. 

So, the things left to decide:

1. Dragons or no dragons

2. Assassins or no assassins

3. Character gender (females or both) 

4. My idea or another idea

Remember, I am totally open to other ideas! I'll try not to be wishy-washy on things. Oh, and yes, we most definitely are going places! :D :D

*Random side note about flying staplers, my fifth grade teacher juggled staplers!! Laughing ~Emma 

submitted by Emma
(December 15, 2009 - 9:03 pm)

Okeyday! I'm liking assassins too (a recent writing fad with me) and I'm cool with dragons and/or magic, but it's super easy to make them cliche or cheesy. Assassins with a little magic, maybe, or maybe assassins that just seem like they're magic. Incorporating dragons if we feel like it. Or assassins fighting dragons. . . . or the dragons are hiring the assassins . . . All right, I'm liking dragons better now.

 

I think it's a good thing to work on broadening the kind of characters you work with, so I'd like to try both genders. I'm willing to struggle with the male(s) if you like - they're not really as hard as they seem, I've found.

 

Cheers for medieval Europe. If we have a large town, we can also have trade fairs and such exciting spectacles.

 

I'm decently fond of your idea - let's go with that. Remember that concepts tend to evolve over time, that's all. Here are my suggestions/additions to the plot:

1) To fit with the culture, it maybe should be a lord rather than a king - monarchies were only just develping.

2) I'm fond of England rather than France or the develpoing Germany and Italy. 

3) Guilds are way cool - if we don't fit those in, I will saw off my earlobe with a piece of serrated cardboard.

4) I know rather a lot about the fuedal/manor system, having just done a project on it, so cheers for that. 

5) I cannot write accents, so don't expect me to try. 

6) England was doing things like the Hundred Year's War and the War of the Roses, which we could use. She was also fighting Scotland almost constnatly. (Summary: Hundred Year's War was a war drawn out over a hundred years with France. England, with excellent military technique, won most of the battles, but France won the war 'cause of Joan of Arc. The War of the Roses was when there were two English houses (the house of Lancaster and the house of York) claiming the throne and fighting over it. Shakespeare's play Richard III is set here. Richard, of the house of York, lost to Henry Tudor of the house of Lancaster.)

7) I like Scotland.

8) Scotland has mountains, very useful for the concealment of dragons. 

9) In the War of the Roses, who's to say one side wouldn't hire assassins to kill the other monarch? Same with the conflict with Scotland. Handy, that. 

10) Assassins running around with bows and swords and stuff in a super-early London: contains epic win. 

 

Cheery-ho, and I'm eager to hear from you!

 

lav

submitted by lavendershy :) / EH, age 14, Sparks, NV
(December 16, 2009 - 5:02 pm)

This is going to be awesome!!! :D :D :D

1. Just a lord would be just fine!

2. England sounds good.

3. Please don't saw your ear off!!!!! I'm afraid I don't know much about guilds, so do you mind explaining that idea a bit more? I just know what it is, but other than that, I know nothing. 

4. Yes, that  will be good. I think my social studies class is working on the Middle Ages next. so I'll know about that time period soon, which should help, too. 

5. Yeah, I really can't write accents either... (I'm reading Wuthering Heights and there's a servant guy in it that has a really heavy accent and bad pronunciation, so about 99.9% of the time I have no clue what he's saying!)

6. Having them fighting Scotland would probably work out well.  The War of the Roses would work, to.

7. Errr, very interesting.... =P

8. Yes, Scotland's mountains could be very useful, very, very useful *cackles evilly* Um, right, yes, very good.

9. They could have been hired by England to kill Scotland's monarch. Then, the whole hiding in Scotland mountains thing could be used.

10. Yes. Yes it does. *nod*

Can't wait for a reply! So excited about this! 

(My spam code says anna. Maybe it's a sign!! One of our characters will be named Anna! Aha!!!!     Hmmm. I really shouldn't try looking for "signs." I'm not too good at it.....)

~Emma

Smile

submitted by Emma
(December 16, 2009 - 7:00 pm)

I will try, very hard, not to saw my ear off. I will explain - a little - about guilds later in this post, because I think they're very cool.

As for WH, you mean Joseph? That man is indecipherable. And he's a crank.

Well done on the evil cackle. 

And Ok! Guilds. I think perhaps we should organize the assassins into a guild - it would give the foreign element a basic tie with the setting, which I think would be greatly beneficial. Here are the basics:

1) There were three levels of craftsmen in a guild: apprentice, journeyman, and master.

2) A boy was apprenticed to a master craftsman when he was 18-20 months old. (Kidding!) When he was 7-8 years old. He worked to help the master and learn the trade in return for food and board. After the apprenticeship - which was two to seven years long - the kid became a journeyman. He could earn wages as a skilled laborer at this point and could work for another master, but in general he stayed with his first master. When, after years of work, he had the money to open his own shop and the skill, he presented a piece of work (a master piece) to the guild. If they liked it, they would say "Dude! You're a master now!" Then he could get his own apprentices and shop and hire his own journeymen. 

3) Guilds regulated trade and stuff, but that's not much fun, so I won't talk about that. 

4) And guilds were like, really cool. I can't get their coolness across, but they were. In Germany, some seventy of them got together into a big league. The stinkin' guilds had their own army and waged war. :D

 

Cheery-ho,

lav

 

 

submitted by lavendershy :) / EH, age 14, Sparks, NV
(December 17, 2009 - 11:12 am)

All right! This is coming along nicely! Guilds do sound pretty cool. (couple side noets: Yes, I was talking about Joseph. Thanks for complementing my cackle. :P) I think this is what we have so far.

Setting: Medieval Europe, England, Large Town

Characters: Members of a guild of assassins.

Storyline: The characters are plotting to assassinating a lord.

We still need to decide...

1. What we should call the town

2. Where they are going (Did we decide on Scotland?)

3. Who is their target 

4. What the character's names are

5. What role they play (apprentice, journeymen, master) in the guild

6. If we include dragons (If so, I think I'd be awesome to have them on the assassain's side!)

7. If we include magic

8. I there is a war (if so, what war, just against Scotland or the War of the Roses? I'm leaning more towards Scotland)

I believe that's all! 

~EmmaSmile

submitted by Emma
(December 17, 2009 - 6:49 pm)

All right! This is coming along nicely! Guilds do sound
pretty cool. (couple side noets: Yes, I was talking about Joseph.
Thanks for complementing my cackle. :P) I think this is what we have so
far.

Setting: Medieval Europe, England, Large Town

Characters: Members of a guild of assassins.

Storyline: The characters are plotting to assassinating a lord. Perhaps the assassins are actually working for England's king and are planning to assassinate a Scotish lord.

We still need to decide...

1. What we should call the town

2. Where they are going (Did we decide on Scotland?) I like Scotland.

3. Who is their target  The leader of a Scotish clan, I propose.

4. What the character's names are

5. What role they play (apprentice, journeymen, master) in the guild A little of everything, I would say. Perhaps a master and his apprentice set out, accompanied by a journeyman who used to work for the master. This is a little too much like the Ranger's Apprentice books, though.

6. If we include dragons (If so, I think I'd be awesome to have them on the assassain's side!) I am in total agreement. Dragons + assassins also = epic win.

7. If we include magic I vote no.

8. I there is a war (if so, what war, just against Scotland or the War of the Roses? I'm leaning more towards Scotland) Just Scotland-England, I think. 

I believe that's all! Aye!

 

Ok, so for names. . . . I vote when you come to a character, make up a name for him/her, and we'll debate it on the side. That way neither of us does all the names. Town name. . . . Here are random ideas: Meril, Sharnam, Planta. Those came off the top of my head, so don't worry about bashing them. :D I'm generally open to bashes. 

 

The cliche thing to do would be to have a character join the Assassin's guild and lean the ways of the Assassin. (Cliche as in Star Wars, Harry Potter, Eragon and a ton of other storylines use that.) It would be the easiest thing, though, I think. Or perhaps just dive into the story. I'm not much good at intros, I warn you. 

 

I am ready to start whenever you are - just begin the story once you feel we've got enough material. 

 

I began to write a story based off this idea, and it's a lot of fun. I propose that we at some point have a little kid, cause little kid dialogue is really fun to write, what with the mispronunciations and questions and word coinages.  :D

 

Cheers,

lavendershy

submitted by lavendershy, age 14, Idaho Falls, ID
(December 19, 2009 - 12:56 pm)

Okay. So... I guess I'll start now.

Adriana scanned the night, hoping that Braeden would soon appear. He had left that night after being summoned by Lucifer, Lord of the Assassins Guild, most likely to be given a new target. Shivering, she pulled her hood over her deep brown hair. She startled as a hand clamped over her mouth and pulled her backwards, into the shadows of Assassin's Hall.

"Gotcha." Braeden's familiar voice whispered in her ear. Letting go, he grinned at her, looking smug.

"Braeden! What did he say?" Her dark eyes sparkled in anticipation.

"Who?" he asked, the picture of innocence.

"Lucifer, you idiot!"

"Oh, him!" He smiled again. "I have a new assignment! I'm to assassinate Lord Cesan of Scotland, and I get to pick who I work with."

"Please tell me you chose me! Please!" 

"Lets see, I'm taking Damian, Brenna, Keegan, and . . . Oh, yes, and Adriana!"

~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ 

If that wasn't quite what you were thinking, we can change it or make a new begining. I looked up some evil names (I actually found a list of "evil names" online!) and these are some I liked.

Girls
Adriana ~ dark one
Brenna ~ raven maid
Keaira ~ little dark one
Layla ~ dark beauty
Tala ~ wolf

Boys
Drake ~ dragon
Damain ~ something to do with the devil, I believe
Lucifer ~ another name for the devil
Crevan ~ fox
Keegan ~ little fiery one
Braeden ~ from the dark valley

Also, I looked up some Scottish names and found

Camran ~ bent nose
Brain ~ strength
Artair ~ bear
Fionn ~ white, fair
Flannagan ~ blood-red 

That's all, I think...

submitted by Emma
(December 21, 2009 - 3:26 pm)

Emma, I wrote quite a lot, but it got deleted before I could post it, and I don't have much time just now cause of relatives and so on. I will continue as soon as I get back home Monday or Tuesday. I'm sorry for the delay.

 

Cheers,

lav

submitted by lavendershy, age 14, Idaho Falls, ID
(December 26, 2009 - 3:24 pm)

No problem!

submitted by Emma
(December 27, 2009 - 12:38 am)

((*headdesk* *harder headdesk* Ugh. I'm sorry, Emma. My bad. I wrote a good deal to make up for all that time. Two things: I changed Adriana's character a bit, and I like Braeden's name quite a lot. Anywho, here's to a great new year of storytelling! Cheers!))

 

"You'd better be, or you'll kill yourself on your own camp food. I'm the only one of you lot who can cook."

Braeden raised his eyebrows with an injured air. "Now, that's not quite fair! Who was it taught you how to cook?"

"My mother. Why?"

"You little liar! I did; don't you remember that?"

"I remember rather distinctly that you tried to when I already knew how." She raised her hand to stop his exclamation. "Oh, no, it was very helpful, believe me! Since then I've made sure I don't do anything you did that day, and no one has died from my cooking yet."

"You ungrateful girl! Do you know where you'd be without me?"

Adriana yawned. "Probably asleep. Why?"

With a groan, Braeden turend toward the quarters where the junior Assassins lived when not on duty. "You're hopeless. Let's get the others - no reason they should suffer because of you."


Adriana raised an eyebrow. "Care to explain that remark?"
"What do you mean?"

"How would they suffer from what I just said? If you go get them so they won't suffer, all they're avoiding is a couple hours of sleep. Or are you going to make them all eat your cooking cause I said it was terrible? You try really hard to make witty remarks, Braeden, but it just doesn't work." She clapped him on the shoulder, laughing at him as they went. "This, my dear sir, is why we work together. You cut through the armies, I get you out. You do the big, glorious, stupid things, and I do the sly, smart, unnoticed things." Her tone turned slightly bitter. "And, of course, you get all the credit."

Braeden let the silence hang for a moment. ". . . Yes. But do I ever do anything without you? Do I ever use that credit to my advantage?"

"Advantage? No. Tell me, Braeden, have you ever heard of this thing called glory?"

"It's a generally discouraged notion in the Assassins Guild, Adri. ((We have to have a nickname for Adriana. Either Adri or Ana, I think. I'll go with Adri for now, but if you prefer Ana or something else, let me know. I've no problem with changing.)) You work in secret. For the Guild if it has to be known. I'll bet outside of the Guild not half a dozen people are aware that our leader's name is Lucifer. Or that we even have a leader. You've not been here very long, Adri, but that much you know."

"Yes. Yes, I do." She paused. "Anyway, who's paying?"

"For what?"

"The assassination. Lord Cesan's death."

Braeden's eyebrows drew together. "Well, I don't know. Lucifer didn't say anyone was. You think it's a hired job?"

"Cesan is rather too important for Lucifer to have him killed without getting a fat price for it. What do you get in the end?"

"Seven hundred. Five of us. One-forty apiece."

"Not bad, I guess. And Lucifer would never pay seven hundred for a job of his own. No, this one was bought."

Suddenly Braeden snapped back into the Assassin's mold, strictly willing to leave everything but what he was told to do alone. His voice was formal. "Not that it matters."

". . . No." 

 

((That's not the most decisive of conclusions, but I wanted you to be able to end the scene or continue as you wish, as you see the story. This is the beauty about working with someone else - you get tired of writing, just wait a bit and voila! Your story comes back with plot holes filled in, scene transitions worked out, and the next mini-conflict all done. :D I'm terribly sorry this took so long. I will check often in the next couple days to try to get our story moving again.

 

Cheers,

lavendershy))

 

submitted by lavendershy, age 14, Sparks, NV
(December 31, 2009 - 11:28 pm)

((Oh, dear. Now I'm afraid my partner's forgotten about the thread. :P Fronter than you are, please, dear little thready-boy. Yes, I know fronter isn't a word. Yes, I use it anyway. And for the record, I just found a bag of goldfish crackers in my desk. I don't even remember putting them there, and the last time I saw them was a few months back. As in June. Should I eat them anyway? Or, more relavently, will I? I'm not sure yet. Well, we'll see.

 

Cheers,

lavendershy))

submitted by lavendershy, age 14, Sparks, NV
(January 1, 2010 - 9:25 pm)

((So sorry it's taken so long for me to reply!! This last week has been crazy! Anyway, I'm here now!! :D))

Braeden cleared his throat. "Well, you might as well wake the Brenna. I'll get the boys and we'll meet you by the stables in about fifteen minutes." With a nod, he turned and jogged off into the night.

Adrianna hurried down the corridor to her room. Throwing some clean clothes in a bag, she opened her closet and pulled out an ancient leather bag, carefully layed the contents on her bed. Smiling, she ran her fingers across her a thin silver sword. She slipped it into a strong leather scabbard and buckled it around her waist. After strapping a small dagger to her arm and slipping one into her boot, she ran off to wake Brenna. Within a few minutes Adri was headed to the stables, Brenna beside her.

"Evening, ladies." called Braeden as they came into sight. "We have the dragons all ready to ride."

((A couple things. 1, Adri is great for a nick-name. 2, did we decide to have dragons? I think we did, but if not, just pretend it says "We have the horses all ready to ride." or something. 3, did you eat those goldfish?? 

submitted by Emma
(January 10, 2010 - 1:59 pm)

Sorry that was so short! I'll write more as soon as I can!

submitted by Emma
(January 12, 2010 - 10:55 pm)

((Garg! "Your computer has been restarted to install new updates. We
apologize for the inconvenience." Apologize? If you were sorry, you
would have saved the story on here and the Notepad document for me. . .
. Forgive me. That's one of the things that makes me mad. Anyway, this
is not the first time I've written this. :P I think we should have
dragons, but perhaps they shouldn't come in until the mountains,
because if they live in the Assassin's guild they would a) be way too
hard to hide, and b) have to be sort of beasts of burden, which is
below the character of the dragons. So they'll be on horses just now, I
think. Thank you for giving me that option. And romance. I don't think
we talked about that yet. I'm going to put in just a little, honestly.
I generally dislike it, but these characters are late teenagers.
They're good friends. It just wouldn't be realistic without a touch of
romance. You can let it fizzle out if you don't want it, I suppose.))

 

Brenna
laughed and brushed her red-brown hair out of her face. "I sure hope
you mean they're ready to be ridden, 'cause otherwise we're in for a
long walk, and carrying the horses." 

Damien took her bag with a
wink. "Brenna's too sharp for you, Braeden. You and Keegan to the grunt
work, and the rest of us will do the brain work." He gave Brenna a hand
onto her horse, and Adri smiled to herself when she saw his hand linger
on Brenna's a little longer than was necessary and when Brenna flashed
a smile at him. 

Keegan took Adri's bag, and Braeden moved to
help her onto her horse. "All right! We're off! Scotland and the
north!" Damien called as he swung onto his own horse. Braeden followed,
a little less enthusiastically. He knew he wasn't the sharpest of the
Assassins, but was it really true that he was all brawn and no brain? Oh,
forget it. Off on a new mission - not the time for deep thinking. Screw
this up and Lucifer will have something to say to you, and probably
with a knife. 

Adri smiled a little at Keegan when he rode by
her. He was quiet and uncomplaining, and no one knew much about him,
but he was always polite, always the perfect gentleman, and Adri liked
that. Courteous as always, he nodded back, and Adri had the feeling
that a nobleman, a king even, might have made that same nod. "You
puzzle me, my friend," she murmered under her breath.

Brenna was
ahead with Damien, laughing with him at something, when Braeden hissed,
"Quiet! Do you want to wake the whole Guild? Keep your voices down, and
remember this mission is a secret!" He took the head of the line, and
Adri settled back as the rearguard. 

 

It was a long way to Scotland. 

 

((I
have the Guild situated near London, maybe on the Thames. That suit
you? And I didn't do much plotwise here, just made them start and
worked on characters a bit. Hope that's all right.

 

Cheers,

lavendershy))

submitted by lavendershy, age 14, Sparks, NV
(January 15, 2010 - 12:47 am)