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So, I've got these sentences in my notebook that I really didn't know what to do with, so I thought I'd post them on here and see what you people make of them. Here they are:
If Emily Augusta Osborne had not moved into the house across the street, Laura would never had discovered what she did, and nothing would ever have changed.
It was a Monday, June 21st, and I was doing the supper dishes when the door blew open without warning and into my life walked the last girl I'd have expected.
The only reason I'm writing this is because the world needs to know of the dangers of fourteen-year-old eccentric girls named Emi.
Once upon a time, in a land far, far away and yet so close you could reach out and touch it, in a time long, long ago and yet so recently it was only yesterday, there lived a girl who was as kind as she was beautiful--that is to say, not very kind at all.
i never really thought about the meaning of word alone until I saw the face of the girl at the bus stop that rainy morning.
Well, there they are. If you guys want to come up with a storyline for them/use them/discard them entirely, feel free. oh, and if you'd give constructive criticism, that'd be great.
They're great first sentences, Jess! Write on!
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(May 2, 2011 - 1:22 pm)
(May 2, 2011 - 1:22 pm)
But if it was just a fight (quarrel, spat) with her boyfriend, why would she need to be hidden? Unless he'd gone crazy (or had scizophrenia (I always have a hard time spelling that)) and they actually had a fight (fistfight, slapfight, punching fight, etc). Or else she's gone crazy.
Right. Or she could have been beaten up (I think that's bad grammar, but I'm not sure). And of course there are several levels of being beaten up.
(May 14, 2011 - 6:55 am)
Good point about the boyfriend thing. Okay, so that's out. I'm sort of thinking the bullies idea is probably the most practical. I'd really rather no one went crazy, but it's really your story, so do whatever you want to it.
(May 14, 2011 - 2:08 pm)
Nonono, this is your story!! I would seriously never have thought of that great first sentence!! And actually, as I read this post, I thought - This is really funny, as in "this plot is the most practical," is that really what writers do?
Spammy says "nany." I need a nanny, Spammy? For what?
(May 15, 2011 - 9:21 am)
Well, I would never come up with a plot like that. So.
(May 15, 2011 - 3:03 pm)
Well, I would never come up with a plot like that. So.
(May 15, 2011 - 3:03 pm)
I definitely did not post that twice.
(May 16, 2011 - 10:31 am)
I posted something twice once because I didn't know if htting the "back" button in the browser would unsubmit it - is that even a word?
(May 16, 2011 - 1:36 pm)