My book is

Chatterbox: Inkwell

My book is

My book is almost finished! It's probably going to be about 30,000 words in total. Right now it's 26,700 words. :D

Here's my pitch:

Annika wakes up in the dungeon of a castle with no idea who she is or how she got there. When a former friend shows up to free her, she learns she is the leader of a rebel band seeking to overthrow the Queen. As Annika's memory slowly returns, she must put together the pieces of her past to find the truth behind her motivations and solve the mystery of her own betrayal.
But to don the famed red cloak of her past is harder than she anticipated. The Queen, a shadowy figure who never leaves the castle, is always one step behind them. And before she can reach her goal, Annika must learn to reach out to an ally more powerful than she could have imagined, and shine a light through the darkness.

And on the story's inkpop page I have this.

WARNING: Contains religious themes and moral references.

I'm definitely going to try and finish by June. (I'll probably finish the first draft by March, but, edits and stuff.) Then I'm going to see if I can't get it published. :D The teacher of my writing class last year was a published author, and I want to see if I can get her to look over it.

So... I don't really know why I'm posting this. Maybe I should be asking you if you want to hear some of it. Maybe I should be asking if anyone has projects in similar stages of completion. Idk. I'm just starting to get excited.

submitted by Emily L., age 16, WA
(January 28, 2012 - 1:15 am)

This is minor, but how would Annika remember what day it was during the flash back? Not really a problem, I'd just like to know.

And on inkpop, I've finished reading it through, and it's really good. Is that up to where you've finished, or no? I'm really excited to find out what happens to Annika and Adeliah.

submitted by Piper C., age 12
(February 4, 2012 - 8:24 pm)

Hm... I was thinking actually of changing that a little bit so that he helps her figure out what date it was. Thanks for reminding me.

Yeah, that is up to where I've finished... consecutively. There are little empty spots and scenes I need to fill in. I have way more, but I just saved all the hard parts for last. -.-

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We had ridden into a sparsely wooded glen, with tents pitched here and there. I stopped Shadow near where Adeliah had stopped, a spot with a hitching pole set in the ground. Before I had even dismounted, though, I saw people coming out of the tents towards us. Adeliah tied my horse for me while I got down. I could hear him grumbling under his breath, “Of course, they don’t even know yet.”
As the members of the band drew near, he had to start warding off questions. “Someone tell the nurse we’re coming- She’s injured- Stand aside, everyone move. It’s not a good time. I promise we’ll tell you what happened later.”
We made our way to a white tent, larger than all the rest. The tent flaps were held aside, and I ducked in to avoid brushing the top of my head on the canvas.
There was a row of four or five cots down the length of the tent, and at the other end there was a chest of supplies. A plump, older woman in a white apron, who I knew I ought to recognize, came hurrying down toward us. “Oh! Annika!” she exclaimed. “Thank the Maker you’re all right! What happened?”
“That’s the trouble,” said Adeliah gravely. “She seems to have a severe case of... memory loss.”
The nurse frowned. “Annika. What’s my name?”
“I don’t know,” I confessed. “I only remember a few things. Like June twelfth.” I felt guilty that everyone seemed so upset.
Brow furrowed, the nurse began unpacking a roll of bandages. “Still, there’s hope if she can remember anything at all. What is so particular about June twelfth?”
“We were being chased by the royal guards. We had their money for some reason. We had to leave a false trail of coins to get away. We had stolen their money, I think. Not sure why…”
Adeliah and the nurse exchanged glances. “It’s not their money; it’s the Queen’s money,” said Adeliah. “Are you sure you don’t know why we were doing it?”
“Well, I think it was to help some town or something like that.”
“But why her money and not someone else’s?”
“Hmmmmmm.” I sank down on one of the cots. “I don’t know.”
The nurse sighed. “Hold still now and don’t talk while I bandage your head. I certainly hope you remember soon or things will become very complicated around here. Do you think,” she addressed Adeliah, “that if the wound heals well it will help her to remember?”
I winced as she cleaned my scalp with a wet cloth.
Adeliah shook his head. “I… I don’t know. When you’re done, can we go outside and talk?”
The nurse nodded. “Of course. This won’t take very long.”
Finally, she tied a long strip of linen around my head. “There you are, dear. Now rest and sleep. Maybe something will come to you in a dream.” They walked out, closing the tent flap behind them.
I lay down slowly. I knew I should be very grateful to Adeliah. Who could tell what would have happened if I had stayed in that castle any longer? Who was he anyway? And what did that nurse mean when she said things might get confusing around here? How had I met these people? I didn’t even know who any of them were. I didn’t even know properly who I was. Where was I from? Who were my parents? I was confused. It was time for some answers. But first, sleep. I listened to the quiet, the rustle of leaves and the hum of bees from outside. Closing my eyes, I drifted off into a memory.

submitted by Emily L., age 16
(February 5, 2012 - 12:39 am)

@Emily L.- That's fine. It was just an idea! :) 

submitted by Elizabeth M., age 12, Germany
(February 5, 2012 - 2:36 am)

By the way, did you draw the cover yourself (on Inkpop)? If so, it's awesome. 

submitted by Elizabeth M., age 12, Germany
(February 5, 2012 - 2:37 am)

Yup!! I did draw it, only not the letters. :) Admin, can I link to an image?

http://a2.sphotos.ak.fbcdn.net/hphotos-ak-snc7/400460_357497800931387_10...

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Chapter 5

I walked up the well-groomed garden path, smoothing my simple frock and drinking in the beauty of the strange exotic flowers that grew along the sides. The castle’s small wooden back door came up in front of me. I paused when I reached it. I couldn’t believe I had made it this far. What if I had to go all the way back now? What if they didn’t need me? What would I do? Where would I go? I gathered my courage, took a deep breath and knocked.
The door swung open to reveal a small, plump woman in an apron, holding a soup spoon. She looked surprised to see me there. But I wasn’t paying much attention to her. I was lost in the aroma of chicken and potato soup with basil and garlic that came wafting out of the room behind her.
“Hello?” asked the woman. “Have you come to apply?”
I shook myself loose from the entrancing scent. “Yes, ma’am. I’ve come to try to find work.”
A broad smile spread over the woman’s face. “Bless you, child, I know just the thing! You see, we used to get so many like you, back in the old days; I used to have to turn them away there were so many. Now it’s difficult to find a spare hand around the place. They just don’t come anymore. And it’s not because there are less of them, no sir. Now come in, dearie, we have an open spot for you in the kitchen, but that can wait. You look half-starved.”
Flustered by the cook’s kindness (for that was who I could see she was) as well as her rapid mode of talking, I managed to get out, “Thank you kindly, ma’am!”
“Oh, think nothing of it. There’s plenty of soup here, have a seat now, and when you’re done we’ll get you to washing dishes.”
I sat down at a table in the center of the kitchen to a bowl of steaming soup.
“Your wage shall be two Bilars a week. Plus, of course food and- have you any parents, dearie?”
“Both deceased, ma’am.”
“Room and board shall be included, then. You may call me Gertrude, or just continue saying ‘ma’am’ if that is what you prefer, your choice. You’ll be working under me, here in the kitchen. The other maids are generally quite agreeable, I’m sure you’ll like them. You’ll be expected to get up each morning when the cock crows. I’ll have your room made up for you presently. I believe you’ll be sharing one with Nerissa.”
“Why doesn’t anyone come here anymore?” I asked through a mouthful of potato. “With food like this, half the city should be knocking at the door!”
“Well, nowadays everyone’s too afraid of the Queen to come near the castle,” answered Gertrude. “But we keep to ourselves down here. We don’t bother the Queen and she doesn’t bother us. Huh, probably the safest place in the realm is under the Queen’s nose, if you don’t draw attention to yourself.” She began chopping up a tomato. “What I’m amazed by is that you were brave enough to come.”
I paused eating long enough to reply. “I didn’t know I was supposed to be scared. But I came from pretty far in the west. Why are people afraid of the Queen? I mean nobody likes her where I come from, but-”
“Hush now! A good policy here is, ‘the walls have ears’. But I’ll answer your question. There are rumors- rumors I’ll not repeat if you’ve not heard them. I don’t go in for rumors myself. And I’m sure you’ll hear them by and by. But I’ll not be the first to tell you.
“When you’re done eating, take your dishes through that door--” she motioned to a door on the left- “And put them on the pile. Nerissa will be there, she’s about your age; she’ll help you get started.”

submitted by Emily L., age 16
(February 5, 2012 - 7:06 pm)

Oops! That's a flashback. O.O

submitted by Emily L.
(February 5, 2012 - 10:03 pm)

Just thinking, you mentioned that you put flashbacks in a different writing so maybe you could make them italic or bold so that they're clearer. 

Your drawing is awesome! How do you draw braids? That's a real mystery to me!  

 

We'd prefer italics to bold.

Admin

submitted by Elizabeth M., age 12, Germany
(February 6, 2012 - 11:58 am)

I really like your book's cover...but Annika's hair looks gray...it's black, isn't it? And how do you copy your story? When I try to copy and paste, it won't let me.

submitted by Piper C.
(February 6, 2012 - 11:07 pm)

That particular reader-thingy does not allow copy-and-pasting.
If you were trying to make it easier to read, you can enlarge the box with a little button at the top.

@Elizabeth: I had issues with the braids too. It's still not perfect. Look at the middle, where it gets all skinny.

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The door opened into a decent-sized scullery, where a bouncy, blond girl in green was vigorously scrubbing plates. I closed the door behind me. “Hello?” I asked.
Nerissa turned about and grinned at me. She had small features, but long eyelashes and freckles. “Oh, hello! You’re new, right?” She bit her knuckle in excitement. “I’m sooo glad you came! I’ve been waiting for someone new for a long time.”
I smiled embarrassedly at this emotional outburst.
She grabbed my hand and shook it. “What room are you staying in? You can share with me if you like…”
I nodded. “Gertrude already said I would.”
She clapped her hands together. “Wonderful! So what’s your name?”
She was a bit fluffy, I decided, but at least she was friendly. And the cook was nice. Maybe it wouldn’t be so bad here.

I soon learned a few things about the place. As Gertrude had let on, the kitchen was short on hands. Besides us, there was one other scullery maid and an assistant cook, both of whom were in their late teens. The maids slept on the second floor, and though the accommodations were plain, we made the best of it. I was issued a fresh white frock the second day.
Rooming with Nerissa was all right. We each had our own bed and lumpy mattress in the small square room, but I was hard-put trying to get a hold of a second chamber-pot. Still, I was accustomed to frugal living, and wasn’t too bothered. Work was pleasant.
I soon discovered Nerissa was an ardent gossip. She always knew which of the ladies-in-waiting fancied which of the stable boys, and vice versa, as well as a great deal of private court business that had been passed down to her from the older maids. I still remembered what Gertrude had said about rumors concerning the Queen, and decided that Nerissa was the one to ask. She would know what they were if anyone in the kingdom did.

I got around to it one evening as we were settling down for bed. “Nerissa, do you know any, say, rumors? About the Queen, in particular?”
Nerissa flopped down noisily on her bed, which creaked under her weight. “Rumors? The Queen generates more rumors than everyone else in the city put together. Do you know, some people say she eats gold.” Nerissa giggled. “No one really believes that, though. It’s only a joke.  But they do say, and I think this one’s true, that she never leaves her chambers. Ever.”
I found that hard to believe. “Really now.”
“Well, I’ve never seen her- nor anyone else I know- for months. Since the King died. Even the Royal Guard goes to her when they want to talk to her.” Nerissa looked smug, as though she had made this discovery herself.
“Is that all they say?”
“No. They say she carries out all executions herself, personally. Later, the head gets put on a spike on the bridge, you know? Well no one knows where the bodies go.”
“Well someone’s gotta know. If she never leaves her room? I mean the people who take it away should know,” I said, puzzled.
Nerissa leaned forward, lowering her voice. “Well they say- now this could be wrong- but they say that there are no people who take it away.”
The hairs on the back of my neck prickled. “What do you mean?”
“They say she’s a monster.”
“Who, the Queen? How is that possible? Everyone knows she’s the daughter of the late King Reginald.”
“Well, don’t ask me, I’m not the one who started the rumor. But one of the laundry maids told me an interesting story. She heard it from her father, who works in the stables. He heard it from the groundskeeper, who heard it from the head gardener, who heard it from one of the undergardeners. You see, this particular gardener, the way I heard it, he found a body when he was digging up a rosebush. It was recently buried. The head was gone and half the body had been…” She paused for effect. “Devoured.”
I shivered. “Well, Gertrude was right about the rumors. They’re pretty bad.”

submitted by Emily L., age 16
(February 7, 2012 - 12:44 am)

Do you mean it won't let you paste on the writing program you're using or it won't let you paste onto the CB? Which writing program are you using? 

submitted by Elizabeth M., age 12, Germany
(February 7, 2012 - 1:39 pm)

Nah, I 'm not having any trouble with the Chatterbox. Inkpop doesn't let you copy-and-paste, in order to prevent people's stories being stolen. ,:/

submitted by Emily L., age 16, WA
(February 8, 2012 - 3:34 pm)

Just wanted to say, it's not on Inkpop anymore. :( Inkpop got deleted. HarperCollins decided to get rid of it. (They gave us three days warning. Three. Days. Heartless.) They're moving the users to Figment, but most of us were really mad and decided to delete our accounts and go to Wattpad instead. It's too bad 'cuz it was a really good community (not as good as the CB of course) but suddenly everyone had to pack up, get each other's facebook/wattpad/other contact info, and leave.
I feel sorry for the people who didn't log on during those three days. Too late for them.
Anyway, I'm on Wattpad now instead. If the browser didn't work for people before, it should work now!

submitted by Emily L.
(March 1, 2012 - 2:13 am)

Top... or at least rise a little bit.

submitted by Emily L.
(March 2, 2012 - 1:51 pm)

Oh my gosh! That's awful! You got your story off and stuff, though, right? 

submitted by Elizabeth M., age 12, Germany
(March 6, 2012 - 10:42 am)

Well, I deleted my account. My story is still on my computer, though, so it's not like I lost anything. :P

submitted by Emily L., age 16, WA
(March 6, 2012 - 10:33 pm)