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I will be gone for a short while!
Could someone please try to keep this thread alive while I'm gone? And reply to Winter Firefly's poem? Thank you so much!
Rose bud signing of until…. I'm not sure.
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Hi Winter Firefly! I was gone longer than I thought, but here are the critiques!
The title "Dream of Drowning Treasure" gives you the whole poem. Perhaps you should shorten the title to "Drowning." Or something more unique.
You might want to describe the treasure a little bit more. What exactly is the treasure?
This was a very good poem! Great job!
Have you submitted/considering admission this poem to anywhere? Just curious!
Quicksilver, I would be honored if you presented the next poem!
Or maybe Squeak? Are there any more comments on Winter Firefly's aswesome poem?
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TOP! Critiques are above two posts!
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Let's bring this post to the top! Will someone please post a new poem?
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Top! Who wants to post the next poem?
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*bounces up and down* I can post a poem in a few days! Just have to finish my submission for the art contest …
Cloudy
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Yay! This thread is coming back to life!!
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Humanity's Loss
by Rose Gowans
Oh don't mind me now
My infinities soar on
Beyond what you know
What does mortal man know?
That the sun shines in the East?
Or sets in the West?
Ignorance is bliss
Mortality runs to deep
Wherr have mortals gone?
Gone, gone , gone , gone , gone
dying without any love
they left this old Earth
And yet I stay here
The keeper of their dear World
Welcome to our World
Death tears out the soul
taking to eternity
Driven through their minds
Forget these humans
What are they but skin and bones?
They won't take us far
Goodnight dear humans
You have gone far away
Far, far , far away
What do you guys think ?
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Bravo!
very deep, reminds me of a dark river
a sort of desperate cry
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Dubble-U OvDouble-U. This is a deep, rich (like chocolate 🙂 poem Cloudy! I will study it and give you some more input soon!