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THE ELEMENTI CHRONICLES BOOK I: THE STONE OF SERENITY
Chapter I
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The moonlight shone on the Lake's deep, fuchsia waters. Conifer trees fringed it, thickening into foreboding woods. The Lake was the center of the Faimón Forest, and it contained a great amount of magic. Its surface was smooth, undisturbed. All seemed well, yet it was not. A wild cry broke the peaceful silence. A shape tumbled down a path through the trees. Another shape hared after the first, who had a jagged gash down its side. "Tell me where it is and we can save a lot of trouble," the second animal growled. "Never! Never in my life!" the first cried, practically wailing. "Then I guess the information will die with you!" The second figure struck the first, shoving it into the Lake. After a while, its head bobbed up, gasping for air. "We. . . . won't. . . tell you! You'll never. . . find. . . . it. . . " The second animal chuckled quietly to itself. "And who's going to stop me?" It padded silently away into the trees.
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Sheena opened her eyes. Squinting through the thick water, she searched for the surface. She couldn't tell which way was which in the murky fuchsia water of the Lake, heavy with magic. It was the one body of water that Aquinas leopards couldn't swim skillfully in. There! A pinpoint of moonlight shone through the water. Sheena kicked strongly towards it, propelling herself through the Lake to that shaft of light. She could feel her breath slipping away. Just as she thought she would black out, her muzzle broke the surface. Sheena gasped for air, the gash Narwhal had given her stinging. She paddled for the shore, tail boosting her forward. The leopard reached the sandy beach and heaved herself up onto it. She shook her royal blue pelt out, shuddering.
Sheena knew that the Knowledge Protector would be proud. She would not reveal the Stone's location to anyone, especially not Narwhal, even if it cost her her life. The Aquai Leopards were the guardians of the Stone of Serenity and were part of the Elementi Leopards, along with the Ignis, Ventus, Aether, and Terra Leopards. Each kept a Stone of Harmony, like the Honesty Stone and the Joy Stone.
Each cult of Leopards selected one of their kind to keep all of said cult's lore, the Knowledge Protector. The tales and secrets of each cult were passed down through generations of Protectors. Sheena was training as the Apprentice Protector for her cult.
In addition to the Leopards in the five cults, there were Leopards that abandoned their birth cult and lived as enemies of the Elementi known as Rogues. Rogues banded together, and Narwhal lead his group, which he called the Rens. Narwhal and his group wanted to get everyone in Leovie who opposed the Stones of Harmony to join him, their goal being to capture the Stones, or destroy them, once and for all. Sheena didn't know what would happen if all balance in Leovie was destroyed, and she didn't really want to find out.
Lying on the shore now, gasping for breath, Sheena recounted the day she'd been selected for Apprenticeship by the Knowledge Protector, Ciel. . . .
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I'll add more later, I promise! Enjoy the story! Oh, and, biae!
submitted by Scylla
(February 5, 2016 - 10:02 pm)
(February 5, 2016 - 10:02 pm)
Wow, Scylla! Great Job! I've got my hands pretty full with my own writing projects (numbering around seven, not all have been started.) but I'll try to think up some plot ideas! I'm doing NaNoWriMo in November, as well! Maybe we can share a cabin! I just caught myself up on the book, and it's soooooo good! I can't wait to read the next installment! Oh, and I love the picture of Sheena! I wish I could draw like that!
(October 12, 2016 - 7:29 am)
Thank you! I've finally untangled my plot web, but I might postpone writing until November so I've got enough to work on. I'll probably just post art.
(October 14, 2016 - 9:47 pm)
Your artwork is gem-like, Scylla!
And from what you say, you sound like you have your story on the right track. Elementi forever!
(October 15, 2016 - 11:47 am)
Wow Scylla! This is great! I really love the plot and everything. But here's some advice:
I think you could make this story a lot more fun (I say fun but that's probably not the best word to describe it) by appealing to the reader's senses, especially since this story is in first person POV. I find that people enjoy my writing a lot more when they feel like they're in the story. I'm not saying that your writing isn't good right now but I feel that I would enjoy this story a lot more if I could feel like I'm in the story.
Hope this helps and keep writing!
(October 15, 2016 - 9:48 am)
No offence, but you should learn your POVs better. The story is in third person limited omniscient POV. Keep in mind that some of this writing is two years old (it was in my notebook) and most of it is scattered and needs to be edited. I'm nowhere close to finishing writing, let alone editing! But stay tuned for more news. Thank you for taking the time to read this!
(October 15, 2016 - 2:06 pm)
Whoops thinking of a different story and by the way there's no such thing as limited and omniscient. Limited means the reader knows only two characters thoughts while omniscient means the reader knows all thoughts. But still what I was trying to say is that appealing to the senses helps :)
(October 15, 2016 - 6:43 pm)
Yes, there is, because I learned about it in English class last year. Most stories are in 3rd person limited omniscient.
(October 16, 2016 - 11:09 am)
Hope you continue writing. I really enjoy it!
(October 15, 2016 - 8:03 pm)
Here's a picture of Narwhal that I drew.
(October 15, 2016 - 11:52 am)
Ohhhhhh!!! Thank you, Scylla! This one is quite factually gem-like! ;D
(October 15, 2016 - 2:29 pm)
Thank you!
(October 15, 2016 - 3:11 pm)
Ooh, pretty! I don't know whether I'm supposed to call the bad guy 'pretty', but it is a pretty picture! I'm glad you got the plot untangled and I can't wait to see what happens next!
(October 15, 2016 - 10:12 pm)
I love Narwhal. He's just so adorable to me, for some reason. I completely understand how you feel and I wish I could've drawn a better rendition of him.
(October 16, 2016 - 11:10 am)
That's pretty pretty! ;) I'm awaiting the next part.
(October 16, 2016 - 12:19 pm)
I NEED YOUR HELP!
I've been making plans for the future with this book and I'm certain that I'll look for a publisher. And when I find one, I'll need to know if I'm going to make this a series. I'm not sure if it would be best for me, but this book seems to call for a sequel.
And I need a cover artist, because I sure as heck aren't drawing my own. I can't. I still use outlines, for StarClan's sake!
So, once again, thank you for your support and for straying with me for so long on this. I'm glad someone (or collective someones) pays attention to my writing, however scant it may be. It's really you guys that have kept me going this whole time.
(October 21, 2016 - 10:05 pm)