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Short Story Contest
Short Story Contest
The prize is making the MC in my next big writing project.
Rules:
Must be less than 200 words.
Must have some character developement
Must be sci-fi
What I will be judging:
Character development
Twist(s)
Is it Sci-Fi?
Length. I would like a very, very short story to win.
submitted by Gared
(December 26, 2016 - 8:08 pm)
(December 26, 2016 - 8:08 pm)
It reminds me of the replicants in Blade Runner/Do Androids Dream of Electric Sheep. I defanently think that qualifies as a short story, and the way you instert slang makes a very convincing future.
It leaves a lot open for possible additions to the story.
I have a possible edit: when you say "food to feed little Quin," why did you say little Quin, not just Quin. The "little" adds a word, and I don't really think it adds that much. That is why I mention it.
(December 29, 2016 - 11:19 pm)
Cool, I haven't read either of those books, I'll have to see if my library has them...
Hmm, yeah, I thought having Quin be thought of as young might make him (and by connection Bri) more sympathetic for the reader, as well as giving a bit more of her character by being a tiny bit less vague about who Quin might be, but you're right that it doesn't add much when the story is so short and his character is so vague anyways. Thanks for the feedback!
(January 1, 2017 - 12:45 am)
Blade Runner is a movie. Also, now I see your point.
(January 1, 2017 - 10:31 am)
The winner of the first round is: BookBug!
I love the character you make, and the twist at the end says just enough to understand what's going on, but not enough to feel like boring explaining. The story is fast-paced, and I feel like I really am going on a spaceship to Earth.
If you didn't win: don't worry! Turn in another story by 1:00 (Pacific time) Saturday to be entered in another contest. The prize for this one will be either doing the concept art/illustrations or helping me with the description of the setting for my story.
I loved everybody's stories, and I felt that everybody brought something unexpected to the contest, and I am looking forward to reading some of your guy's stories in the next round.
(December 29, 2016 - 11:24 pm)
(December 29, 2016 - 11:34 pm)
Congrats, BookBug!
Gared, I did not participate in the previous round. May I participate now? I completely understand if you decide nom ;)
(December 29, 2016 - 11:45 pm)
Yes! This is a round for everybody, whether they entered the first one or not.
(December 29, 2016 - 11:54 pm)
(December 29, 2016 - 11:54 pm)
Thank you so much, Gared!
(December 30, 2016 - 5:34 am)
I'll join! Is this round also sci-fi?
(December 30, 2016 - 11:02 am)
I will make a thread were we can start work on the story a tas later. Keep an eye out.
(December 30, 2016 - 11:03 am)
Yay, BookBug! :D
(December 30, 2016 - 9:41 am)
Anna looked sadly down to Earth. She was extremely homesick, and wanted to go back there. She knew that she should be proud of being the first kid on the moon, but all it was was a vast, desolate wasteland so unlike her home planet. Anna sighed, planted a flag on the moon, and returned to the spaceship. The next morning, when she woke up on he spaceship, she felt much better. She decided to take advantage of the once in a lifetime opportunity that awaited her in space.
(December 30, 2016 - 8:33 am)
That reminds me of the opening to a '50s radio drama. Well done.
(December 30, 2016 - 11:06 am)
Here's my story. I'm not sure what this is saying, but it sure was fun to write. Those of us who were in the first round are allowed to enter in this one, correct? If not, you can disregard my story.
The opera singer trilled her last note, the dancers stopped dancing, and the Temporal Vortex Engine stopped humming
“That’s a wrap people. Time to film the advertisement, and close up shop.” Rami snapped her notebook shut, and smiled patronizingly at the film crew, then the camera. It was good take today, the time vortex hung on to the end, only three fatalities, and everyone was at their creative best. One last job to do, and she could go home.
“Here at Temporal Pictures Inc. we strive to bring you the best entertainers from across our linear perception of time. We harness cutting edge technology to sustain multiple timelines on set. From Bing Crosby to Galentus of Epsilon 5, turn on TP Inc, and you get the best entertainment, guaranteed.” She grinned artificially for a moment more, then smiled a more genuine smile to herself. If only the consumers knew what really went on on set. Ignoring the echoes of forgotten entertainers, Rami strode off home for a nice coffee, and some pre recorded television.
(December 30, 2016 - 12:54 pm)