Hero or Heroine

Chatterbox: Crowd Sorcery

Hero or Heroine


Hero or Heroine

I’m so excited when I start a new story! Most writers believe that the single most important part is the characters. If readers fall in love with your characters—especially the main character—they will read to the end, feeling every emotion, taking part in the adventures. So as we work together toward building our story, please give a lot of thought to the conversation on this thread. Share your own best ideas, think about ideas others come up with, and discuss ways to make the character as interesting and memorable as possible.

Be original, and don’t be afraid to be surprising! What if the main character had a really unusual background or ability or fear? What if she were a girl who could only come out in the moonlight because a witch cast a spell on her great-grandmother? If you’re like me, you’ll find that the more questions you ask and answer about the main character, the more the story will begin to write itself in your head!

For example, if I wanted to introduce the girl who could only come out in the moonlight, I might write: “Quill pushed aside the velvet drape and peeked out through the window’s glass to where the moon glowed, huge and silver, behind the oak trees. It was their nightly ritual, Quill and the moon each peeping through curtains to see if the other were awake.”

I can’t wait to see your ideas! Here’s my list of traits for brainstorming the main character. After you have your ideas, you can write a Crowd Sorcery Sentence, or two or three, that might introduce your character in the story.

1. Name

2. Appearance

3. Background

4. Personality

5. How is he/she different from others?

6. What does he/she most desire or hope for?

7. How is he/she strong?

8. How is he/she weak or vulnerable?

9. What does he/she fear most?

10. Your Crowd Sorcery Sentence(s)

 

The voting for hero and heroine is now complete. Go here to see our main character and learn the schedule for creating and voting on a villain and sidekick.


You can still add to this Hero and Heroine thread for fun.
 

 

submitted by Fred Durbin
(April 23, 2014 - 10:05 am)

1. Name: Evelyn Robin

2. Appearance: She is a tall and pretty 14-year-old girl. Her hair sweeps down to her waist but is usually tied back in a braid with a small, satin red bow. Her eyes are a soft blue and she wears a pastel colored dress every day. Her skin is pale.

3. Background: She comes from a rich family and has always been an only child... or so she thinks. When she was 5 she was in a bad car crash and injured her leg badly. Now, she has a slight limp. She is very smart and could read chapter books when she was 5. Her parents don't pay much attention to her, mostly due to the fact that they are always away on business trips to different countries. Luckily, she has a housekeeper, Mary Johnson (40 years old, also pretty) who is her best friend.

4. Personality: She is a very timid and shy character. She isn't very good at making friends, so therefore doesn't have any. However, she is quite nice. She loves to paint and play violin and piano.

5. How she is different from others: She comes from a rich background, for one, and is abnormally smart. Also, when she plays the violin or piano, the song is so sweet that a songbird will come to her window and sing along with her. This helps her in moments of anger or depression. It calms her nerves. This songbird is her only other friend. No none else knows about the songbird.

6. What she most desires/hopes: She hopes that one day her parents will actually notice her and be kind to her and at least spend some time with her. She also hopes that she will find a friend of her own age.

7. How she is strong: She is kind-hearted (usually) and will help others, even though she isn't good at making friends.

8. How she is weak or vulnerable: She is timid and shy. People bully her because of this.

9. What she fears most: She fears cars, because of the car crash, and will never go near one.

10. Crowd Sorcery sentences:

Evelyn stomped home in a rage. When she got through the door, she hurled her bag onto the nearest chair and sat down next to it, head in hands. Mary, the housekeeper, came through the kitchen door.

"What happened?" she asked.

"I was bullied by this boy in school. He called me snake-hair, because of my braid," Evelyn mumbled.

"Why don't you go upstairs and play your violin? It sounds ever so beautiful when you play, and it does calm your nerves," Mary suggested.

"Alright," Evelyn replied, less furious. She got up slowly and walked upstairs to her music studio, where she proceeded to tune her violin. When finished, she got up slowly and opened the window. Then she picked up the violin and started to play.

Immediately the room filled with heavenly notes. Evelyn played airliy and with ease. Soon, a voice filled the room, singing in harmony. Not human.

It was her songbird.

 

Sorry if it's too much, I just love to write! 

submitted by Kaelyn C., age 12, UK, originally US
(June 16, 2014 - 9:52 am)

1. Name

Gatso Muldoonosh

2. Appearance

Portly fellow, with several chins, grey fur, unnaturally short whiskers, unnaturally long tail, and the most odd looking eyes. They are like copper coins. (He has copper colored eyes, unlike other common cats)

3. Background

Was the best friend of a very important (and rich) man. Gatso was very pampered. Was lost somewhere in New York city, and was knocked out in an alley. He was then, as he says, mugged. He woke up in a pile of trash outside of a huge apartment building. On March 15, to the cunning voice of his worst enemy.

4. Personality

Rather sefish, yet caring. Also, he thinks before he acts, which can be annoying to the others. He is hated byother cats because of his luxery and that he looks down upon the poor.

5. How is he/she different from others?

Gatso is a cat who abhores all salmon. He also has been trained to do a special form of talking. "Thee feesh are verry uglee, and they are not raised properlee." -Gatso Muldoonosh (about salmon)

6. What does he/she most desire or hope for?

A home that will suffice his needs, and friends.

7. How is he/she strong?

His copper eyes can search out food. He can sence food from a mile away. Also, he can be very brave.

8. How is he/she weak or vulnerable?

He has no friends, and he does not know what it is to be poor. without his old master, he must live with the normal cats.

He also refuses to set foot onto anything water related. 

9. What does he/she fear most?

Rattus, the evil mouse who, in reality, is just a toy. (Not to be confused with Mussius, the evil rat.)

10. Your Crowd Sorcery Sentence(s)

Gatso Muldoonosh was a dainty cat, according to himself. He did not know the other cats were calling him rude names behind his back. Namely clumsy doorstop, one of the worst names to be called in cat history. Gatso was sitting in front of a butcher shop looking hungrly at the sausages displayed in the window.

Suddenly, he heard it. A faint cry coming from the gutter. It was in the special language of him and his only friend! He went to investigate. He saw a small face peak out, remove the grate on the gutter, and grabbed Gatso by the leg and yanked him inside. Gatso squieled for help, but all the other cats looked at him in disgust and surprise that he could fit into the gutter. As it turned out, the gutter was not a gutter.

 

Sorry so long!

 

submitted by Puff the MagicDragon, age By the Sea, who lives
(June 19, 2014 - 6:03 pm)

1. Marcus Glazd

2. Dark olive skin, navy eyes, very slim and lanky but tall, dark black hair, has on pesent clothes.

3. Comes from a long line of potters and sculpters, dads side. On mothers side, a few kings and one famusly crazy inventor. both mom and dad disappeared and he lives alone. 

4. Usually shy, more freindly once you get to know him, always hungry, whether for books or food, determened once he has put his mind to something.

5. Whenever he gets nervous or scared, wind picks up and it gets very cloudy. He can "disappear" in the shadows. Jumps really high (which leads to a lot of brusies). Can see in the dark.

6. To be alone in a nice,warm, partly dark room with lots of books and food so he can stay there forever and be at peace.

7. As I said, very determined, has the powers of a shade. Never breaks a promise.

8. Allergic to cooked chicken (don't ask me why), hates bright light, betrayal crushes his willpower.

9. Losing friends/family again, being embarrassed, torture.

10. "So, I walk into the tunnel, think of my village, and I'll appear there?" Marcus panted.

"Yep," Darven replied.

 "Don't worry, the rest of the Ambassadors will be fine," added Kira, reading his face.

Marcus opened his mouth to reply, but his two friends had already left. He sprinted tword the tunnel with all his might. Think, think, think. his last thought was, "Wait didn't we agree on Crazy Creture People?" before the ground disappeared. 

 

submitted by Quinn S., age 11, Snohomish, WA
(June 29, 2014 - 9:34 am)

Name: Lahana Marriette

Personality Description: Prefers to be left alone, but is always looking for new friends. she is quiet and clever, and is creepy to anyone who is not acquainted with her.

Heretige: Half elf, one fourth human, one fourth vampire (althought she does not know it)

Her story: She is a powerful elementalist, and works mostly with fire. She is sent out to catch the evil vampire that is killing people in her town, even though it will be impossible. She's the vampire. She unconsciously comes out at night for blood. When she finds out, she also finds that someone is evil and controlling her. She must find and defeat him, while trying to save her village from herself. 

Physical Description: Her skin is very pale, and she has some mysterious scars on her right forearm (they are from her evil master), she is tall and thin, with long, shining black hair that's curly, coming almost down to her waist. She has stunning blue eyes, but when she is in vampire form they turn firey red. She wears a flowing black dress, which is mysteriously stained with something red every morning when she wakes up. She also happens to have very long canine teeth. (I wonder why?)

 
Sorry if there were some spelling errors in there, I HATE spelling! 

submitted by Little Sister, age 11, New Hampshire
(June 30, 2014 - 11:37 am)

Just wondering, why do all these characters have to have dead parents?

submitted by Esperanza, age A number, Imladris, ME
(June 30, 2014 - 4:33 pm)

Because it makes the story interesting!

submitted by Jules, age 11
(July 3, 2014 - 6:45 pm)

It gives your character more flexibility. Parents worry and that gets in the way of your heroes.

submitted by Ley, age 12, earth
(September 10, 2014 - 4:34 pm)

1. Salogeul Dragonflame

2. Tall, tan skin, ice blue eyes, long black hair, small grin, black fur jacket, thick black pants, leather boots, small scar on forehead in the shape of an arrow.

3. Salogeul was a prince when he was young. However before he was even 5 his parents' kingdom was razed by an evil enemy. He was the only known survivor of the attack. Some travelers searching the kingdom searched for survivors and found him. They returned to their village with him. At age 7 he joined military training. When he was 13 he joined the village defense team. Now at age 14 he has decided he wants to find the army the killed all his kinspeople, the elves of the East.

4. Salogeul can be relaxed at times, but during battle he becomes very serious.

5. Salogeul is the last of the Eastern Dwarves. He also has an uncanny ability for archery. He can also see in the dark and run much faster than most humans.

6. Salogeul hopes to find the army that killed his parents and end their threat.

7. Salogeul has an unmatchable will. He is not a quitter. He will keep fighting the good fight.

8. Salogeul is physically weak to anything made from bones. This was common among Eastern elves. However he is mentally weakened whenever he is in the area of the Western, Northern, and Southern elf kingdoms.

9. Salogeul fears losing the lives of the people who trusted him.
10. "He has an unmatchable fiery passion and will, hence the name Dragonflame."

submitted by Aiden D, age 11, Gainesville, Florida
(June 30, 2014 - 7:22 pm)

i will start drawing right away!

submitted by Little Sister, age 11, New Hampshire
(July 1, 2014 - 9:28 am)

the drawing is posted in a coment in the "Sneak Peek" section.

submitted by Little Sister, age 11, New Hampshire
(July 1, 2014 - 11:34 am)

1. Name

Aaron Wheeland (later known as Soulcatcher)

2. Appearance 

Tall. Pale skin. Long white hair. He has eyes the color of deep water. He is around sixteen years old. 

3. Background

His mother left when he was eleven. His father is abusive. He has practically raised his little sister, Emma, who is eight. His best friend (whom he happens to have a crush on) is Raven Lawrence. 

4. Personality

Originally a shy introvert, Aaron has a personality change in the story and becomes an antihero and has a very dark personality. He is full of hate and a longing for revenge against a world that has always chewed him up and spit him out. This is characterized by a necklace he owns. It has a bead for every true friend of his and once he removes a bead, it never goes back on.

5. How is he/she different from others?

One night, after a party where he and his best friend argue furiously, he is driving home. Simultaneously around the world, weird bolts of energy strike a bunch of random people, including Aaron. When he returns to consciousness, he has the abilities of cryokinesis and reanimating the dead via stimulation of their nervous system. His attempts at vigilantic acts to right wrongs in his small town and in neighboring areas are cataclysmic. Governments crack down on these enhanced humans. When the crackdown supposedly kills Aaron's sister, he spirals out of control, fighting human governments and causing global mayhem, all in the name of protecting the enhanced. 

6. What does he/she most desire or hope for?

To see his sister again. She is his one link to sanity. 

7. How is he/she strong?

His powers are almost unbeatable, even by the group of Enhanced known as the Olympians, who fight for humans. 

8. How is he/she weak or vulnerable?

He is vulnerable to heat and fire.  

9. What does he/she fear most?

That he has gone too far and cannot undo his actions. He also fears that someday his power will disipate. 

10. Your Crowd Sorcery Sentence(s)

Behind Aaron, the skyscrapers of the Chicago skyline keeled under their burden of ice. Glass shattered from the cold, creating a staccato rhythm to the destruction. "Massster, they are no moooore," the undead creature whispered in Aaron's mind. Aaron did not smile at his revenge, nor wipe the tears of grief from his face, "The humans are responsible," he whispered, "and they shall all pay."

submitted by Daniel H., age 16, North Carolina
(June 30, 2014 - 10:01 pm)

Name: Errin

Appearance: Jet black hair, always wears a long, purple cape, moderately tall

Background: Errin lived with his parents and sister Annie in a large village in the middle of a forest. At age eight, his village was attacked by Wraiths and was destroyed. Luckily no one was hurt badly, and they managed to relocate everybody. Then he was transported along with some of his friends and Annie to the School of Magic. There he learned the art of sorcery.

Personality: Loves playing jokes and making new friends.

How is he/she different from the others? Unlike most students at the School of Magic, Errin is a near expert on dragons, and has kept one as a pet before.

What does he/she most desire or hope for? Errin most desires that Morgeon, the leader of the dragons, would come out of hiding from black magic.

How is he/she strong? Errin is unnaturally brave.

How is he/she weak or vulnerable? Errin can't always control his magical abilities.

What does he/she fear most? The ghostly Wraiths, the servants of those who practice black magic.

As the wraith reached out it's dark hand towards him and his friends, Errin immediately whipped out his wand. He was going to stop this thing from destroying his school and friends if it was the last thing he did. Errin quickly recited a spell that he knew by heart and white tendrils of flame licked out from the tip of his wand. At seeing the life magic, the monster recoiled, hissed out words that Errin couldn't make out, and flew back down the hallway. He had saved the School of Magic from harm.

 

 

submitted by Will T., age 14, Georgia
(July 1, 2014 - 8:30 am)

The voting for hero and heroine is now complete. Go here to see our main character and learn the schedule for creating and voting on a villain and sidekick.

You can still add to the Hero and Heroine thread for fun.
submitted by Admin
(July 1, 2014 - 11:04 am)

i think the main charecter should be named gamma 

and be half frog and be able to jump realy high and capture people with his tounge. 

submitted by owen.a, age 11, new york
(July 2, 2014 - 2:19 pm)
I forgot Feather has a familier, a living potato named Sngpzpud.
submitted by Megan C.
(July 3, 2014 - 5:02 pm)