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Regular poetry thread (because I'm tired of not editing my poems)
This is exactly what it sounds like! A thread to post poetry. I'm excited to read all of your work!
submitted by Bluebird
(April 30, 2017 - 8:51 pm)
(April 30, 2017 - 8:51 pm)
Lumi, this is beautiful!! There's so much feeling, and it tells a story in such a graceful way. I love the way you interspersed the italics, it makes the poem flow so nicely. I really loved it!
(March 4, 2021 - 2:51 pm)
Mnnnn, this is so sad in a good way... It feels like something out of a more realistic movie.
I'm glad you were able to gain some confidence in your poetry! I'm not exactly great at articulating it and leaving comments, but I've read a lot of your poems before and they really are amazing!
(March 4, 2021 - 6:17 pm)
First, this poem is wonderful! I love the way the emotion shows so clearly in the words, and the story is told so well. I really like the lines, "I don't want to break your heart / because I can't / without breaking mine". They capture this whole dilemma quite easily. I haven't been in a situation like this, but I can tell you've captured it well.
Second, if I'm being honest, I didn't think this would be you! Of the poems I've seen you post on the poetry contest, they've always been super good! Like the one with a girl during WW2 and a girl during Covid talking to each other across a century... I really love that one :). Your poems are fantabulous, and I'm so glad I was able to give you what you needed to remember those things! So basically... Stay awesome :)
(March 6, 2021 - 8:23 am)
Tranquility
A pool unsplashed
By any pebble
A cat
Lying down in the sun
Peaceful
Quiet
Sleepy
It comes
And goes
And never stays for long
(March 4, 2021 - 2:32 pm)
Ooh, I love the way you create such a perfect atmosphere in just a few words, Star Princess! That's really cool, and in my opinion, difficult to do. It's just so crisp and concise, though! >w<
(March 4, 2021 - 6:06 pm)
Thanks Jaybells, that's really nice of you!
(March 6, 2021 - 11:49 am)
Paradise?
~~~~~~~~~~
Drift away
Even as they talk,
Run away
To a place where you belong;
Fly away
From all the complicated
And shifting colours,
Slip away
Into the pouring rain;
To your very own
paradise...
And now you're gone.
(March 4, 2021 - 6:13 pm)
That Streetlight
~~~~~~~~~~
That streetlight
Stark straight in the dark
Light piercing right through the night
Boring as can be;
If you ignore its history.
If you ignore the blood
Spilled beneath its spot
If you ignore the frozen
Cold and shivering in snow
before sweaty summer hot
Nights filled with who-knows-what
And silence and people living lives;
Of ice and thoughts and tear-stained
teens carrying knives;
But of course streetlights can't talk
And all the nice and not-so-nice stories
About change and differences
And how some things always stay the same,
That streetlight's not there anymore,
For that, and all those lost memories
Who's the one to blame?
(March 4, 2021 - 6:27 pm)
Ahhh sorry I haven't been on this thread for a while! Jaybells, this is so wonderful and haunting and mysterious all at the same time. It's so amazing how you can take something as regular as a streetlight and turn it into a twisted sort of storyteller~
(March 4, 2021 - 10:47 pm)
Empty
Empty words,
Empty smiles,
Empty gift-bearing hands;
Hollow hearts,
Hollow "loves",
Hollow diamond wedding bands;
So many jealous eyes
Of what turns out to be plain empty lies,
Who would've thought
This would be the outcome of that dream,
Long forsought.
(March 4, 2021 - 6:37 pm)
Those
Three
Little
Dots
Right in the middle of your sentence
Those
Three
Little
Dots
Niggling at my sanity
There's no space after them-
There's a lowercase after them-
There should be a space,
then uppercase right after them-
Says my hyper-active brain;
What do they MEAN-
WHAT ARE THEY SUPPOSED TO MEAN?
Says my now-screeching brain;
What bad things
Will happen?
What horrid news
Do you have
to break?
For
in response to my question, you say:
"Yes...okay."
Why those
Three
Little
Dots
Oh lord, just why, oh
Why those
Three
Little
Dots
When you could just simply say:
"Yes, okay."
(March 5, 2021 - 11:15 am)
Something a lot like this actually happened to me! The way someone phrased a text left a lot of wondering and confusion in its wake... I can totally relate! (Also, I have a hyper-grammar-correcter part of my brain too; seems like we have a lot in common! :))
(March 6, 2021 - 8:31 am)
So relatable omg
(March 12, 2021 - 10:48 pm)
Ghosts
Are just figments
Of grief-stricken minds
That haunt
The ones still living
And poison their hearts
They eat
Away at the survivors'
Sanity, seeding paranoia there
Like that ring
On my finger that's not actually there
But its memory still stains my days,
I could swear
I can still feel it there
Hugging my finger;
But it's not
It's all over
It's all been over
For a very, very long time.
Yes, it's over.
But the ghost of that ring
On my finger
Still haunts me
To this day.
(March 6, 2021 - 3:26 pm)
Funny
How littlest actions
Can make the brightest futures
How the smallest mishaps in Fate's weaving
Can make the biggest differences
Funny
How the tiniest mistake
Was the biggest mistake of my life
(March 6, 2021 - 3:48 pm)