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Regular poetry thread

Regular poetry thread (because I'm tired of not editing my poems)

This is exactly what it sounds like! A thread to post poetry. I'm excited to read all of your work!

submitted by Bluebird
(April 30, 2017 - 8:51 pm)

This poetry is the total best XD

Way to go 

submitted by Shawwie, age 11, Bham, AL
(November 17, 2019 - 2:30 pm)

ribs

——

tissue paper

in strips across my bedroom floor

green and gold and

lily white

a gift

a curse

pretty blue paper bag

open-mouthed and gaping

hungry

hungry

an angel, half-formed

hand on her hip

a chisel at her stomach

unreal and almost lovely

broken, boneless

shards of marble like rivers

down her face

parsed down to the essentials—

beauty is such

a little thing.

submitted by Abigail, age Old enough, Inside my head
(November 13, 2019 - 8:59 pm)
submitted by top
(November 13, 2019 - 9:04 pm)

Posting again bc I want this thread to top, goshdarnit! I've been reading some of my older poetry, and wow, has my style changed a LOT. Now it's a lot more... oblique. It's gotten in simpler in some ways and more confusing in others. I don't know if I'm entirely sold on it. Thoughts?

——

eight of hearts

door blown wide.

spilled across the doorstep

in puddles of light:

my insides shuffled like a deck of cards

fifty two pickup at your feet.

my pride triumphs in safety

but i know 

how this story goes.

aching for someday that is probably never

tangled breath, waiting wondering

sweet things twisting bitter

at a toss of her grin—

green and almost pretty and

falling to pieces.

pompeii inside and out

for want of a hand like a 

question mark

on my back.

your smile in the darkness.

jawline backlit, a knife through

buttery air.

like an itch i can’t quite scratch

hands unfolding eyes unfinding—

waiting. waiting. for

the other shoe

to drop. 

submitted by Abigail, age Old enough, Inside my head
(November 13, 2019 - 10:56 pm)

Oh, I love your style, I wish mine could be more like yours. Honestly I don't know what I'm trying to say half the time, so yeah mine needs some work XP

submitted by LS@Abi
(November 14, 2019 - 9:41 pm)

Memories

 

Flashes of color

fill my mind

images, feelings

of days before this one.

Was it always

this happy?

Was everything

so beautiful

in the moment?

Maybe.

But maybe not.

We dream

of what once was

because it seems

better.

But in reality,

it never was. 

submitted by Winterblue
(November 16, 2019 - 8:48 pm)

I really love your style! I think you write really well and it runs deep. Good job! :3 :> :) :0

submitted by Shawwie, age 11, Bham, AL
(November 17, 2019 - 2:34 pm)

 

The Cave

By (Shawwie)



The silence was a cloth that smothered your ears. The haze in the cave where you were hiding covered your senses like a dark mask. The slow staccato of raindrops tap-danced on the ground. Wispy fog drifted around your body and whispered about you. You felt an irresistible urge to curl up into a ball and forget the war and try to forget the Nazis. You heard a rustle in the darkness and you were stricken with fear. You moved further back into the cave, hugging the cold, rocky, surface of a stalagmite. Outside, you suddenly heard footsteps and harsh words in German. You held your breath for a million years. The footsteps ceased. Then, there was silence yet again.

I wrote this for one of my English projects and I decided I should submit it here

It isn't rhyming couplets like signature poetry but it's free verse.

Tell me what you think  

 

 

submitted by Shawwie, age 11, Bham, AL
(November 17, 2019 - 2:27 pm)

I really like this, the way you describe things is amazing! Though, there is one thing I think I would change. Instead of having everything as one paragraph, try having line breaks and stuff.

Example:

"The silence was a cloth

that smothered your ears

the haze in the cave 

where you were hiding 

covered your senses

like a dark mask"

It can have short lines, long lines, whateves. But I feel like when it is a paragraph it feels more like a story. (I know poems are supposed to tell a story, but, you know, it's just not the same) I'm not trying to be rude, it's a really good poem. 

submitted by Sunshine W.@Shawwie, age 10, nowhere to be found
(November 29, 2019 - 9:49 am)

Yrah, I love all the imagery!

submitted by Jaybells, age Classified, Lost in the Universe
(December 4, 2019 - 12:24 pm)

Snow Haiku 

I don't want snow yet

Maybe around Christmas time

Not in November 

 

 

submitted by Lilac, age Secret, Lake of Tears
(November 19, 2019 - 5:00 pm)

I haven't been on here in a while, but I wrote this recently and decided I wanted to post it. (its pretty long)

Fairwell, my love~

my love

i can't let go 

of you

all the way

i know you're 

going away

to somewhere better

though i wish 

you could stay

right here 

in my arms

i can't 

let go of

my love

fo you

i can't bid 

you fairwell

unless you

promise me

you will forever

remember me

i can't bear

to say goodbye

unless you say

"i promise"

because i will

never forget you

and i hope

you will do 

the same

~

"i promise"

you swear

so i 

bid you fairwell

though i hope

not forever

my love

i will never

let you go 

 

 

submitted by Sunshine Wings, age 10, nowhere to be found
(November 29, 2019 - 9:36 am)
Gone
~~~~~
Lost--
Slipped though my fingers--
Gone.
Broken
Promises left unfulfilled,
Pained;
Cold,
Hard, dark, empty
Eyes.
All the times you reassured me,
All the times you smiled, sure and easy,
Eyes soft and warm and welcoming;
Manner relaxed, enjoyable, loving.
"I'll always be at your side," 
You always said;
And now
You're gone--
Lost.
Caught in your web
Of well-meaning lies. 
submitted by Jaybells, age Classified, Lost in the Universe
(December 4, 2019 - 12:49 pm)

top

submitted by Sunshine Topping, age 10, the top of the world
(December 9, 2019 - 8:29 pm)

Sunlight

~~~~~

A bouncy, bright 

Day, lighting up your 

Dreams;

 

Cool dampness of

Another morning's rain

Shined right away;

 

The last golden rays 

Slipping through your

Fingers;

 

But you know it's okay, 

Because tomorrow's sun

Will bring a new day. 

submitted by Jaybells, age Classified, Lost in the Universe
(December 10, 2019 - 8:41 pm)